Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail and a linking word. Avoid tense and grammar errors (use present simple) and correct phrasing like "improve my teamwork skills."

예시: Yes, I do. I often play mobile games online with my friends, which helps me relax and also improves my teamwork skills because we have to coordinate strategies.

제안: Give a clear answer in past tense and identify the hobby with specific details. Use linking words to list examples and correct noun forms. Avoid vague phrases and unclear descriptions.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child I used to play traditional card games and a game with a rubber band; these were popular in my country and we played them with friends during breaks.

제안: Answer directly using present perfect or past simple to show continuity. State the hobby clearly and add a specific example or frequency with a linking word. Fix tense and wording errors.

예시: Yes, I have. Since childhood I have enjoyed playing hide-and-seek; we played it often in my neighborhood after school, and I still play simple outdoor games occasionally.

제안: Respond with a clear topic sentence and provide one specific reason. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, natural adverbs) and avoid repetition. Replace vague words like "hopefully" with clearer ones like "often."

예시: Yes, I do. My brother and I often play mobile online games together because it helps us bond and relax after a busy day.

× Yes, I have a hobby. I play mobile games online with my friends because it helped me to enjoy and to improve my skill as a teamwork.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby. I play mobile games online with my friends because they help me enjoy myself and improve my teamwork skills.

Errors: 'helped' is past tense but context is present, so use present 'help'; 'to enjoy' awkward — use 'enjoy myself'; 'to improve my skill as a teamwork' is ungrammatical: 'teamwork' is a noun and 'skill' should be plural 'skills' and 'teamwork skills' is the correct collocation. Also 'mobile games' is plural so use 'they' not implied singular. Suggestion: keep present tense for habitual activities and use correct collocations: 'help me enjoy myself' and 'improve my teamwork skills'. (Grammar problem type IDs: 6 and 1) '

× Yes, I have a hobbies. My hobbies is playing something, a card, text card that we play in my country that payments played and the rubber band we play rubber band.

✓ Yes, I have hobbies. My hobbies are playing card games, text-card games that we play in my country, and playing with rubber bands.

Errors: 'I have a hobbies' — article/plural mismatch; should be 'I have hobbies' or 'I have a hobby'. 'My hobbies is' — subject-verb agreement, use 'are' for plural 'hobbies' (type 27 and 1). 'playing something, a card, text card' is vague and unidiomatic; specify 'card games' and 'text-card games'. 'that payments played' is unclear and incorrect; likely unnecessary. 'the rubber band we play rubber band' — repetition and word choice; use 'playing with rubber bands'. Suggestion: use correct plural forms and match verb agreement, and choose clear nouns for activities. (Grammar problem type IDs: 1, 27, 26)

× When I'm young, we play something new in my country that I have a play. Sometimes we play hide and seek.

✓ When I was young, we played traditional games in my country. Sometimes we played hide-and-seek.

Errors: 'When I'm young' mixes present with past — use 'When I was young' for past context (type 5/6). 'we play something new' — tense and wording wrong for past habitual action: use 'we played'. 'I have a play' is ungrammatical; remove or rephrase as 'we played traditional games'. 'hide and seek' is idiomatically 'hide-and-seek'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for childhood activities and use correct noun phrases for games. (Grammar problem type IDs: 5, 6, 26)

× Yes, I have a brother with him play mobile online games. We hopefully play because this is the way how we bond together and this this is is a fun for us and enjoy.

✓ Yes, I have a brother. He plays mobile online games with me. We often play together because it is a way for us to bond, and it is fun for us.

Errors: 'with him play' is incorrect pronoun and verb order; use separate sentences or 'He plays... with me' (type 12). 'He plays' requires third-person singular 'plays' (type 2). 'We hopefully play' is wrong use of 'hopefully'—use 'we often play' or 'we like to play' to express frequency (type 4/20). 'this is the way how we bond together' — redundant 'how'; use 'this is a way for us to bond' (type 16/26). 'this this is is a fun' — repetition and article error: 'it is fun for us' (type 22/13). Suggestion: use correct subject-verb agreement for third person, correct pronouns, avoid redundant words, and choose appropriate adverbs for frequency or attitude.