Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep your answer simple and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your hobby, then give one or two brief, specific details using correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like “half speed” or “flying badminton.”

예시: I have several hobbies, but my favorite is playing badminton. I play badminton twice a week because it keeps me fit and I enjoy competing with my friends.

제안: Answer directly and use correct tense and simple connectors. Begin with a clear sentence about your childhood hobby, then add a specific detail (when, how often, or why) with a linking word such as “because” or “and.” Fix verbs: use past tense for childhood activities.

예시: Yes, when I was a child I loved playing soccer. I played soccer every weekend with my neighbors because it was fun and helped me make friends.

제안: Be clear about which hobby you mean and use coherent sentences. State whether you still have the hobby, then give a specific example or reason. Avoid unrelated details (like an address) and unclear words such as “flying” if you mean “playing” or “flying a kite.”

예시: Yes, I have kept playing soccer since I was a child. For example, I still train with a local team twice a week and I enjoy the teamwork and exercise.

제안: Answer directly and give clear comparisons. Start with a short topic sentence (Yes or No), then briefly describe one or two family members’ hobbies and how yours differ, using linking words like “but” or “whereas.” Use correct nouns for hobbies.

예시: No, my hobbies are different from my family’s. For example, my father enjoys fishing, my mother likes gardening, whereas I prefer playing badminton with friends.

× Yes I have, I have many many half speed but my most happy is flying badminton.

✓ Yes, I do. I have many hobbies, but my happiest hobby is playing badminton.

The student used incorrect adjective/adverb forms and awkward phrases. 'Yes I have' should be 'Yes, I do' for answering 'Do you have...'. 'many many half speed' is meaningless; likely intended 'many hobbies'. 'my most happy' is incorrect adjective form; use 'my happiest hobby'. 'flying badminton' is incorrect collocation; correct is 'playing badminton'. Use commas and articles appropriately.

× Yes, I did my happy when I was drive is soccer. I very, very like soccer.

✓ Yes, I did. My hobby when I was a child was playing soccer. I liked soccer very much.

The student mixed tenses and used wrong verb forms. For past habits use past tense: 'My hobby when I was a child was...'. 'drive is soccer' is incorrect; 'playing soccer' is appropriate. 'I very, very like soccer' should be past 'I liked soccer very much.' Also fix word order and add articles.

× Yes, of course I have a puppy in Saint John Rd. This is flying. Just good. Might not get sense.

✓ Yes, of course. I have a puppy on Saint John Road. It is playful. That might not make sense.

The student used incorrect preposition with street name: 'on Saint John Rd' is correct. 'I have a puppy in Saint John Rd' is unnatural. 'This is flying' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'It is playful' or similar. 'Might not get sense' should be 'That might not make sense.' Use complete sentences and correct pronouns.

× No, I don't hear the same hobby with my families. My my dad like Jess, my mother like a kid, my sister like greeting and I I like flying badminton.

✓ No, I don't have the same hobbies as my family. My dad likes chess, my mother likes children (or 'likes being with kids'), my sister likes greeting people, and I like playing badminton.

'I don't hear the same hobby with my families' is incorrect; use 'I don't have the same hobbies as my family.' 'families' should be 'family'. Verb agreement: 'dad like' should be 'dad likes'. 'Jess' likely 'chess'. 'like a kid' is unclear; suggest 'likes children' or 'likes being with kids'. 'greeting' needs an object: 'greeting people'. 'I I like flying badminton' should be 'I like playing badminton.' Also fix repetition and punctuation.