Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は内容を含んでおり意味は通じますが、いくつか改善できます。まず文は長く繋がりすぎており、句読点や接続詞の使い方を調整して自然な流れにしましょう。具体的には、主題文（I enjoy...）で始め、趣味ごとに短い補足を与え、'moreover'の代わりにより口語的な接続詞（and, also, plus）を使うと良いです。また『singing a song』より『singing』や『karaoke』の方が自然です。語彙は適切ですが、詳細（どのチームやどんな歌を歌うか）を一文で加えるとより具体的になります。

예시: I enjoy watching soccer, and I sometimes go to the stadium to see matches. I also like singing, so I often go to karaoke with my friends, where I usually sing pop songs.

제안: 回答は明確で具体的な頻度も示しており良いです。ただし'umm'のような口頭の癖は減らしましょう。'twice or three times a week'は' two or three times a week'と数詞は一貫して表現すると自然です。さらに一文で、なぜ好きだったか（楽しさや競技経験など）を簡単に付け加えると内容が豊かになります。

예시: Yes, I did. I liked swimming in a pool and I swam two or three times a week because I enjoyed how relaxing and healthy it felt.

제안: 答えは趣旨を伝えていますが、文法や流暢さに問題があります。まず時制と表現を整理しましょう。'Yes, I did'の代わりに現在も持っているなら『Yes, I do』や『Yes, I have』を使います。繰り返しやフィラー（umm, uh）を減らし、簡潔な主題文とその理由や一例を続けると良いです。例えば『I've loved watching soccer since I was a child』のように表現します。

예시: Yes, I have. I've loved watching soccer since I was a child, and I still follow matches regularly, especially Premier League games.

제안: 情報は含まれていますが、最後の疑問文は試験では不要なので取り除きましょう。'matches of my brother and I'は文法的に不自然で、'my brother's matches'や'see my brother play'とする方が自然です。応援の表現は'support him'や'cheer him on'が適切です。家族の習慣や具体的な応援の仕方（手作りのプラカードや声援）を一文で加えると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, we share the same interest in soccer. My brother plays almost every day, so we often go to his matches to cheer him on, and I usually shout encouragement from the sidelines.

× I like to watch soccer games and I sometimes go to the stadium and moreover I like singing a song, so I often go to karaoke with my friends.

✓ I like watching soccer games and I sometimes go to the stadium. Moreover, I like singing, so I often go to karaoke with my friends.

The sentence mixes infinitive and -ing forms; 'like' is commonly followed by either the gerund or the infinitive, but using the gerund 'watching' keeps parallel structure with 'singing'. Also 'singing a song' is redundant; 'singing' is sufficient. Break into two sentences for clarity and add a comma after 'Moreover' for correct punctuation. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Yes I did. I liked swimming in a pool when I was a child and umm, I usually swam in the pool twice or three times a week.

✓ Yes, I did. I liked swimming in a pool when I was a child, and I usually swam in the pool two or three times a week.

Use commas for clarity and write numbers in words for small counts. 'Twice or three times a week' is awkward; 'two or three times a week' is standard. Tense (liked/swam) is correct for past, only punctuation and phrasing adjusted. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Yes, I did. Umm, the watching soccer games still, uh, still still hobbies since when I was a child and I usually watch soccer games and yeah.

✓ Yes, I have. Watching soccer games has still been a hobby since I was a child, and I usually watch soccer games now.

The student used incorrect tense and word order. Use present perfect 'have' to respond to 'Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood?' and 'has been' to show continuity from past to present. Remove filler words and duplicate 'still'. 'Since when I was a child' should be 'since I was a child'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, I do. My family members also like to watch soccer games and my brother plays soccer almost every day, so we usually go to the matches of my brother and I. How can I say I cheer him up to win their games?

✓ Yes, I do. My family members also like to watch soccer games, and my brother plays soccer almost every day, so we usually go to his matches. How can I say I cheer him on to help him win his games?

Use the object pronoun correctly: 'matches of my brother and I' is incorrect; use 'his matches'. 'Cheer him up' means to comfort someone; the correct phrasal verb for encouraging during a game is 'cheer him on'. Also replace 'their games' with 'his games' to match singular 'brother'. Grammar problem type ID:12