Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (thể hiện thói quen bằng thì hiện tại đơn: I chat/I like watching movies), dùng từ chính xác (watching movies, friend -> friends nếu chung chung), và giảm sự lặp từ. Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể và một liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I have several hobbies. I often chat with my friends on my iPhone in my free time, which helps me relax and keep in touch. I also enjoy watching movies, especially comedies, because they are light-hearted and help me unwind.

제안: Sử dụng thì quá khứ liên tục/hợp lý khi nói về quá khứ (I had), tránh tiếng ấp úng và từ thừa. Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề, sau đó đưa chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại trò chơi ghép hình, tần suất) và liên từ để mạch lạc.

예시: Yes, I did. I had many hobbies as a child, but my main one was doing jigsaw puzzles with my brother. We used to spend hours on 500-piece puzzles every weekend, which improved my patience and concentration.

제안: Cần dùng thì hiện tại hoàn thành đúng (I've had) và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng. Tránh lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp (e.g., 'at the summer' -> 'in the summer'; 'a kite' -> 'kites' or 'flying kites'). Hoàn thành ý (tại sao thích, một kỷ niệm cụ thể). Hạn chế lặp từ và ấp úng.

예시: Yes, I have. I've loved flying kites since I was a child, especially in the summer. I enjoy watching colourful kites soar high because it reminds me of carefree days and family picnics at the park.

제안: Câu trả lời hiện rối và có nhiều lỗi (ngữ pháp, trật tự từ, từ không phù hợp). Cần trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích cụ thể: ai chia sẻ sở thích nào, ví dụ hoạt động cùng nhau, tần suất. Dùng từ đúng (my mum and I like singing; 'action is very light' không rõ nghĩa—nên nói 'it's relaxing' hoặc 'it's fun').

예시: Yes. My mum and I both enjoy singing, and we often sing together at family gatherings. Singing is relaxing and helps us bond, and we sometimes record simple videos to share with relatives.

× I like chatting with my friend in my free time on my iPhone.

✓ I like chatting with my friends in my free time on my iPhone.

The noun 'friend' should be plural ('friends') if the speaker refers to chatting with more than one friend; use plural to match the general activity. Suggestion: decide if you mean one specific friend (keep 'my friend') or more people (use 'my friends').

× I also like watching movie film because it is very relaxed.

✓ I also like watching films because they are very relaxing.

'Movie film' is redundant; use 'films' or 'movies'. 'Relaxed' describes a person; the correct adjective for an activity is 'relaxing'. Also plural 'films' matches general preference. Suggestion: say 'watching films' and use 'relaxing' to describe the experience.

× Oh yes I have. I have many hobbies when I was a child, but umm, the typical hobby is uh, playing puzzle with my uh, brother.

✓ Oh yes I did. I had many hobbies when I was a child, but the typical one was playing puzzles with my brother.

The question asks about past habits, so use past tense: 'did' and 'had'. 'When I was a child' requires past tense. 'The typical hobby is' should be past 'was'. 'Playing puzzle' should be 'playing puzzles' or 'doing puzzles'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently and pluralize 'puzzles'.

× Oh yes I umm I have had some hobbies what since childhood such as flying a kite at the summer.

✓ Oh yes, I have had some hobbies since childhood, such as flying kites in the summer.

Remove extra words 'what' and duplicate 'I'. Use present perfect 'have had' correctly with 'since childhood'. 'Flying a kite at the summer' is ungrammatical: use plural 'kites' or 'flying a kite' and preposition 'in the summer'. Suggestion: simplify the sentence and use correct preposition 'in'.

× I I really like a kite because it is very beautiful and when I see.

✓ I really like kites because they are very beautiful when I see them.

Sentence was fragmented. Use plural 'kites' to express general preference. Complete the clause 'when I see them' to finish the idea. Suggestion: avoid leaving clauses unfinished and match pronouns in number.

× Yes I do, I have the same hobbies as my mum bought bought me and my mum like singing because the action is very light.

✓ Yes I do. My mum bought me similar things, and my mum and I both like singing because it is relaxing.

Original mixes ideas and repeats words. 'The same hobbies as my mum bought bought me' is ungrammatical; separate ideas: gifts my mum bought and shared hobbies. 'The action is very light' is unclear; use 'it is relaxing'. Pronouns must be clear: 'my mum and I both like singing'. Suggestion: split into two sentences and use clear pronouns and vocabulary.