Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and article errors and avoid repetition.

예시: I have several hobbies, mainly playing cricket and reading. I started playing cricket because I admire Virat Kohli, and I also enjoy singing inspired by Arijit Singh.

제안: Answer directly and avoid vague phrases. Use past tense for childhood activities and link to the present with a contrasting word. Remove fillers and repetitions.

예시: When I was a child I enjoyed cycling and running, and I tried many outdoor activities. However, now I mainly focus on playing cricket.

제안: Be precise about time and use correct tense and phrasing. If you say 'since childhood' but mention a year, clarify the timeline. Give one specific detail about the hobby to make it more credible.

예시: Yes. I have loved playing cricket since I was a child, and I have been playing regularly since 2016. Playing cricket keeps me fit and helps me work well in a team.

제안: Answer clearly with a topic sentence, then briefly explain differences using linking words. Correct grammar and remove hesitations. Use plural/singular forms correctly.

예시: No, my hobbies are different from my family members'. For example, my mother prefers running and my father enjoys playing volleyball, while I mainly play cricket.

× Yes, I have many hobbies like playing cricket and reading a book because of my idol was Virat Kohli.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies like playing cricket and reading books because my idol is Virat Kohli.

Original mixes clauses incorrectly and uses past tense 'was' with current idol. This is an incorrect conjunction/structure and tense issue. Use 'because' followed by a clause: 'because my idol is Virat Kohli.' Also make 'reading a book' plural to match general hobby 'reading books.' Suggestion: Keep present tense for ongoing facts and use parallel noun forms for lists.

× That's why I love to play cricket and I love to sing a song because of Arijit Singh.

✓ That's why I love to play cricket and sing songs because of Arijit Singh.

The sentence is wordy and uses 'sing a song' awkwardly; verb forms are fine but repetition 'I love to' is unnecessary. Use parallel structure: 'love to play cricket and sing songs.' Also 'because of Arijit Singh' is acceptable to indicate influence. Suggestion: Use parallel verbs and pluralize 'songs' for general hobby.

× Yes, I was young I I have a many hobbies like cycling, running etcetera and many more hobbies from my childhood.

✓ When I was young, I had many hobbies such as cycling and running from my childhood.

Original repeats 'I' and mixes tenses ('was' with present 'have') causing a sentence structure error. Use past tense 'had' to describe childhood hobbies and remove redundant words. Replace 'a many' with 'many' and 'etcetera' with 'such as' for clarity. Suggestion: Keep consistent tense and avoid repetition.

× Nowadays I love to play cricket and my hobbies nowadays is cricket.

✓ Nowadays I love to play cricket and my hobby nowadays is cricket.

Original has subject-verb agreement error: 'my hobbies ... is' should match singular 'hobby is' or plural 'hobbies are.' Here the meaning is singular, so use 'hobby is.' Also remove duplicate 'nowadays.' Suggestion: Ensure subject and verb number agree and avoid repeating time adverbs.

× Yes, I have a hobby since 2016 is playing cricket for India.

✓ Yes, I have had the hobby of playing cricket for India since 2016.

Original mixes 'have' with 'since' incorrectly and has awkward word order. Use present perfect 'have had' with 'since 2016' to indicate a hobby that began in the past and continues. Place 'since 2016' at end or after verb and reorder to 'the hobby of playing cricket for India.' Suggestion: Use present perfect for actions or states that started in the past and continue to present.

× It's a very good habit and hobby for me.

✓ It's a very good habit and hobby for me.

Sentence is actually correct; no article error. No change needed. Suggestion: Keep as is.

× No, I have A and my family have no hobbies are same because of my mother like running favorite and my father like uh playing a volleyball and my favorite hobby are playing cricket that's why not similar in my house.

✓ No, my hobbies are not the same as my family's because my mother prefers running, my father likes playing volleyball, and my favorite hobby is playing cricket, so our interests are different at home.

Original has pronoun and structure errors: 'I have A' is unclear; subject-verb agreement and pronoun references are wrong ('my family have no hobbies are same'). Rephrase to clearly compare hobbies using correct pronouns and verb agreement: 'my hobbies are not the same as my family's.' Use 'prefers' and 'likes' for parents and singular 'is' for 'favorite hobby.' Suggestion: Use clear comparative structure 'not the same as' and ensure verbs agree with their subjects.