Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), use correct noun forms and concise reasons with linking words. Aim for 2–4 sentences and include specific details (what kind of books, how often you read).

예시: My favorite hobby is reading books. I usually read fiction and popular science two to three times a week because they help me relax and learn new ideas. For example, reading science articles improved my general knowledge and vocabulary.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and chronological detail. Use simple past correctly and avoid repetition. Add a brief example or memory to make it specific and use linking words like "when" or "because."

예시: Yes, my favourite hobby as a child was playing football. When I was about ten, I often went to the local field with my friends after school because we loved practicing together. I remember we trained every weekend and played small matches, which made me more confident.

제안: Use correct verb forms and clearer phrasing. Begin with a direct statement, then add concise supporting details with linking words. Mention frequency and specific benefits to make the answer concrete.

예시: Yes, I have been playing football since I was a child. I play with friends whenever I have spare time, usually two or three times a week, because I enjoy teamwork and it keeps me fit. Playing football also helps me relax and improves my concentration.

제안: Make a clear statement about shared hobbies and provide specific details about who participates and how often. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" to explain feelings or reasons.

예시: Yes, some of my family members also enjoy playing football. On weekends my parents and I often go to the local field and play together for an hour, which makes me happy because we spend quality time and stay active.

× I have many hobbies and my favorite hobby is uh, reading book.

✓ I have many hobbies and my favorite hobby is reading books.

The noun 'book' is countable and here it refers to the activity of reading in general, so it should be plural 'books' or use an uncountable phrase 'reading' or 'reading books'. Use of the zero article with an uncountable gerund ('reading') or plural ('reading books') is correct.

× And it is good thing, uh, when I read book and I know new thing and I gain knowledge, uh, it is good for me, uh.

✓ Reading is good because I learn new things and gain knowledge; it is good for me.

The original sentence has redundant filler words and incorrect articles and number ('book' and 'thing'). Rephrase to a clear gerund subject 'Reading' and use plural 'things' and parallel verbs 'learn' and 'gain'. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× Yes, I had several hobbies as child, but my favorite hobby was playing football It is it is my favorite hobby when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had several hobbies as a child, but my favorite was playing football. It was my favorite hobby when I was a child.

Use the past tense consistently for past situations. Missing article 'a' before 'child' and run-on sentence issues. Repeat the corrected past-tense phrasing and include the article 'a'.

× This time I you know good went to field with my friend we are playing lots of.

✓ Back then I used to go to the field with my friends and we played a lot.

The original mixes tenses and contains word order errors and incorrect expressions ('you know good went', 'lots of'). For past habitual actions use 'used to' or simple past 'went' and plural 'friends', and use 'played a lot' for activity frequency in the past.

× I have blabbed playing football since I was a child.

✓ I have been playing football since I was a child.

'Blabbed' is incorrect here; the present perfect continuous 'have been playing' is used to describe an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Use 'playing' as the main verb and the correct auxiliary form.

× I play whenever I have spare time, usually with friends because I enjoy the teamwork and keep me fit.

✓ I play whenever I have spare time, usually with friends, because I enjoy the teamwork and it keeps me fit.

Subject and verb agreement: 'it keeps me fit' requires 'it' as the subject and third-person singular verb 'keeps'. Also add commas for clarity and ensure parallel structure.

× It is feel me relax and happy.

✓ It makes me feel relaxed and happy.

The verb 'feel' is used incorrectly; use 'make' in the correct form 'makes me feel' and the adjective 'relaxed' to describe state. Subject-verb agreement: 'it makes' (third person singular).

× Yes, I have the same hobbies in my family member when I get free time this time I go to field with my family with my parents and we are playing lots of and.

✓ Yes, I share the same hobbies with my family. When I have free time, I go to the field with my parents and we play a lot together.

Use 'share ... with' rather than 'have ... in my family member'. Correct 'when I have free time' for tense and word order. Use plural 'parents' and 'play a lot together' for natural phrasing. Remove extra filler words and fix prepositions ('to the field').

× And this time I feel happy and I enjoying this moment and because it is.

✓ I feel happy and enjoy the moment because of this.

Use present simple 'enjoy' rather than 'I enjoying' (which needs auxiliary 'am enjoying'). Remove the sentence fragment 'because it is' and complete the reason: 'because of this' or state the reason explicitly. Ensure correct verb forms and concise structure.