Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, tự nhiên và ngữ pháp chính xác hơn. Tránh lỗi như thiếu mạo từ (a/an/the), sai thì, và cấu trúc không hoàn chỉnh. Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes, I do. My favorite hobby is...), dùng liên từ đơn giản khi nối ý (because, so, for example) và đưa thêm chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất hoặc thể loại phim. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

예시: Yes, I do. My favorite hobby is watching movies because they help me relax after a stressful day. For example, I often watch films on Netflix or YouTube a few times a week, usually choosing comedies or dramas to unwind.

제안: Cần dùng thì quá khứ chính xác và cấu trúc rõ ràng. Tránh lỗi như 'were' thay vì 'was', và sử dụng cụm từ phù hợp (cartoons, watch). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ở thì quá khứ (Yes, I did. I used to...), giải thích cụ thể thể loại phim và thói quen (when, how often), và tránh tiếng ừ/khựng quá nhiều.

예시: Yes, I did. I used to love watching cartoons when I was a child, especially detective shows like Conan. After school I would often watch an episode to relax before doing my homework.

제안: Cần sửa cấu trúc câu, chia động từ và dùng danh động từ đúng (Listening to music...). Tránh lỗi từ vựng (whined → unwind?) và hoàn thiện câu chưa kết thúc. Nên nêu rõ tần suất và loại âm nhạc, dùng liên từ để giải thích vì sao thích và kết thúc bằng một câu hoàn chỉnh.

예시: Listening to music has been my hobby since childhood because it helps me relax and feel better. I usually listen to K-pop or V-pop every day while doing homework or traveling.

제안: Cần diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (we have seen that hobbies → we share this hobby). Tránh tiếng 'uh' và dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, on weekends). Nên cụ thể hóa thói quen gia đình (khi nào, loại chương trình) và dùng tối đa 3–4 câu.

예시: Yes, we share the same hobby of watching movies as a family. We usually turn on the TV on weekends and watch films or reality shows together, which is a nice way to relax and bond.

× Yes, I have many hobbies plus my favorite hobby is watching movie.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies, and my favorite hobby is watching movies.

'Watching movie' is incorrect because 'movie' as a countable noun needs plural form when speaking generally; use 'movies'. Also add a conjunction and comma for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural 'movies' when referring to films in general and connect clauses with 'and'.

× This is because it's make me feel relaxed and unwind after stress.

✓ This is because it makes me feel relaxed and helps me unwind after stress.

Subject-verb agreement: after contraction 'it's' (it is) the verb should be 'makes' (third person singular). Also 'unwind' needs a helper 'helps me' to parallel 'makes me'. Suggestion: Use 'it makes' and add 'helps me' to create parallel structure.

× For example, I usually turn on Netflix or YouTube and start some movie to watch.

✓ For example, I usually turn on Netflix or YouTube and start a movie to watch.

Use of article: 'some movie' is unidiomatic; use 'a movie' for a single countable item. Also word order 'start a movie to watch' is acceptable though 'start a movie' is simpler. Suggestion: Say 'start a movie' or 'watch a movie'.

× As I mentioned, I refer watching movie especially in cartoon.

✓ As I mentioned, I used to watch movies, especially cartoons.

Tense and verb choice: 'refer watching' is incorrect; use 'used to watch' to indicate past habit. Use plural 'movies' and 'cartoons'. Suggestion: Use 'used to watch movies, especially cartoons.'

× So when I were to try, I watched a lot of cartoon.

✓ So when I was young, I watched a lot of cartoons.

Incorrect subject-verb agreement and phrasing: 'were to try' is wrong; likely intended 'was young' or 'was a child'. Use singular/plural: 'cartoons'. Suggestion: Use 'when I was young' or 'when I was a child'.

× I remember that after, uh, my school I usually turn Conan to watch.

✓ I remember that after school I usually turned on Conan to watch.

Word order and preposition: 'after, uh, my school' should be 'after school'. Use past tense 'turned on' to match 'remember' about past habit. 'Turn Conan to watch' should be 'turned on Conan'. Suggestion: Say 'after school I usually turned on [Detective] Conan to watch.'

× Listen to music is one of my best hobby to until me right now.

✓ Listening to music is one of my best hobbies until now.

Gerund needed: 'Listening to music' not 'Listen to music'. 'One of my best hobby' requires plural 'hobbies'. 'to until me right now' is ungrammatical; use 'until now' or 'up to now' or better: 'and it still is.' Suggestion: Use 'Listening to music is one of my favorite hobbies and it still is.'

× This is because it's make me feel relaxed and whined.

✓ This is because it makes me feel relaxed and refreshed.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it makes' required. 'Whined' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'wined' is wrong—use 'refreshed' or 'calm'. Suggestion: Use 'it makes me feel relaxed and refreshed.'

× I usually have a habit to turn K pop or V pop to listen when I.

✓ I usually have a habit of playing K-pop or V-pop to listen to when I am relaxing.

Preposition and structure: 'have a habit to' should be 'have a habit of'. 'Turn K pop or V pop to listen' is unidiomatic; use 'play K-pop or V-pop to listen to'. Sentence incomplete 'when I.' needs completion, e.g., 'when I am relaxing'. Suggestion: 'I usually play K-pop or V-pop when I want to relax.'

× Yeah, this is watching movie and my family and I have seen that hobbies.

✓ Yeah, we like watching movies, and my family and I share that hobby.

Plural and phrasing: 'watching movie' should be 'watching movies'. 'have seen that hobbies' is wrong; use 'share that hobby' or 'have that hobby'. Suggestion: 'My family and I share that hobby.'

× We usually, uh, turn on TV and watch some movie.

✓ We usually turn on the TV and watch a movie.

Article and word choice: use 'the TV' and 'a movie' instead of 'some movie'. Suggestion: 'turn on the TV and watch a movie.'

× For example, on the weekend we stay together and watch reality movies.

✓ For example, on the weekends we stay together and watch reality shows.

Time expression: 'on the weekend' is acceptable but 'on the weekends' sounds more natural for repeated action. 'Reality movies' is odd; use 'reality shows'. Suggestion: 'On weekends we stay together and watch reality shows.'