Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then give chronological details with correct tense and fewer hesitations. Use linking words (for example, "for about ten years" and "but then") and correct grammar for past events. Also avoid filler words and correct unclear parts (e.g., "I had a knee injury").

예시: I do. I started playing volleyball for a national Turkish youth team when I was six. I played for about ten years, but then I had a knee injury so I had to stop playing competitively.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details and a linking word. Correct phrasing: "childhood hobby" and explain briefly why volleyball is your favourite. Avoid repeating phrases.

예시: Yes. My childhood hobby was volleyball, which I played seriously. I also tried learning the violin, but I wasn't very good at it, so volleyball became my favourite because I enjoyed the teamwork and training.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then provide specific detail with correct tense and linking words. Replace vague words like "maybe" with concrete time phrases and explain why you love it. Limit to 2–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, I've been swimming since I was a child. I started lessons at about six and I love swimming because it keeps me fit and relaxes me after a busy day.

제안: Answer directly, then give a clear example with correct vocabulary and natural phrasing. Replace awkward words like "amorous" with "enthusiastic" or "very fond of". Use linking words like "for example" and explain benefits briefly.

예시: Yes, some of my family share my hobbies. For example, my six-year-old sister is very fond of swimming, so we often swim together, which is a great way to spend quality time as a family.

× When I was six years old I started to play volleyball at a a national Turkish team.

✓ When I was six years old I started to play volleyball on a national Turkish team.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect with 'team'; use 'on' or 'for' when referring to membership in a team. Also remove the duplicated 'a'. Use 'started to play' correctly for beginning an activity in the past.

× Then uh, I play I think in 10 years, but after that I have AI get a new injury.

✓ Then, I played for about 10 years, but after that I got a new injury.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses. Use past tense 'played' and 'got' to describe completed actions. 'I think in 10 years' is awkward; 'for about 10 years' is the correct duration expression. 'have AI get' seems to be incorrect word recognition; 'got a new injury' conveys the intended meaning.

× That's why I have to.

✓ That's why I had to stop.

The fragment 'I have to' is incomplete and tense is wrong for a past reason. Use 'had to stop' to indicate a past obligation or necessity resulting from the injury.

× Yes, as I said volleyball is my child hobby and and also I tried playing an instrument which is violin but I'm not very good at it.

✓ Yes, as I said, volleyball was my childhood hobby, and I also tried playing an instrument, the violin, but I'm not very good at it.

Use 'childhood hobby' (compound noun) not 'child hobby'. The past tense 'was' fits if speaking about childhood. Add articles: 'the violin' is natural. Remove duplicate 'and'. Punctuation improves clarity.

× I have lots of hobbies but one of them is swimming. I love swimming when I was since my childhood maybe.

✓ I have lots of hobbies, but one of them is swimming. I have loved swimming since my childhood.

Mixing present and past forms is incorrect. Use present perfect 'have loved' plus 'since' to indicate an action that began in the past and continues now: 'have loved ... since my childhood.' Remove 'when I was' and 'maybe' for clarity.

× Yes, some of them. For example, my sister also loves swimming. She is 6 now, but she is very amorous with swimming and we swim together.

✓ Yes, some of them. For example, my sister also loves swimming. She is six now, and she is very enthusiastic about swimming, so we swim together.

Use 'enthusiastic about' instead of 'amorous with' which is incorrect and has different meaning. Spell out numbers under ten in formal speech: 'six'. Use 'and' or 'so' to connect clauses properly.

× Generally that's a good activity for spending good time together.

✓ Generally, that's a good activity for spending quality time together.

Use 'quality time' instead of 'good time' for natural collocation. 'For spending... together' is acceptable but 'spending quality time together' is more idiomatic; add comma after 'Generally'.