Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сократите лишние заполнители (э-э, ну) и говорите более прямо. Начните с короткого тематического предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных детали о своих хобби (как часто, почему нравится). Используйте связки (for example, because, and) для логики и ограничьтесь максимум 3–4 предложениями.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy roller skating and target shooting. I go roller skating twice a week because it helps me relax and stay fit, and I practise shooting at a local range to improve my focus.

제안: Избегайте смешения времён и грамматических ошибок. Начните с чёткого утверждения в прошедшем времени, затем добавьте конкретную деталь (как часто, с кем, почему нравилось). Используйте связки (for example, with, because) и не повторяйте слова.

예시: Yes, I did. As a child I loved roller and ice skating and I often skated with my parents and sister on weekends, because we enjoyed spending time together outdoors.

제안: Исправьте грамматику и лексику: используйте корректные формы (‘when I was a child’, ‘I’ve liked’). Дайте связное объяснение перехода от хобби к нынешнему состоянию (как хобби привело к профессионализму). Придерживайтесь 2–3 предложений и конкретики.

예시: Yes, I have. I’ve enjoyed ice skating since I was a child, and I trained regularly, which eventually led me to compete at a professional level.

제안: Улучшите грамматику и ясность: используйте правильные формы (don’t → don’t, aren’t keen on, have similar hobbies). Дайте конкретный контраст и пример (who shares hobbies and which hobbies). Используйте связки (however, but, for example).

예시: Not really. My parents aren’t keen on sports, but my little sister and some cousins share similar hobbies, such as roller skating and cycling, so we sometimes practise together.

× I have uh, uh, some hobbies such as roller skating or shooting.

✓ I have some hobbies, such as roller skating and shooting.

The learner used 'some hobbies such as roller skating or shooting.' Use 'and' to list multiple hobbies and include a comma before 'such as'. Also remove filler words 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: when listing items use 'and' for multiple items and punctuate the list correctly.

× Well, yes I did when I was a child. I have some hobby, for example roller skating, ice skating, it was fine.

✓ Well, yes I did when I was a child. I had some hobbies, for example roller skating and ice skating; they were fun.

The sentence uses present tense 'have' instead of past 'had' and 'hobby' (singular) while listing multiple activities. Change to past tense and plural 'hobbies'. Also replace 'it was fine' with 'they were fun' to agree in number and improve meaning. Suggestion: match tense to the time frame and ensure noun number matches list.

× I am keen on this with my parents and sister.

✓ I was keen on these activities with my parents and my sister.

The original mixes present tense with past context and uses 'this' for plural activities. Use 'these activities' and past tense 'was' to match childhood context. Also add 'my' before 'sister' for consistency. Suggestion: use correct demonstrative for countable plural and keep pronouns consistent.

× Yes I do. For example when I was child I kind on doing sports such as ice skating and trolley skating.

✓ Yes I do. For example, when I was a child I was keen on doing sports such as ice skating and roller skating.

Errors: missing article before 'child' and incorrect phrase 'kind on' instead of 'keen on'; 'trolley skating' is incorrect—likely 'roller skating'. Also childhood reference requires past tense 'was keen'. Suggestion: use 'when I was a child' and the correct adjective 'keen on'.

× Now I am a professional athletic.

✓ Now I am a professional athlete.

'Athletic' is an adjective, while the intended noun is 'athlete'. Use the noun to describe a person. Suggestion: choose the correct word class (noun vs adjective) when describing professions or roles.

× To be honest, no I don't because my family don't keen on sports but my little sister and some cousins have some safe same hobbies.

✓ To be honest, no, I don't, because my family aren't keen on sports, but my little sister and some cousins have some of the same hobbies.

Multiple errors: 'family don't keen' is ungrammatical—use 'family aren't keen' or 'my family doesn't like' depending on meaning; 'don't' conflicts with subject-verb agreement for collective noun; 'keen on' requires 'be' verb; 'some safe same hobbies' is incorrect word order and 'safe' is wrong word choice. Corrected to 'some of the same hobbies'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms with collective nouns and proper adjective order and vocabulary.