Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更直接、语法准确并避免不相关的泛泛而谈。注意代词一致（he/she -> people 或 we），纠正词汇错误（gudong 可能是误说），并用一到两句具体细节说明你如何进行这个爱好以及它带来的效果。句子不超过五句。

예시: Yes, I do. My main hobby is playing the guzheng, a traditional Chinese zither. I practice for about 30 minutes every evening, which helps me relax and improve my concentration. Because I focus on melodies and finger techniques, playing the guzheng clears my mind and reduces stress.

제안: 注意时态一致（use past tense for childhood），避免性别刻板印象的无关说明。用更具体的细节描述，比如你踢哪个位置、和谁一起踢或从中学到什么。使用连接词使叙述连贯。

예시: Yes, I was very into playing soccer as a child. I usually played as a midfielder with my school team, and we trained twice a week. I loved the fast pace and team spirit, which taught me cooperation and resilience.

제안: 保持时态和主语一致，去掉模糊或不必要的句子（“So we didn't count”不明）。把细节具体化：说明常读的书籍类型、每天读多久以及它如何影响你。用连接词把理由和结果串起来。

예시: Yes, I have. Since I was young I read a page or two of novels every night, usually for about 15 minutes. I often read fiction and short stories, which help me unwind before bed and improve my imagination and vocabulary.

제안: 回答要更自然，用更恰当的词汇（literacy 可换为 books 或 literature），并具体说明你们如何一起进行这些活动，例如共同讨论书籍或一起写作。使用连接词说明结果或感受。

예시: Yes, we do. My family and I enjoy reading and sometimes write short stories together. After finishing a book, we discuss our favorite parts which creates warm, meaningful conversations and helps us understand each other better.

× Yes I do, I think humans need things like hobbies to feel his or her later time and in a world.

✓ Yes, I do. I think people need hobbies to relax in their spare time and feel part of the world.

原句结构混乱，代词与主语不一致（humans 与 his or her 不匹配），短语“later time and in a world”不符合英语表达。建议用复数人称（people）并用复数代词（their），将“later time”改为常用表达“spare time”，并把“feel part of the world”表达“融入世界”的意思。

× So I'm really into playing gudong because this can always let me calm down and focus on the things I'm doing.

✓ So I'm really into playing gudong because it always helps me calm down and focus on what I'm doing.

原句中用“this”指代不明确，且“let me calm down”在这里不如“help me calm down”自然；“the things I'm doing”改为更地道的“what I'm doing”。建议使用明确代词 it 和短语 help sb do sth。

× Yes, when I'm little I'm really into playing soccer.

✓ Yes, when I was little I was really into playing soccer.

谈论过去时应使用过去时态。原句用现在时“I’m little”与上下文不符，需改为过去时“was”。

× Although I'm a girl, I really enjoy the feeling of racing with the winged and the contagious atmosphere in the soccer games.

✓ Although I'm a girl, I really enjoy the feeling of competing with the wind and the exciting atmosphere at soccer games.

原句“racing with the winged”语义不明，可能想表达“与风赛跑”应为“competing with the wind”或更自然的“running fast”；“contagious atmosphere”用词不当，应为“exciting atmosphere”。建议用更贴切的词汇来表达感受。

× I think yes, from a very little age I have formed a habit of reading a page or two novels every day, sometimes maybe one or two passages. So we didn't count. Always let me calm down and relax.

✓ I think so. From a very young age I formed a habit of reading a page or two of a novel every day, sometimes one or two passages, which always helps me calm down and relax.

原句断句混乱、时态不一致（应为过去时或现在完成时）、“a page or two novels”搭配错误，缺少介词 of，并且最后两句碎片化。建议重组句子，使用“from a very young age”并把阅读量表达为“a page or two of a novel”，最后用定语从句连接并用现在时态说明习惯的持续效果。

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

✓ Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

该句语法正确，无需修改。保留原句。

× Yes, I do. We both like reading and writing and can always resonate with others on some of the points in the passages.

✓ Yes, I do. We both like reading and writing and can always relate to each other on some points in the passages.

原句用“resonate with others”在语境中不如“relate to each other”恰当；“on some of the points”可简化为“on some points”。此外“others”可能引起歧义，改为“each other”更明确。

× Sharing our feelings about literacy can always be a very harmonious and cozy time with my family.

✓ Sharing our feelings about literature is always a very harmonious and cozy time with my family.

原句“about literacy”用词不当，应为“about literature”（文学或阅读相关）；“can always be a very... time”时态与语义不够自然，改为“is always”更贴切。