Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and structured: start with a topic sentence naming your main hobbies, then add one or two specific details (why you like them, how often). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid listing with ‘or’.

예시: I enjoy watching films and cooking. In particular, I like horror and action movies because they are exciting and well-paced, and I usually watch one or two films each weekend. I also love cooking new recipes, especially quick Asian dishes, which I practice several times a week.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and organize supporting details with linking words. Replace fillers like “umm” and be specific about what you drew and why you enjoyed it.

예시: Yes — I loved drawing when I was a child. For example, I often sketched houses, flower decorations and simple designs in my sketchbook because I enjoyed creating neat patterns and imagining different colours. This hobby helped me develop patience and an eye for detail.

제안: Provide a clear, grammatical response: state the hobby and say whether you still do it, then give a reason or example. Avoid repetition and pauses; use linking words like ‘and’ or ‘so’ to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I have had drawing as a hobby since childhood and I still enjoy it now. I continue to sketch in my free time, especially when I want to relax, and I sometimes make small paintings to decorate my home.

제안: Answer directly and clearly: state whether you share hobbies, then give a brief specific example and timeframe. Correct tense and phrasing, and avoid unclear expressions like ‘three years old before’.

예시: Yes, my daughter and I both enjoy drawing. She started drawing when she was about three years old and still likes to sketch, so we often draw together at weekends and share ideas for simple pictures.

× Yes, my hobbies are watching TV or movies, especially horror and action movies, and I love to cook.

✓ Yes, my hobbies are watching TV and movies, especially horror and action movies, and I love cooking.

Use of 'or' between TV and movies is unnatural when listing both; coordinate comparable items with 'and'. Also 'love to cook' is acceptable but 'love cooking' is more natural when listing hobbies. Suggestion: use parallel structure and coordinate items with 'and' rather than 'or'.

× When I was a child I loved to draw specially a house or any designs but like umm flowers, decorations or any umm arts in the sketchbook.

✓ When I was a child I loved to draw, especially houses, designs, flowers, decorations and other artwork in my sketchbook.

Use 'especially' instead of 'specially'. 'A house' should be plural 'houses' when giving examples. 'Any umm arts' is ungrammatical; use 'other artwork' or 'other art'. Also remove filler words and use commas to separate examples. Suggestion: use 'especially' and plural nouns for general examples and keep parallel list structure.

× My hobby when I was a child, since child, since my, uh, childhood, was growing even now.

✓ My childhood hobby has continued and I still enjoy it now.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Use present perfect 'has continued' to show an action from the past still true now. Remove filler words and redundant phrases like 'since child' and 'since my childhood' together. Suggestion: use clear tense (present perfect) to link past and present and simplify the sentence.

× Yes, it was same hobby as my daughter. She loved to draw until now even when she's three years old before.

✓ Yes, it was the same hobby as my daughter's. She has loved to draw since she was three years old and still does.

Use possessive 'my daughter's' and include the definite article 'the' for 'the same hobby'. 'She loved to draw until now' mixes past and present; use present perfect 'has loved' and 'since she was three years old' to indicate the starting point. 'She's three years old before' is incorrect; use 'since she was three years old'. Suggestion: use possessive form, correct articles, and present perfect with 'since' for actions beginning in the past and continuing now.