Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and directly state your hobby, then give one or two clear, specific reasons using linking words. Correct pronunciation and grammar (e.g., "quite" not "quiet"), and avoid filler words like "uh." Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: I enjoy playing soccer because I'm an outgoing person who likes outdoor activities. For example, playing soccer keeps me fit and helps me make friends, which I find fun and motivating.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence about your childhood hobby, then give one or two specific details (what you read, how often). Use linking words like "so" or "because" correctly, and avoid repetition. Improve grammar and pronunciation (e.g., "quiet and introverted", "I used to stay at home").

예시: When I was a child, I enjoyed reading books. Because I was quite introverted, I read short stories and comics almost every day, which helped me learn new words and imagine different worlds.

제안: Answer directly and succinctly, then explain with a specific example of how it has impacted you. Reduce hesitations and awkward phrases (e.g., "improve my active energy" is unclear). Use linking words like "because" or "so." Keep within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I have played the guitar since I was a child. Because music gives me energy and relaxes me, playing guitar helps me express my feelings and feel alive, especially when I perform for friends.

제안: Begin with a clear yes/no and state the shared hobby, then give specific details (where you go, how often, what you enjoy). Correct verb forms and nouns (e.g., "we hike mountains", "we go to Harvey?" — clarify place name). Avoid fillers and repetition.

예시: Yes, my family and I enjoy hiking together. We usually hike a nearby mountain every Sunday because it keeps us fit and gives us valuable time to talk and relax away from the city.

× Yes, uh, my hobby is playing soccer because I'm quiet an outgoing person.

✓ Yes, my hobby is playing soccer because I'm quite an outgoing person.

The word 'quiet' is an adjective meaning 'silent'; the intended adverb is 'quite' meaning 'rather' or 'very'. Use 'quite' before an adjective to modify it. Suggestion: replace 'quiet' with 'quite' when you want to intensify the adjective 'outgoing'.

× So I usually enjoy the outdoor active especially I enjoy the I most enjoy activities playing soccer.

✓ So I usually enjoy outdoor activities, especially playing soccer.

Incorrect preposition and word order: 'the outdoor active' is not correct; use the noun 'activities' with adjective 'outdoor'. Remove redundant phrases 'I enjoy the I most enjoy'. Suggestion: use 'enjoy outdoor activities' and place 'especially playing soccer' at the end for clarity.

× Uh, it is very uh, it definitely will stay improved and.

✓ Playing soccer definitely helps me stay healthy and improve.

Original is fragmented and lacks clear subject-verb-object structure. 'It definitely will stay improved and' is ungrammatical. Recast the idea to state what soccer does for the speaker: use a clear subject ('Playing soccer') and verbs ('helps me stay', 'improve').

× Uh, when I was younger, I was quiet on enter and troubled and troubled person.

✓ When I was younger, I was quite introverted and a troubled person.

Again 'quiet' should be 'quite' if intensifying; 'on enter' seems to be a phonetic error for 'introvert' or 'introverted'. Use 'introverted' as adjective. Also avoid repeating 'troubled'. Suggestion: 'quite introverted and troubled' conveys intended meaning.

× So I, I usually stayed it at home.

✓ So I usually stayed at home.

Extra pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect; reduce duplicated 'I, I'. The correct phrase is 'stayed at home'.

× So I leading, I, I open dating lead a book every day, little book.

✓ So I spent time reading a small book every day.

Original mixes incorrect verb forms and extra words ('leading', 'open dating lead'). Use a clear past or habitual expression: 'spent time reading' or 'read a small book every day'. Suggestion: 'I read a small book every day' for habitual past.

× It was my hobby when I was younger.

✓ It was my hobby when I was younger.

Sentence is grammatically correct as past tense; no change needed. Kept for context; no correction required.

× Of course, uh, playing guitar is my hobby, uh, since I was younger, uh, playing guitar, it helps me improve my active energy.

✓ Of course, playing the guitar has been my hobby since I was young; it helps me increase my energy.

Redundant phrasing and tense inconsistency: 'is my hobby since I was younger' should be 'has been my hobby since I was young' to indicate continuation from past to present. 'Improve my active energy' is awkward; use 'increase my energy' or 'boost my energy'. Also remove repeated 'playing guitar'.

× Also, music is my life.

✓ Also, music is my life.

This sentence is acceptable as an idiomatic expression; no grammatical correction needed. Included for completeness.

× So when I, when I play guitar, I feel, I feel alive, alive moment.

✓ So when I play the guitar, I feel alive in the moment.

Remove repeated phrases 'I, when I' and 'I feel, I feel'; combine into a single clause. 'Alive moment' is ungrammatical; use 'alive in the moment' or 'alive' alone.

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

✓ Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

This question is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included for context.

× Of course, I usually hiking a mountain with my family.

✓ Of course, I usually hike mountains with my family.

Incorrect verb form 'hiking' used after auxiliary 'I usually'; use base form 'hike'. 'A mountain' vs plural 'mountains' depends on meaning; 'hike mountains' or 'hike a mountain' both possible. Suggestion: 'hike mountains' for general habit.

× Uh, hiking a mountain is help help my family to improve the fitness.

✓ Hiking in the mountains helps my family improve their fitness.

Use 'helps' for subject-verb agreement and remove duplicate 'help'. Use preposition 'in' or 'in the mountains' and 'improve their fitness' rather than 'the fitness'. Suggestion: match subject-verb number and use appropriate preposition.

× So, so stay active.

✓ So we stay active.

Fragment 'So, so stay active' lacks subject. Use 'we stay active' to clarify who remains active. Also remove duplicate 'so'.

× Uh, my family go to Harvey every Sunday.

✓ My family goes to Harvey every Sunday.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'family' as a collective noun usually takes singular verb 'goes' in American English. If intended plural, use 'family members go'. Suggestion: 'My family goes to Harvey every Sunday.'

× This time is very valuable for me.

✓ This time is very valuable to me.

Use preposition 'to' with 'valuable' to indicate for whom it is valuable. 'Valuable for me' is not strictly wrong but 'valuable to me' is more natural in this context. Suggestion: prefer 'valuable to me'.