Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Говорите проще и точнее, избегайте лишних слов и исправляйте ошибки грамматики и произношения. Начинайте с прямого ответа, затем добавляйте 1–2 конкретных примера, используя связки (for example, also, and). Исправьте ошибки лексики («a singing» → «singing», «hood make gymnastics» → «doing gymnastics»). Следите за количеством предложений — не больше 4–5.

예시: Yes, I have several hobbies. For example, I enjoy drawing and dancing; I also like playing sports. When I was young I started doing gymnastics, which helped me stay fit and disciplined.

제안: Уточняйте и формулируйте ясно: назовите хобби прямо и дайте конкретную деталь и результат. Избегайте повторов и разговорных междометий (uh). Исправьте ошибки («dropped paper dolls» непонятно — возможно «made paper dolls»; «I was really fame» → «I became quite popular»). Используйте связки (for example, and then, as a result).

예시: Yes. As a child I used to make paper dolls and create tiny scenes for them. For example, I made small houses and furniture, and later I posted videos on TikTok where I showed my work. As a result, I gained about 2,000 followers.

제안: Отвечайте прямо и добавляйте одну-две конкретные детали о том, почему хобби сохраняется и как вы его развивали. Убедитесь в правильной грамматике (например, «from the childhood» → «since childhood», «inspiration for my creativity» → «a big source of inspiration»). Используйте связку для логики (because, since, and).

예시: Yes, drawing is a hobby I've had since childhood. I started drawing when I was four, and it has always been a major source of inspiration for my creativity. Because I practised regularly, my skills have improved over the years.

제안: Говорите более организованно: начните с краткого ответа «No», затем объясните причину, используя корректную лексику и грамматику. Избегайте неясных фраз («Warren that creative» неясно). Сформулируйте контраст с помощью слов «however, while, unlike». Исправьте «since I was a small» → «since I was small», «had not hobbies» → «didn't have hobbies».

예시: No, I don't. While I have creative hobbies like drawing and dancing, my parents focused more on their studies and didn't have similar creative pastimes. As a result, our interests are quite different.

× For example I'm really creative so I love drawing a singing, dancing.

✓ For example, I'm really creative, so I love drawing, singing, and dancing.

The sentence had erroneous commas and an incorrect preposition-like connector causing list confusion. Use commas to separate items in a list and include 'and' before the last item. Also add a comma after 'For example' and after the clause 'I'm really creative' for clarity.

× Also I'm really good at sports so when I was young I started to do hood make gymnastics.

✓ Also, I'm really good at sports, so when I was young I started doing gymnastics.

The original sentence contained fragmented and incorrect phrases ('to do hood make'). Use the gerund 'doing' after 'started' to indicate beginning an activity. Add commas to separate clauses and remove nonsense words.

× When I was a child, I dropped paper dolls and paper dolls, how this was everything inside, just like in the real life.

✓ When I was a child, I played with paper dolls; they had detailed interiors, just like in real life.

'Dropped' is the wrong past tense verb here; the correct verb is 'played with'. The sentence was also repetitive and awkwardly structured. Use a semicolon or separate clauses to clarify that the dolls had detailed interiors.

× Uh, yeah, I enjoy it.

✓ Uh, yeah, I enjoyed it.

The time frame is in the past ('When I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense: 'enjoyed' not the present 'enjoy'. Maintain consistent tense.

× And I also posted some videos about this on Tiktok and I was really fame.

✓ And I also posted some videos about this on TikTok, and I became quite famous.

'Fame' is a noun; the speaker needs an adjective or verb phrase. Use 'became quite famous' to express the change of status. Also correct capitalization of TikTok.

× I had 2000 followers.

✓ I had 2,000 followers.

Add a comma for the standard formatting of thousands in English numerals. The sentence itself is grammatically correct otherwise.

× My biggest hobby from the childhood is still drawing.

✓ My biggest hobby since childhood is still drawing.

Use 'since childhood' rather than 'from the childhood'. 'The' is unnecessary and unidiomatic here; 'since' correctly indicates a time period starting in the past.

× I started with drawing when I was four years old and it was a really big inspiration for me of my creativity.

✓ I started drawing when I was four years old, and it was a great inspiration for my creativity.

Use 'started drawing' instead of 'started with drawing'. 'It was a really big inspiration for me of my creativity' is awkward; rephrase to 'a great inspiration for my creativity.' Maintain past tense consistency.

× No, I don't really think so.

✓ No, I don't think so.

'Really' is not grammatically wrong but is unnecessary; removing it makes the response more concise. This is a stylistic correction.

× Since I was a small I had really creative hobbies about for example my parents uh Warren that creative like I am right now.

✓ When I was small, I had creative hobbies, but my parents weren't as creative as I am now.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and contains unclear fragments ('about for example my parents uh Warren'). Use 'When I was small' for time, and compare parents' creativity with correct negative form 'weren't as creative as'.

× So they were just good at school and had not hobbies.

✓ So they were good at school and did not have hobbies.

Use 'did not have' to negate possession in the past, not 'had not'. 'Did not have hobbies' is the correct past negative form in conversational English.