Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Do you have any hobbies?
수험생
Yes I do. I actually have numerous hobbies which includes singing, painting, playing the guitar, writing journals, and playing sports like basketball since these activities really help me relax and calm down.
시험관
Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?
수험생
Yes, when I was a child, I used to engage myself in a cultural activities like singing and dancing since I genuinely loved being a part of these activities and I was also a part of many school shows where I had to dance and sing simultaneously since I was really good at them.
시험관
Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood?
수험생
Yes, there is a hobby that I've had since childhood and that is singing. I was inspired by my dad, who is one of the greatest singers in our family, and it really motivated me to sing songs in public shows and, uh, family gatherings, which really built.
시험관
Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?
수험생
Well, yeah, both yes and no, because my hobbies are similar to that of my dad's, whereas my brother, his hobby is to play cricketer and he aspires to be a cricket player in the future. Whereas my mom, she has always loved cooking and that's her hobby. And As for my grandmother, it's probably watching politics and news shows.
평가
총점
Part 1
Do you have any hobbies?
점수: 78.0제안: Make the response more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples with brief reasons. Avoid redundancy and long lists without structure.
예시: Yes, I have several hobbies. For example, I enjoy singing and playing the guitar because they help me relax and express myself; I also paint occasionally, which I find calming and creatively satisfying.
Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?
점수: 72.0제안: Open with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific example and one reason. Remove repetitive phrases and ensure correct article use. Use linking words to connect ideas.
예시: Yes, I enjoyed cultural activities like singing and dancing as a child. For instance, I often took part in school shows where I sang and danced together, which helped me build confidence and stage presence.
Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood?
점수: 68.0제안: Give a complete, well-structured answer: clear topic sentence, specific details about how the hobby developed, and a concise conclusion. Avoid filler sounds and unfinished sentences.
예시: Yes, I have sung since childhood, inspired by my father who is a talented singer. His encouragement led me to perform at family gatherings and school events, which improved my confidence and vocal skills.
Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?
점수: 70.0제안: Respond directly and organize information clearly. Start with a topic sentence stating similarity and difference, then give one-sentence specifics about each family member using correct grammar and concise phrasing. Avoid filler words like 'well' and repeated connectors.
예시: I share some hobbies with my father, such as singing, but my family members have different interests. For example, my brother enjoys playing cricket and hopes to be a professional player, my mother loves cooking, and my grandmother often watches political news.
문법
× I actually have numerous hobbies which includes singing, painting, playing the guitar, writing journals, and playing sports like basketball since these activities really help me relax and calm down.
✓ I actually have numerous hobbies which include singing, painting, playing the guitar, writing in journals, and playing sports like basketball since these activities really help me relax and calm down.
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