Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid unclear phrases. Use one or two supporting details linked with a conjunction. Be specific about frequency and benefits. Also keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy playing football. I practice with my school team three times a week after classes, which helps me stay fit and improves my teamwork skills. Playing regularly also keeps me energetic and reduces stress.

제안: Answer directly with correct tense and clearer structure. State the hobby in past tense, then add a specific supporting detail linked by a connective. Avoid vague phrases like 'other group search.'

예시: Yes, when I was a child I liked playing football. I usually played with a neighborhood group every afternoon, and we organized small matches that helped me learn basic skills and make friends.

제안: Use correct tense and clarify the game name (e.g., hide-and-seek). Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give specific details and link them logically. Keep sentences concise and natural.

예시: Yes, since childhood I loved playing hide-and-seek. I enjoyed the excitement of hiding and the laughter when someone found me, and those games remind me of carefree afternoons spent with friends.

제안: Improve grammar and cohesion: use correct verb forms and linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then contrast your hobbies with family members using linking words like 'for example' or 'on the other hand.' Be specific about their hobbies.

예시: Not really — I don't share the same hobbies as my family. For example, my mother enjoys reading novels, while my sister is passionate about playing the piano, so our interests are quite different.

× Yes I love sports at UMM spotty type especially enjoy play football.

✓ Yes. I love sports, especially playing football at UMM's sports facility.

Original sentence has awkward word order, missing punctuation, and incorrect verb form. 'enjoy play' should be 'enjoy playing' (verb + -ing). 'UMM spotty type' appears to be a mistranslation; corrected to 'UMM's sports facility' to convey location. Add a comma after 'sports' and use periods to separate clauses for clarity.

× I practice with my team after school because it keep me fit and stay healthy.

✓ I practice with my team after school because it keeps me fit and helps me stay healthy.

Two issues: subject-verb agreement ('it keep' should be 'it keeps') and parallel structure with verbs. Adding 'helps me' clarifies the second result and 'stay' is correct but pairs with 'helps me' for parallelism.

× When I was a child, I like the same thing when I was in the other group search playing football.

✓ When I was a child, I liked the same things and used to play football in another group.

Tense mismatch: 'When I was a child' requires past tense 'liked' not 'like'. The phrase 'in the other group search' is unclear; interpreted as 'in another group'. Use 'used to play' or simple past 'played' to indicate habitual past action.

× When it was a child, I love playing high and sick.

✓ When I was a child, I loved playing hide and seek.

Incorrect pronoun 'it' instead of 'I', wrong tense 'love' should be past 'loved', and 'high and sick' is a misspelling of 'hide and seek'. Corrected to coherent past-tense sentence.

× I enjoyed the excitement of hiding and the laughter when someone found me, and those games remind me of my carefree afternoon with my friends.

✓ I enjoyed the excitement of hiding and the laughter when someone found me, and those games reminded me of carefree afternoons with my friends.

Tense consistency: sentence begins in past tense 'enjoyed' so following clause should also be past 'reminded' not present 'remind'. Also pluralize 'afternoon' to 'afternoons' to match habitual past activity.

× I don't really have the same hobbies as my family members. For example, my mother's love reading book, meanwhile my sister really into playing the piano.

✓ I don't really have the same hobbies as my family members. For example, my mother loves reading books, while my sister is really into playing the piano.

Multiple issues: 'mother's love' should be third-person singular 'mother loves' (third person singular error) and 'reading book' needs plural 'books' or 'reading a book'. 'Meanwhile' is awkward; 'while' is better for contrast. 'my sister really into' needs auxiliary verb 'is' to form correct present-tense structure. Also corrected article usage for 'piano' by keeping 'playing the piano' which is correct.