Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific details. Avoid repetition and incorrect prepositions/word forms (e.g., say “I enjoy dancing, singing and painting” or “I used to enjoy these, but now I mainly read novels and non-fiction”). Use linking words like “but” or “however” correctly.

예시: I used to enjoy several hobbies, such as dancing, singing and painting. However, recently I’ve mainly focused on reading a variety of books and novels because I find them relaxing and informative.

제안: Answer directly with past tense and clearer structure: give a topic sentence about childhood hobbies, then 1–2 specific examples with brief reasons. Correct verbs and nouns (e.g., “I played football” not “through the footballs”). Avoid filler words.

예시: Yes. As a child I enjoyed playing outdoor games, especially football, and I spent a lot of time reading storybooks because they helped me imagine new worlds and improve my vocabulary.

제안: State a clear topic sentence in present perfect or present (“I have liked reading since childhood”), then add 1–2 specific reasons and an example. Use correct collocations: “gain knowledge”, “learn about history”, and avoid repeating phrases.

예시: Yes, I have enjoyed reading since childhood. Reading helps me gain knowledge, learn about history and different cultures, and I especially like historical novels that combine facts with engaging stories.

제안: Give a direct short answer, then explain differences with specific examples. Use correct pronouns and grammar, and avoid hesitations. For example: “No, my family prefer active hobbies like playing cards or sports, while I prefer reading because they find it boring.” Use linking words like “however” or “while”.

예시: No, my hobbies are different from my family’s. While most of them prefer social activities such as playing cards and outdoor games, I prefer reading novels because I find it relaxing and mentally stimulating.

× Yes, of course I have a lot of hobbies such as through dancing, singing, paintings and another.

✓ Yes, of course I have a lot of hobbies such as dancing, singing, and painting.

The phrase 'such as through dancing' and 'paintings and another' misuse prepositions and plural forms. Use 'such as' followed directly by gerunds or nouns: 'dancing, singing, and painting'. Remove unnecessary preposition 'through' and use the singular noun 'painting' in a list.

× But nowadays I have I have only one hobby such as which is the reading the different kind of books, novels and another.

✓ But nowadays I have only one hobby, which is reading different kinds of books and novels.

The sentence repeats 'I have' and misuses 'such as which is'. Also 'the reading the different kind of books' has unnecessary articles and incorrect quantifier 'different kind of' should be 'different kinds of'. Use a relative clause 'which is reading...' and remove extra words.

× Yes, of course I have a lot of hobbies when I was child such as to doing the games and also play the different kind of the outside games such as through the footballs and make the good player.

✓ Yes, of course I had a lot of hobbies when I was a child, such as playing games and outdoor sports like football, and becoming a good player.

The time reference is past, so use past tense 'had' and 'was a child'. 'to doing the games' and 'play' are incorrect verb forms; use gerund 'playing'. 'Different kind of the outside games' should be 'outdoor sports' or 'outdoor games'. Also 'through the footballs' is incorrect preposition; use 'like football'.

× But and also I have to reading the books which is one of the easy and one of my favorite hobby in my life.

✓ I also used to read books, which was one of the easiest and one of my favorite hobbies in my life.

Use past habit 'used to read' for childhood. 'Have to reading' is incorrect; 'used to' or 'liked reading' is appropriate. 'Which is one of the easy' should be 'one of the easiest', and 'hobby' must be plural 'hobbies'.

× Yes, of course, reading books is my one of the favorite hobbies that I have the sense of childhood because I think the reading the books, getting the different kind of knowledge and enhance the different kind of the knowledge about novels and another history.

✓ Yes, of course, reading books is one of my favorite hobbies since childhood because reading books gives me different kinds of knowledge about novels and history.

Remove redundant 'my' before 'one of the favorite hobbies' and use 'since childhood' for duration. 'The reading the books' is redundant; use 'reading books'. 'Getting the different kind of knowledge and enhance the different kind of the knowledge' is awkward and mixes forms; use 'gives me different kinds of knowledge' or 'enhances my knowledge'. Use plural 'kinds'.

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

✓ Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

This sentence is correct; no article change is needed. I include it to show that no correction is required.

× No, I think I have not any kind of the hobby same as my family members because most of my family members who do not like to reading the different kind of the novels and books because he think they think that it's very boring.

✓ No, I don't share the same hobbies as my family members because most of them do not like reading different kinds of novels and books; they think it's very boring.

Use negative auxiliary 'don't' instead of 'have not' with 'I'. 'Any kind of the hobby same as' is awkward; use 'share the same hobbies as'. Remove 'who' after 'family members'. Use 'reading' (gerund) without 'to'. 'Different kind of' should be 'different kinds of'. Replace 'he think they think' with 'they think'.

× Uh, work, but only another hand.

✓ On the other hand, they enjoy different activities.

The original fragment 'Uh, work, but only another hand' is incoherent. Use the phrase 'On the other hand' to contrast, and provide a complete clause: 'they enjoy different activities.'

× Some hobbies such as through that, uh, playing cards and playing the games is the same exact as my family member.

✓ Some hobbies, such as playing cards and other games, are the same as my family members'.

Remove 'through that' which is incorrect. Use plural agreement: 'playing cards and other games are the same as my family members'. Also correct subject-verb agreement 'are' and possessive 'my family members' (no trailing noun). Alternatively: '...are the same as my family members'.