Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct small grammar mistakes, and make the answer coherent with linking words. Avoid contradicting phrases (e.g., say you currently don’t have time rather than 'I'll have time to play'). Start with a clear topic sentence, add one specific supporting detail, use a linking word, and finish with a short plan. Keep to 3–4 sentences.

예시: I enjoy playing basketball and have done so since I was 15. I played for local leagues in several towns, which helped me improve my teamwork and shooting. However, at the moment I am busy with assignments, so I rarely play; nevertheless, I plan to join the university evening basketball club to practice twice a week.

제안: This answer is clear and specific but can be slightly tightened and linked better. Begin with a direct topic sentence, provide one or two specific examples of what you drew, use a linking word to connect past and present, and conclude with a concise future plan. Keep sentences natural and avoid unnecessary repetition.

예시: Yes, I used to attend art classes as a child and often drew futuristic cityscapes and character designs. However, I haven't practised recently because of my studies; nevertheless, I hope to resume sketching and take an advanced illustration course next year to improve my technique.

제안: Avoid off-topic comments (e.g., 'That's a great question') and make the reason logical. The sentence saying studies are demanding conflicts with 'since childhood'—clarify timeline. Use linking words to explain past habit vs current situation and a concise plan. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, basketball has been my hobby since childhood and I used to play regularly. Although my architecture studies are demanding now and I rarely play, I plan to join a nearby indoor sports facility so I can practise with others on weekends.

제안: Remove filled pauses ('uh') and give a clearer topic sentence. Use one linking word to connect ideas and be slightly more specific about how you bond (e.g., watching matches or playing together). Keep answer concise and natural (3 sentences).

예시: Yes, we share an interest in basketball. My mother played when she was young and we often watch matches or play casually together, which helps us bond. She is the family member whose hobby most closely matches mine.

× However, at the moment I'm very busy with assignments so I'll have time to play.

✓ However, at the moment I'm very busy with assignments so I won't have time to play.

The student used 'I'll have' which indicates future willingness/ability, but context 'at the moment' refers to current lack of time; the intended meaning is inability now, so use 'I won't have time'. Suggestion: match time reference and use correct future negative form 'will not' for inability in future reference or 'don't have' for present inability.

× Basketball has been my hobby since childhood because my architecture studies are demanding.

✓ Basketball has been my hobby since childhood, but my architecture studies are demanding.

The original sentence uses 'because' which implies that demanding studies are the reason basketball has been the hobby; logically the student means basketball continued since childhood but now studies are demanding, preventing play. Replace 'because' with 'but' to show contrast. Suggestion: ensure conjunction matches intended relationship (cause vs contrast).

× I don't play currently, but I plan to join an indoor sports facility nearby so I can practice regularly with others on the weekends.

✓ I don't play at the moment, but I plan to join an indoor sports facility nearby so I can practice regularly with others on weekends.

'Currently' is acceptable but 'at the moment' fits spoken style; also 'on the weekends' is acceptable but 'on weekends' is more natural in general statements. This is a minor stylistic tense/time expression issue: align adverbs with spoken tone and general habits. Suggestion: use consistent time expressions ('at the moment' for now, 'on weekends' for habitual actions).

× That's a great question. Basketball has been my hobby since childhood because my architecture studies are demanding.

✓ That's a great question. Basketball has been my hobby since childhood; however, my architecture studies are demanding.

Using 'because' creates a causal link that doesn't make sense: demanding studies would not cause a childhood hobby. Rephrase to separate ideas and show contrast using 'however' or a semicolon. Suggestion: when linking two independent clauses with contrasting ideas, use 'but', 'however', or a semicolon.

× I started when I was 15 and played for local leagues in different towns.

✓ I started when I was 15 and played for local leagues in different towns.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed. Included for completeness: past tense 'started' and 'played' correctly match the time reference 'when I was 15'.

× I haven't practiced recently because of my studies, but I would like to resume sketching and take an advanced illustration course next year to improve my technique.

✓ I haven't practiced recently because of my studies, but I would like to resume sketching and take an advanced illustration course next year to improve my technique.

Sentence is correct: present perfect 'haven't practiced recently' correctly indicates an action that has not happened up to now; 'would like' and 'next year' correctly express future intention. No correction necessary.

× I would say she is the family member whose hobby most closely matches mine.

✓ I would say she is the family member whose hobby most closely matches mine.

Sentence is grammatically correct and pronoun reference 'she' clearly refers to my mother mentioned earlier. No correction necessary.