Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitive phrases, correct grammar (e.g., "I like dancing" not "I like to dance with myself"), and add one specific detail about the style or purpose of dancing. Limit to 3–4 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I do have a hobby: I enjoy dancing in my free time. I usually practise contemporary and hip-hop moves alone in my room because it helps me relax and improve my fitness. Sometimes I learn new steps from online tutorials to challenge myself.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and specific details with correct grammar and tense. Avoid filler phrases and repetition. Explain what you read (e.g., history books, adventure stories), why you liked it, and whether you still read now, using linking words like "because" or "so".

예시: Yes, I enjoyed reading when I was a child, especially history books and adventure stories. I liked them because they taught me about different times and cultures. I still read occasionally now, although I don't have as much free time as I did then.

제안: Start directly and use correct verb forms and concise phrasing. Mention how often you play, a specific memory or achievement, and use linking words like "so" or "because." Remove hesitations ("uh") and redundant phrases.

예시: Yes, I've played football since I was a child and I still enjoy it. I play with my brothers several times a week at a local ground because it keeps me fit and lets us bond. Once, our team won a neighbourhood tournament, which was a highlight for me.

제안: Answer directly and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, phrasing). Give a brief reason and add a contrasting detail about one family member's hobby to make it specific. Use linking words like "however" or "so."

예시: No, I don't share the same hobbies with my family. For example, my sister prefers painting while I like sports, so we rarely practice hobbies together. However, we sometimes support each other at events.

× Well, to talk about this question, yes of course I have hobbies.

✓ Well, to answer this question, yes, of course I have hobbies.

Use of 'to talk about this question' is unnatural; 'to answer this question' matches context and present simple 'have' is correct. Also add commas for clarity.

× I like to dance whenever I have free time, I like to dance with myself alone at home and my room.

✓ I like to dance whenever I have free time; I like to dance alone in my room at home.

Use of 'with myself' and word order 'at home and my room' are incorrect. Use 'alone' and correct prepositional phrase 'in my room at home'. Also separate clauses properly with a semicolon or period.

× I prefer to dance alone and learn some new dance step alone.

✓ I prefer dancing alone and learning some new dance steps by myself.

After 'prefer' either 'to' + verb or gerund is used; here gerunds 'dancing' and 'learning' are natural. 'Dance step' should be plural 'dance steps' and 'by myself' is clearer than repeating 'alone'.

× Well to talk about this question, yes of course I did have a reading hobbies when I was a child.

✓ Well, to answer this question, yes, of course I had a reading hobby when I was a child.

Use simple past 'had' instead of 'did have' for a statement. 'A reading hobbies' mixes singular/plural; use 'a reading hobby' or 'reading hobbies' with correct article.

× I like to reading something new and historical things when I was a child.

✓ I liked reading new and historical things when I was a child.

'Like to reading' is incorrect; use 'liked reading' (past tense) or 'like reading' (present). Maintain past tense 'was' with 'liked'. 'Something new and historical things' is redundant; 'new and historical things' suffices.

× I still loves to do sometimes but I can do like in child.

✓ I still love to do that sometimes, but I cannot do it as I did when I was a child.

Subject 'I' requires verb 'love' (not 'loves'). 'Do sometimes' needs object 'that' and clearer comparison 'as I did when I was a child'. Use 'cannot' or 'can't' and full phrase for clarity.

× Where to talk about discussion? Yes, of course, I have a hobby since my childhood.

✓ To answer the question, yes, of course I have had a hobby since my childhood.

'Where to talk about discussion?' is ungrammatical—use 'To answer the question'. For an action continuing from past to present use present perfect 'have had' with 'since my childhood'.

× I like to play football since my childhood, and I still loves to play uh football.

✓ I have liked playing football since my childhood, and I still love playing football.

Use present perfect 'have liked' with 'since' to indicate an ongoing activity. 'I still loves' should be 'I still love' (subject-verb agreement). Use gerund 'playing football' for natural phrasing.

× Whenever I have free time, I prefer to play football with my brothers in ground.

✓ Whenever I have free time, I prefer to play football with my brothers on the ground.

Use preposition 'on' with 'ground' in this context, and include article 'the ground'. Alternatively 'in the field' or 'at the park' may be more natural.

× Want to talk about this questions. No, I don't have any same hobbies as my family members because my family members and me was not usually that close to share our hobbies.

✓ To answer the question: no, I do not have the same hobbies as my family members because we were not usually close enough to share our hobbies.

Begin with a clear phrase 'To answer the question'. Use 'the same hobbies' (article). Replace 'my family members and me was' with 'we were' for correct subject-verb agreement and pronoun choice. 'Close enough to share' conveys intended meaning and correct word order.