Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答总体清晰且信息连贯，但可改进的地方包括：1) 使用更自然的时态和衔接词（例如“used to”后接过去细节，现况用现在完成或一般现在）；2) 避免冗长或重复表达，压缩为不超过5句；3) 增加更具体的细节（例如跑步频率、地点或你怎样安排时间），并用连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: I used to play basketball a lot in middle school and I loved the thrill of scoring. Nowadays I prefer jogging because it helps me focus on my breathing and clear my mind. I usually jog three times a week in the nearby park, which makes me feel calmer and more energetic. Because it’s low-impact, I find it easier to keep up regularly.

제안: 回答内容具体且有例子，但时态不一致（过去时应统一），并可加入连接词和更具体的影响或结果，使回答更完整。注意句子数量不超过5句。

예시: When I was in kindergarten I loved folding paper into animals, flowers and little vehicles. Doing origami sparked my creativity and taught me patience because it often took many attempts to get the shape right. As a result, I felt proud when I finished a model and often showed it to my family.

제안: 回答有趣且富有个人色彩，但描述“dreaming”作为爱好时需更自然地表达原因和频率，并可补充如何记录或利用这些梦（例如写梦日记）。另外可用连接词增强逻辑性，避免重复“I”开头的句子。

예시: I’ve loved daydreaming and sleeping since I was a child because my dreams are extremely vivid. I often remember them and sometimes write them down in a notebook to revisit later. I especially enjoy dreams where I can fly or meet historical figures, since they feel exciting and inspiring.

제안: 回答表达存在语法和用词问题（如“my mom and me”应为“my mom and I”；“wild animals stinging”用词不当），并且句子略长且重复。建议简化句子，使用正确搭配，增加具体细节（例：去哪里、多久一次），并用连接词分隔观点。

예시: My mom and I both enjoy hiking and exploring nature, so we often take short trips together. We love seeing wildflowers and spotting animals along the trails. Usually we plan a new trip every couple of months to explore different parks.

× I used to love playing basketball when I was in middle school. I enjoyed the sense of achievement when I got the score.

✓ I used to love playing basketball when I was in middle school. I enjoyed the sense of achievement when I scored.

“got the score” 用法不自然。描述得分时应使用動詞“score” 的過去式 “scored”。另外保留“used to”和“enjoyed” 保持過去習慣和過去感受的一致性。建議使用 “scored” 表達更地道的英語。

× But now I prefer jogging because during that I concentrate more on my footsteps and my breath, which calms me down.

✓ But now I prefer jogging because during it I concentrate more on my footsteps and my breathing, which calms me down.

句中“during that” 用法不當，應使用代詞“it”指代前面的活動；“my breath” 在此處更自然的表達是“my breathing”。這屬於介詞/代詞使用和名詞形式的問題（歸類為現在時相關用法），建議使用“during it” 和 “breathing”。

× When I was in kindergarten, I love playing paper folding.

✓ When I was in kindergarten, I loved doing paper folding.

時間狀語“when I was in kindergarten” 指過去，主句動詞應使用過去時，故“love” 應改為“loved”。此外“playing paper folding” 不自然，應用“doing paper folding” 或 “folding paper”。建議改為 “loved doing paper folding” 或 “loved folding paper”。

× I folded paper into animals, flowers, or little vehicles.

✓ I folded paper into animals, flowers, or little vehicles.

此句語法正確，但“little vehicles” 稍微不自然，可以保留原句或改為 “little cars” 更口語；此處不屬於列出的錯誤類型，因此保持不改。

× Since childhood, I've loved dreaming. I often enjoy falling asleep because my dreams are very vivid.

✓ Since childhood, I've loved dreaming. I often enjoy falling asleep because my dreams are very vivid.

此處時態和用法正確，無需修改。保持現在完成時“I've loved” 與一般現在的敘述一致。

× I especially like the dreams that I can experience things that are impossible in real life, such as flying or meeting historic figures.

✓ I especially like dreams in which I can experience things that are impossible in real life, such as flying or meeting historic figures.

原句中“the dreams that I can experience things” 結構冗長且關係子句使用不當。改為“dreams in which I can experience things” 更符合英語表達，避免重複“that”。此為代詞/關係子句使用不當，建議使用“in which” 或重構為兩句。

× My mom and me love going on a trip, we enjoy being connected to the nature and also we love the wildflowers and wild animals stinging on the trails.

✓ My mom and I love going on trips; we enjoy being connected to nature and we also love the wildflowers and wild animals we see on the trails.

“My mom and me” 應為主格“My mom and I”；“going on a trip” 在習慣表達上可改為複數“going on trips” 或保持單數視語境；“connected to the nature” 中“the” 不必要，應為“connected to nature”；“wild animals stinging on the trails” 用詞錯誤，“stinging” 意為“螫/刺”，動物通常不“sting” 小径，應改為“we see on the trails” 或其他合適動詞。以上為代詞、冠詞和詞彙使用錯誤，建議使用主格、去掉不必要的定冠詞並用正確動詞描述動物行為。

× So we often go on a trip together and planning for the next trip.

✓ So we often go on trips together and plan for the next trip.

句中“go on a trip” 可改為習慣性表達複數“go on trips”；“and planning for the next trip” 缺少主語或與前半句時態不一致，應改為動詞原形“plan” 與前半句並列，或改為“and are planning” 若要表示現在進行時。建議將兩個動詞並列使用相同時態：“go... and plan...”。