Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: حاول تنظيم إجابتك بحيث تبدأ بجملة موضوع واضحة واتباعها بتفاصيل محددة قصيرة. تجنّب التكرار والصرامة في استخدام الأزمنة. ركّز على إزالة الحشو (مثل "uh" و"umm" و"yes" المكررة)، وصغ جمل صحيحة نحوياً مثل: "I enjoy several hobbies, especially reading and cooking." ثم أضف جملة واحدة أو اثنتين توضح كيف أو متى تمارس هذه الهوايات.

예시: I enjoy several hobbies, especially reading and cooking. I often cook sweets and snacks, either with my mother or by myself on weekends.

제안: ابدأ بجملة مباشرة تُجيب عن السؤال وباستخدام زمن الماضي لوصف الطفولة. استخدم تراكيب صحيحة (مثل "I enjoyed painting" بدلاً من "I have a hobby when I was a child"). كن محدداً أكثر في الوصف وقدّم أمثلة بسيطة. تجنّب الأخطاء في المفرد والجمع وترتيب الكلمات.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed painting when I was a child. I used to draw on paper with bright colors and sometimes I did these activities with my sisters; we often created colorful pictures together.

제안: استخدم زمن الحاضر التام أو الماضي للتعبير عن استمرار الهواية منذ الطفولة وابتعد عن الأخطاء في الضمائر والصياغة (مثل "I liked 2 cookings"). صغ جملة موضوع واضحة: "Yes, I have enjoyed cooking since I was a child." ثم قدّم تفاصيل محددة حول كيف تعلمت الطبخ ومن تطبخ له. تجنّب كلمات غير واضحة أو مبتورة.

예시: Yes, I have enjoyed cooking since I was a child. I learned by watching my grandmother and mother in the kitchen, and I often helped them prepare meals for the family.

제안: أجب بصيغة واضحة ومباشرة مع استخدام الضمائر الصحيحة وتركيب مفرد/جمع مناسب. ابدأ بجملة موضوعية مثل "Yes, my mother also likes cooking." ثم أضف جملة واحدة توضح كيف تتشابه هواياتكم أو كيف تختلف. تجنّب الحشو والتكرار وأخطاء الضمائر (he/she) والصياغة الغامضة.

예시: Yes, my mother also likes cooking, so we share the same hobby. She cooks delicious and creative meals, and sometimes we cook together at home.

× Yes, I love yes I like a lot of hobbies.

✓ Yes, I love many hobbies.

The original sentence uses redundant words and incorrect quantifier 'a lot of' with 'hobbies'; use 'many hobbies' for countable plural. Also remove repeated 'yes' and streamline the phrase.

× Some of that reading and cooking is a lot.

✓ Some of them are reading and cooking; I do them a lot.

'Some of that' is incorrect for listing activities; use 'some of them' or a simple list. 'Is a lot' is ungrammatical; use 'I do them a lot' to express frequency.

× I love cookings all the time.

✓ I love cooking all the time.

'Cookings' is not a correct plural noun; 'cooking' is an uncountable noun or gerund. Use the gerund 'cooking' without -s.

× Umm with my mom or uh alone I cooked a sweets, snacks or the lunch.

✓ Sometimes with my mom and sometimes alone I cook sweets, snacks, or lunch.

Preposition and article use are incorrect. Use 'with my mom' and 'alone' as adverbial phrases. Use present tense 'cook' to match habitual action and remove 'a' before plural 'sweets'.

× Yes, I have a hobby when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a hobby when I was a child.

Mixing present 'have' with past time reference 'when I was a child' is incorrect. Use past tense 'had' for past habits.

× It's a it is a paint.

✓ It was painting.

'Paint' as a noun is not the best choice; use 'painting' to refer to the activity, and match past tense 'was' for childhood.

× I like to drawing on a papers with a lot of colors and sometime I do this activities with my sisters.

✓ I liked drawing on paper with many colors and sometimes I did these activities with my sisters.

After 'like' use the base verb 'to draw' or gerund 'drawing'; for past context use 'liked'. 'Papers' should be uncountable 'paper' or 'pieces of paper'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'This activities' should be 'these activities' (demonstrative-plural agreement).

× We make an Anna different.

✓ We made different drawings or drawings of Anna.

Original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. Provide a clear object: 'different drawings' or specify 'drawings of Anna' depending on intended meaning; use past tense 'made' for childhood.

× Yes the cooking hobbies, I liked 2 cookings a lot.

✓ Yes, cooking was a hobby; I liked cooking a lot.

'The cooking hobbies' is awkward; 'cooking was a hobby' is clearer. '2' should be 'to' if intended, but here 'liked to cook' or 'liked cooking' is correct. Avoid pluralizing 'cooking'.

× I see my grandmother's and my mother's when he **** in her kitchens and all the times I help them to make enough foods for my others family.

✓ I saw my grandmother and my mother when they cooked in their kitchens, and I often helped them make enough food for the rest of the family.

Pronouns are incorrect: use 'they' for plural subjects and 'their' for possessive. Use past tense 'saw' and 'helped' for childhood. 'Foods' should be 'food' (uncountable). 'My others family' should be 'the rest of the family'.

× I think yes my mother also like cooking a lot.

✓ Yes, I think my mother also likes cooking a lot.

Subject-verb agreement: 'mother' is third person singular, so verb should be 'likes'. Add commas for clarity.

× Umm sometimes he cook in a delicious foods and creative when it creates.

✓ Sometimes she cooks delicious and creative dishes.

Pronoun 'he' is wrong for 'mother'; use 'she'. Verb should be 'cooks' for third person singular. 'Delicious foods' is better as 'delicious dishes'; 'creative when it creates' is ungrammatical and removed for clarity.

× When she cooked uh to us, he do a lot of uh good taste and delicious food.

✓ When she cooked for us, she made very tasty and delicious food.

Pronoun inconsistency: use 'she' throughout. 'Cooked to us' should be 'cooked for us'. 'Do a lot of good taste' is ungrammatical; use 'made very tasty food'.