Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 질문에 바로 답한 점은 좋습니다. 다만 반복(예: "writing writing", "my manga" 여러 번)과 망설임 표현("umm")을 줄이고 문장을 간결하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한 연결어를 사용해 아이디어를 자연스럽게 이어주고, 구체적인 활동이나 이유(예: 하루에 얼마나 그리는지, 어떤 도구를 사용하는지)를 덧붙이면 내용이 풍부해집니다.

예시: Yes. I enjoy drawing manga. I create original characters and develop storyboards for my comics, which I find both fun and useful for improving my storytelling. For example, I usually sketch for an hour every evening and use digital software to color my drawings.

제안: 답변이 명확하지 않고 반복과 어색한 표현이 많습니다(예: "between between around of my age"). 어린 시절 취미를 설명할 때는 게임 이름을 확실히 말하고 간단한 규칙이나 이유를 설명하면 좋습니다. 또한 망설임을 줄이고 문장을 주어-동사 구조로 명확히 만드세요.

예시: When I was a child, I enjoyed playing a game called Chombigo, which is similar to tag. I liked it because it was exciting and allowed me to play with my friends after school.

제안: 좋은 내용(오랜 기간 지속된 취미)을 제시했지만 시제와 문법(예: "I have worked" vs "I have worked on" 또는 "I have been drawing"), 그리고 동사 형태("always drawing")를 정확히 사용하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 연결어로 기간을 강조하고 구체적인 예시(특정 작품이나 기억)를 추가하세요.

예시: Yes. I have been drawing manga since childhood. I often write storylines and create original characters; for example, when I was ten I designed a character that later became part of a longer comic series.

제안: 가족과의 공통 취미를 말한 점은 좋지만 표현이 어색합니다(예: "My mom really like", "reading a literature", "I really like with"). 주어와 동사의 일치, 적절한 명사 사용, 그리고 더 구체적인 정보(공유하는 활동, 함께 하는 방식)를 넣어 자연스럽게 말하세요.

예시: Yes. My mother enjoys reading literature, and I like it too. We often discuss novels together, and sometimes we recommend books to each other, which helps me discover new authors.

× Yes, my hobby is drawing my manga umm, I always make some original characters for comics and write writing my storyboards and working on my storylines.

✓ Yes, my hobby is drawing manga; I always create original characters for comics, write storyboards, and work on my storylines.

Multiple issues: incorrect use of redundant 'my' with manga and repeated '-ing' forms like 'write writing'. Use base verbs for coordinated activities after a semicolon or conjunction: 'create', 'write', 'work'. Use 'drawing manga' not 'drawing my manga' unless referring to a specific personal manga; omit filler words. Suggestion: list parallel verbs in the same form (create, write, work).

× Umm maybe I my hobby was always playing a game umm between between around of my age they always play the game called the Chombigo.

✓ Maybe my hobby was always playing a game; around my age, we always played a game called Chombigo.

Tense and subject problems: narrative refers to childhood so past tense 'played' is required, not present 'play'. Also unclear subject—use 'we' for people of that age. Remove duplicated words and incorrect preposition 'between around of'. Suggestion: use simple past and clear subjects ('we played').

× I really like playing this game so my hobby was playing the zombie go.

✓ I really liked playing this game, so my hobby was playing Zombie Go.

Tense consistency: when speaking about a childhood hobby, keep past tense 'liked'. Also capitalization of the game name and unnecessary article 'the' removed. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout the childhood narrative.

× I have worked on my manga since childhood.

✓ I have been working on my manga since childhood.

'Since childhood' indicates an action that started in the past and continues to the present, so present perfect continuous (have been working) is more natural than simple present perfect 'have worked'. Suggestion: use present perfect continuous for ongoing activities that began in the past.

× I always drawing manga and writing my storylines and sometimes I made new original characters for comics.

✓ I have always drawn manga and written my storylines, and sometimes I make new original characters for my comics.

Mixed tenses and verb forms: 'I always drawing' is incorrect; use past participle 'drawn' with present perfect for ongoing habit ('have always drawn') or present simple if habitual now. 'Writing my storylines' should match tense. 'Sometimes I made' mixes past; use present simple 'I sometimes make' or present perfect depending on intended meaning. Suggestion: choose consistent tense (present perfect for ongoing activities) and parallel verb forms.

× Yes I have. My mom really like to read the books, especially reading a literature.

✓ Yes, I do. My mom really likes to read books, especially literature.

Subject-verb agreement: third-person singular 'my mom' requires 'likes', not 'like'. Article and noun use: 'read the books' is unnatural; 'read books' is general. 'Reading a literature' is incorrect—use uncountable 'literature' without an article. Suggestion: use 'likes' and remove unnecessary articles.

× And I really like with uh, literature too.

✓ And I really like literature, too.

Incorrect preposition 'like with'—'like' does not require 'with'. Remove filler sounds and use comma before 'too' for clarity. Suggestion: say 'I really like literature, too.'