Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation fillers, and give one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Also correct minor grammar (e.g., 'a hobby' → 'any hobbies', 'different kind of series' → 'different kinds of series').

예시: I don't have any hobbies at the moment because I'm busy with my studies and looking after my children. However, in the past I enjoyed relaxing on the sofa and watching different kinds of TV series, especially comedies and dramas.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and grammar, and add specific examples. Use linking words to connect past and present (e.g., 'when I was a child' vs 'now'). Avoid vague phrases and incomplete sentences.

예시: When I was a child, I enjoyed playing outside with my brothers and doing outdoor activities like football and climbing trees. Now, however, I prefer quieter pastimes such as reading books and listening to podcasts.

제안: Answer directly and clearly. If you cannot remember, say so succinctly and explain briefly how interests have changed with age. Reduce hesitation and complete your sentences with specific examples.

예시: I can't remember having a single hobby that lasted since childhood. As I grew older my interests changed — for example, I moved from watching TV and playing outdoors to exploring books and podcasts.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid uncertainty phrases like 'I don't know how to answer this'. Use linking words and give a specific contrast between your hobbies and your family’s. Correct minor phrasing ('stay quite active' → 'prefer quieter activities' if that was intended).

예시: Not really — my brothers enjoy active outdoor sports such as volleyball and hiking, while I prefer quieter activities like reading or listening to music at home.

× I really don't have any hobby right now because I'm currently busy with my studies and umm, and managing and managing my kids.

✓ I really don't have any hobbies right now because I'm currently busy with my studies and managing my kids.

The noun 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' after 'any' when speaking generally. Also remove repeated 'and managing' for clarity. Suggestion: use plural nouns with 'any' when referring to activities in general and avoid repetition.

× In the past, uh, I, I used to just umm, lay down on a sofa and watch different kind of series.

✓ In the past, I used to just lie down on the sofa and watch different kinds of series.

The verb 'lay' is the simple past or transitive verb; the correct infinitive after 'used to' is 'lie' (to recline). Also 'different kind of series' needs plural agreement: 'different kinds of series' or 'different kinds of shows.' Suggestion: use 'lie down' for reclining and match count with 'kinds'.

× I think hobbies are changed is you grow up.

✓ I think hobbies change as you grow up.

Use present simple 'change' for general truth; 'are changed' is passive and incorrect here. 'As' is the correct conjunction meaning 'while/when' you grow up. Suggestion: use active present simple for general statements and 'as' for time relationship.

× So when I was a kid I used to like to play outside with my brothers or I.

✓ So when I was a kid I used to like playing outside with my brothers or alone.

The pronoun 'I' is incorrectly placed after 'or'; it should be 'alone' or 'by myself.' Also prefer gerund 'playing' after 'used to like.' Suggestion: use 'by myself'/'alone' for contrast and use gerund after 'like.'

× But now I just like to reading a book and listening.

✓ But now I just like reading books and listening to music.

After 'like' use the gerund 'reading' (not 'to reading'). 'A book' implies one; 'books' is more natural. 'Listening' needs an object: 'listening to music' or 'listening to audiobooks.' Suggestion: use gerund forms and include the object for 'listening.'

× Honestly I can't remember anyhow is that uh, I have since uh, that I did except watching TV's but but no, I think uh, because as I have grown up the, the heavy chains and hobbies also change so now I just, I just like to explore different.

✓ Honestly I can't remember; I only remember watching TV, but as I have grown up my interests and hobbies have changed, so now I like to explore different things.

This sentence has many issues: 'watching TV's' is incorrect plural and possessive—use 'watching TV' or 'watching TV shows.' 'Heavy chains' is incorrect word choice; intended 'interests.' Use present perfect 'have changed' for change over time. Finish 'explore different' with 'things' or a noun. Suggestion: simplify into clear clauses, use correct nouns (interests), and complete the final phrase.

× Well, I don't know how to answer this, but uh, my family members have different hobbies than me.

✓ Well, I don't know how to answer this, but my family members have different hobbies than I do.

Informal 'than me' is common but in formal grammar use 'than I (do)' because comparison with a verb requires subject pronoun. Suggestion: use 'than I do' for clearer, more formal comparisons.

× My brothers, they are quite umm, active and they like to explore outdoor activities like playing volleyball etcetera.

✓ My brothers are quite active and they like outdoor activities such as playing volleyball.

Remove redundant pronoun 'they' after 'my brothers.' Use 'such as' rather than 'like' before examples and avoid 'etcetera' in speech transcripts. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use 'such as' for examples.

× And I like to stay like quite active.

✓ And I like to stay fairly active.

'Stay like quite active' is awkward: remove filler 'like' and use adverb 'fairly' or 'quite' before 'active.' Suggestion: choose one adverb and place it before the adjective: 'stay quite active' or 'stay fairly active.'