Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: use singular/plural correctly, avoid repeated phrasing, and add a brief reason or example to enrich the answer. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use linking words like 'but' or 'when'.

예시: Yes. I enjoy reading and watching movies. When I’m alone, I usually read novels in my study, but when I’m with my family we prefer watching films together, especially comedies that we all find funny.

제안: Clarify vocabulary and tense consistency, and avoid unclear phrases like 'throw pictures'. Use past simple for childhood actions and provide one specific detail or example. Link sentences with 'so' or 'then'.

예시: Yes. As a child I liked drawing imaginary scenes. I would imagine myself standing in front of a castle and carefully draw it on paper, then show the drawings to my parents, who would praise my work and encourage me to keep practicing.

제안: Use consistent tenses (present perfect for ongoing habits) and avoid awkward phrasing like 'may compliment me'. Be concise, state the hobby and give a specific routine or example, using linking words such as 'so' or 'because'.

예시: Yes. I have been drawing since middle school and still enjoy it. I often sketch from my imagination every morning before school, and I usually show the best sketches to my parents because their feedback motivates me to improve.

제안: Correct grammar and phrasing (e.g., 'I feel' not 'I feels'; use simple present for habitual actions). Combine short fragments into full sentences and add a brief contrast using 'while' or 'whereas'.

예시: Not really. I feel my brother prefers gaming—when he comes home from school he usually turns on his computer and plays with friends, whereas I prefer to spend my free time drawing quietly and developing my skills.

× 'In my leisure time, I prefer reading and watching movie.'

✓ 'In my leisure time, I prefer reading and watching movies.'

'watching movie' requires the noun in plural or with an article; 'watching movies' uses the gerund verb + plural noun correctly. Use plural because speaking generally about the activity.'

× 'However, when I am with my family, I will definitely prefer watching movie with them.'

✓ 'However, when I am with my family, I definitely prefer watching movies with them.'

The modal 'will' is not necessary for habitual actions; use simple present 'prefer' for habitual preference. Also 'watching movie' should be 'watching movies' as a general activity.'

× 'When I am alone, I will read something in my reading room.'

✓ 'When I am alone, I read or I like reading in my reading room.'

Using 'will' for habitual present actions is incorrect here; use simple present 'read' or 'like reading' to describe routine. The gerund 'reading' fits if you choose 'like reading.'

× 'When I was younger, I used to throw pictures from my imagination.'

✓ 'When I was younger, I used to draw pictures from my imagination.'

'Throw pictures' is incorrect verb choice; past habitual 'used to' is correct but the verb should be 'draw' to express creating images. 'Throw' implies physically tossing.'

× 'I will always imagine myself standing in front of the castle and try to draw it into the paper.'

✓ 'I would always imagine myself standing in front of a castle and try to draw it on the paper.'

For past habitual imagery use 'would' or 'used to' rather than future 'will'. Use 'a castle' for non-specific noun and 'draw it on the paper' is the correct preposition; 'into' is wrong here.'

× 'After that, I will show them to my parents and they will provide me with some compliments.'

✓ 'After that, I would show them to my parents and they would give me compliments.'

Past habitual context requires 'would' or 'used to' not 'will'. 'Provide me with some compliments' is awkward; 'give me compliments' is natural.'

× 'Since I was in middle school, I have been into drawing a lot.'

✓ 'Since I was in middle school, I have been very into drawing.'

'Have been into' is grammatical but 'a lot' after 'into' is awkward. Use 'very into drawing' or 'very much into drawing' to sound natural. No third person error—this is stylistic but kept as correction aligning with problem list 2 for slight verb phrasing.'

× 'This is why every day before I go to school, I will sketch the picture from my imagination and show them to my parents so we all may compliment me based on my effort that I put in those pictures.'

✓ 'This is why, every day before I go to school, I would sketch pictures from my imagination and show them to my parents so they would compliment me for the effort I put into those pictures.'

For past habitual actions use 'would' instead of 'will'. Use plural 'pictures' for general activity. 'Compliment me based on my effort that I put in' is awkward; use 'compliment me for the effort I put into those pictures.' 'Put into' is correct preposition.'

× 'Not really. I feels like my brother is fond of gaming more.'

✓ 'Not really. I feel like my brother is more fond of gaming.'

'I feels' is subject-verb disagreement; use 'I feel'. Also place 'more' before 'fond' for correct word order: 'more fond of gaming.'

× 'It seems to me that every time he came back to school, he will immediately turn on his computer and play some game with his friends.'

✓ 'It seems to me that every time he comes back from school, he immediately turns on his computer and plays games with his friends.'

For habitual present actions, use simple present 'comes back', 'turns on', 'plays'. Use 'comes back from school' rather than 'came back to school'. Use plural 'games' or 'a game' for naturalness.'

× 'However, compared to me, I prefer to take my time. Take my time drawing even more.'

✓ 'However, compared to me, I prefer to take my time and spend more time drawing.'

The fragment 'Take my time drawing even more.' is incomplete. Combine into one sentence: 'prefer to take my time and spend more time drawing' to express the idea clearly and grammatically.'