Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your main hobbies, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and redundancy.

예시: I have several hobbies. For example, I often play cricket with a local team because I enjoy competition and teamwork. I also play online games in my free time to relax and improve my reaction skills.

제안: Use past tense for childhood and give a clear reason with specific details. Begin with a direct statement, then explain why and add one example. Use linking words like because or so.

예시: When I was a child, I didn't have formal hobbies, but I enjoyed playing games with my friends because it helped me relax and build confidence. For instance, we used to play football in the park every weekend.

제안: Answer using correct tense and expand slightly to make the reply natural. If you never had a long-term hobby, explain how your interests developed later and give a brief reason.

예시: No, I haven't kept a hobby since childhood. I only started taking up cricket seriously when I was a teenager because a friend invited me to join his team.

제안: Clarify which hobby you share and why. Avoid irrelevant or unclear remarks. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example and a reason, using linking words such as because or for example.

예시: Yes, I share some hobbies with my father. For example, we both enjoy watching cricket matches together because we like discussing the players and strategies, which is a way for us to bond.

× I have many hobbies like playing cricket and good sportsman, having great game on play game online.

✓ I have many hobbies, such as playing cricket, being a good sportsman, and playing games online.

The original mixes nouns and adjectives incorrectly ('good sportsman' used in place of a verb phrase) and has awkward noun phrases. Use parallel gerund phrases ('playing', 'being') to list hobbies clearly, and use 'such as' to introduce examples. Also change 'play game online' to 'playing games online' for correct verb form and plurality.

× No, I don't have any hobbies in my childhood.

✓ No, I didn't have any hobbies during my childhood.

The clause refers to past time, so use past simple 'didn't have' rather than present 'don't have'. Also use 'during my childhood' or 'when I was a child' for natural phrasing.

× I like to play with my friends only because it's feel me relax and make me confident.

✓ I liked to play with my friends because it made me feel relaxed and confident.

The sentence refers to past habits, so verbs should be in past tense ('liked', 'made', 'feel' → 'feel' must be 'feel' with 'made me feel' structure). 'It's feel me relax' is ungrammatical; use 'made me feel relaxed' and combine with 'confident'. Also remove 'only' or place it correctly if intended.

× No, in childhood I have no hobbies.

✓ No, in my childhood I had no hobbies.

Talking about childhood requires past tense 'had' not present 'have'. Also use 'my childhood' for natural English.

× Yes, my hobbies really seem like my father because I like my father and there are many hobbies like sitting on chair like my father.

✓ Yes, my hobbies are very similar to my father's because I admire him; for example, I enjoy sitting in a chair like he does.

'Seem like my father' is awkward; use 'are similar to my father's'. Possessive form 'my father's' is needed. 'I like my father' is vague—'I admire him' is clearer. 'Sitting on chair like my father' needs article and smoother phrasing: 'sitting in a chair like he does' or 'sitting in a chair like my father'.