Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法ミスと冗長さがあります。まず短く明確なトピック文を作り、その後に具体例を1～2個だけ付けましょう。例えば“when I have free time”は不定詞や冠詞の誤りがあるので“when I have free time”に直し、接続詞（and, which）を使って文を自然につなげます。語彙は十分ですが、文の流れを改善するとより効果的です。練習では一文目で趣味を述べ、次に料理の種類と友人を招くことを具体的に説明してください。

예시: I enjoy cooking in my free time. I usually make Japanese dishes like sushi and tempura, and I often invite friends over to share the meal because cooking together makes it more fun.

제안: 意味は伝わりますが語彙ミス（couch→coach? or couch as sofa play is odd）や細かい文法の改善が必要です。まず正しい語彙を選び（e.g. play catch, play games, play on the couch）、その後に理由や頻度を示す副詞句を整えてください。接続語（which）で補足を述べるのは良いので、もっと具体的な活動や思い出を一つ加えると説得力が増します。回答は3文以内にまとめましょう。

예시: When I was a child, I loved playing catch with my dad. I asked him to play almost every day, and although it sometimes annoyed him, we always had a lot of fun.

제안: 文法と語法の誤りが多く、意味が曖昧になっています。時制と一致（since I was a child, I have liked→I have liked reading since childhood）を修正し、感情表現を具体化してください（obsessed with a big bookは不自然）。“makes me feel more freedom”は不自然なので“gave me a sense of freedom”などに直し、ストレスについては理由を短く付け加えると良いです。全体を短くまとめ、現在の好み（novels）へ自然につなげてください。

예시: I have loved reading since I was a child. Back then I would get lost in long books because they gave me a sense of freedom, although sometimes the stories felt intense. Nowadays I usually choose novels, especially contemporary fiction.

제안: 内容が伝わりにくく、文法と語順の誤りが目立ちます。まず主語と所有格の一致（my mother's→my mother）を直し、動詞の形も整えてください（she recommends; she likes reading books）。“dating book”はおそらく“detective books”か“dating books”の誤りなので意味を明確にし、どのジャンル（mystery）を共有しているかをはっきり述べましょう。最後に家族との具体的な活動（recommend books, discuss plots）を一つ示すと良いです。

예시: Yes, I share hobbies with my mother because she also enjoys reading. She often recommends mystery novels to me, and we discuss the plots together after finishing a book.

× When I have a free time.

✓ When I have free time.

Use 'free time' without the indefinite article 'a'. 'Time' here is an uncountable noun and does not take 'a'. Suggestion: say 'When I have free time' or 'When I have some free time.'

× I often cook Japanese food, for example sushi or other traditional dishes, and sometimes I invite my friends over, which makes it more enjoyable.

✓ I often cook Japanese food, for example sushi or other traditional dishes, and sometimes I invite my friends over, which makes it more enjoyable.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no grammatical correction needed from the provided list. Consider adding 'them' after 'invite' for clarity: 'invite my friends over to eat with me.' This is a style suggestion rather than a grammar correction.

× When I was a child, I really liked playing couch with my dad.

✓ When I was a child, I really liked playing catch with my dad.

The word 'couch' is incorrect here; likely intended 'catch', a game played by throwing and catching a ball. This is a word choice error rather than a grammar category on the provided list. Suggestion: use correct verb/object vocabulary: 'playing catch.'

× I used to ask him to play almost every day, which sometimes annoyed him a bit, but we still had a lot of fun.

✓ I used to ask him to play almost every day, which sometimes annoyed him a bit, but we still had a lot of fun.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no change. Keep 'used to' for habitual past actions.

× Yes, since I were childhood I have liked reading books.

✓ Yes, since I was a child I have liked reading books.

Use 'was' not 'were' for first person singular past ('I was'). Also change 'since I were childhood' to 'since I was a child' for correct noun phrase. 'Since' with a point in time is followed by present perfect ('have liked'), which is correct.

× So when I was a child I obsessed with like a big book which makes me feel more freedom and also a little bit more stress as well.

✓ When I was a child I was obsessed with big books, which made me feel more free but also a little stressed.

'Obsessed' needs the auxiliary 'was' for past passive/adjective use: 'I was obsessed with'. Remove 'like' used incorrectly. Use plural 'books' if general reading is meant. 'Which makes' should match past reference: use 'made'. Use adjectives 'free' and 'stressed' rather than noun forms. Suggestion: 'I was obsessed with big books, which made me feel freer but also a little stressed.'

× But nowadays I prefer to choose a novel.

✓ But nowadays I prefer to read novels.

'Prefer to choose a novel' is awkward; use 'prefer to read novels' for general preference in present tense. 'Nowadays' calls for present simple: 'I prefer.' Use plural 'novels' for general preference.

× Well yes, I have same hobbies as my mother's when my mother really likes dating book so sometimes she recommend me to read some novel especially the mystery so we're both discuss.

✓ Well yes, I have the same hobbies as my mother. My mother really likes detective novels, so she sometimes recommends that I read some novels, especially mysteries, so we can discuss them together.

Multiple errors: 'have same hobbies as my mother's' incorrectly uses possessive; use 'my mother'. Add definite article 'the same'. 'Dating book' is incorrect word choice; likely 'detective novels' or 'mystery books'. Verb agree: 'she recommend' should be 'she recommends'. 'Recommend me to read' is incorrect; use 'recommends that I read' or 'recommends books for me to read'. 'Some novel' should be 'some novels' or 'a novel'. 'We're both discuss' is ungrammatical; use 'so we can discuss them together.' Suggestions: correct articles, verb agreement, and use appropriate vocabulary 'detective/mystery novels'.