Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 在回答中要注意句子流畅与语法准确，避免重复和不完整句。可以用一到两句直接回应，然后用一到两句提供具体细节并用连接词衔接（例如: so, because, and）。注意名词单复数和固定搭配（例如: benefit → be beneficial；mental well-being 单数）；避免口语化的碎片句（例如: Really.）。

예시: I enjoy exercising, especially running and playing badminton. Regular exercise is beneficial for both my physical health and mental well-being, because running outdoors lets me enjoy nature and fresh air, and playing badminton helps me make friends who share my interests, so I can relax and have fun while socializing.

제안: 回答时要避免信息不完整和重复，保持句子逻辑连贯。先直接回答（简单过去或过去习惯），然后用一到两句说明原因或举例。注意语法（both mental and physical health，不要把 both 放错位置）；最后不要留下未完成句（如“If my mental well-being.”）。

예시: Yes, as a child I loved playing badminton and played it regularly. It helped me stay fit and also relieved stress, because the fast pace of the game boosted my energy and made me feel happier after practice.

제안: 注意用词和句子结构的准确性，避免重复（例如重复的“since”），并用简洁句子表达观点。开头用正确的时态和结构（I have enjoyed sports since I was a child），然后用1–2个具体原因或例子支持。修正拼写与搭配错误（physical fitness, make new friends, memorable）。

예시: I have enjoyed playing sports since I was a child because my parents encouraged me to be active. Sports have improved my physical fitness and helped me make lasting friendships, which are very memorable experiences.

제안: 回答要简洁并注意语法与搭配（sitting in an area → sitting in one place；riding → cycling or horse riding; this outdoor activities → these outdoor activities; avoid repetition like “totally and totally”）。先直接比较差异，再给出具体例子和原因，用连接词使逻辑更顺畅。

예시: No, my parents prefer reading, while I prefer outdoor activities such as hiking, jogging and cycling. These activities let me get close to nature and enjoy fresh air, which is a great way for me to relieve daily stress.

× Regular exercise not only improves my physical health but also benefit to my mental well beings.

✓ Regular exercise not only improves my physical health but also benefits my mental well-being.

句中 benefit 用作动词须与主语 agrees（第三人称单数），应为 benefits；mental well beings 表达不正确，应为 mental well-being（不可数名词，表示心理健康）。建议：注意动词与主语的人称数一致，并使用固定搭配 "mental well-being"。

× Really. Because outdoor running can help me get close to the nature and enjoy the fresh air, and playing badminton can help me build up relationships who show the same interests as me.

✓ Because outdoor running helps me get close to nature and enjoy the fresh air, and playing badminton helps me build relationships with people who share the same interests as me.

句首独立的 "Really." 使句子不连贯，应合并为完整句；get close to the nature 中 the 多余，应为 "close to nature"；动词须与主语一致，用 helps。build up relationships 后接人时应使用介词 with，并用 who share the same interests as me（share 而不是 show）。建议：将短句合并为完整句，注意定冠词和固定搭配，使用恰当的动词和介词。

× In this way, I can relax and have fun during the socializing.

✓ In this way, I can relax and have fun while socializing.

during the socializing 中 the 和 during 用法不自然，应使用 while + 动名词短语表示“在……期间做某事”：while socializing。建议：把副词/介词短语位置调整为更自然的结构，使用 while + 动词-ing 表示同时发生的动作。

× Well, when I was a child, I was really keen on playing badminton. Doing exercise regularly can help me improve my both mental and physical health.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I was really keen on playing badminton. Doing exercise regularly could / helped me improve both my mental and physical health.

原句将现在时 can 用于描述过去习惯或过去事实时时态不一致。描述过去时应使用过去时态（could 或 helped）。此外 "my both" 词序错误，应为 "both my"。建议：叙述过去的情况用过去时，并调整限定词顺序为 "both my mental and physical health"。

× If my mental well-being.

✓ It improved my mental well-being.

原句不是完整句，缺少谓语。可能的完整表达为 "It improved my mental well-being." 或 "It was good for my mental well-being." 建议：确保每个句子包含主语和谓语，形成完整陈述。

× I have been keen on for doing sports since since a child.

✓ I have been keen on doing sports since I was a child.

keen on 后直接接动名词，不需要 for；"since since" 重复；表达自童年起应用 "since I was a child" 而不是 "since a child"。建议：去掉多余词，使用正确的搭配 "keen on doing" 和时间短语 "since I was a child"。

× This is because my parents really encourage me to do things like this because doing sports can is really beneficial for my physi, physical fit and the mental well-being.

✓ This is because my parents really encouraged me to do things like this, because doing sports is really beneficial for my physical fitness and mental well-being.

时态要和前句一致，描述过去应使用 encouraged（或 keep as present if general）。原句有重复或错误：can is 不能同时出现，应为 is；physi 拼写错误，应为 physical fitness（名词短语）；the mental well-being 中 the 可省。建议：注意时态一致，删除多余助动词，拼写单词并使用恰当名词短语。

× Doing sports can help me to improve the fitness level and can always build up my body shape.

✓ Doing sports can help me improve my fitness level and build up my body shape.

不需要同时两次使用 can；不定式 to 可省以保持并列结构一致；用词 "build up my body shape" 可接受但更自然不重复助动词。建议：并列动词保持形式一致，避免冗余助动词。

× Additionally, doing sports can always make some new friends who show the same interest at me, and it's a very memory.

✓ Additionally, doing sports always allows me to make new friends who share the same interests as me, and it's a very memorable experience.

make friends 不用 make some new friends（虽可但更自然去掉 some）；who show the same interest at me 介词用法错误，应为 who share the same interests as me；"it's a very memory" 用词错误，应为 "a very memorable experience" 或 "a great memory"。建议：使用固定搭配 share ... as，注意名词搭配 memorable experience。

× Unlike my parents who enjoy reading, I don't really like sitting in an area for a long time.

✓ Unlike my parents, who enjoy reading, I don't really like sitting in one place for a long time.

sitting in an area 不自然，应为 sitting in one place 或 sitting in the same place；加入逗号可使从句更清楚。建议：使用地道短语 "one place" 或 "the same place"，并注意标点使结构清晰。

× I prefer outdoor activities such as hiking, jogging and riding. This outdoor activities alone allow me to get close to the nature and totally and totally enjoy the fresh air it can.

✓ I prefer outdoor activities such as hiking, jogging and cycling. These outdoor activities alone allow me to get close to nature and fully enjoy the fresh air.

activities 为复数，指代应使用 These；riding 一般说 cycling 更自然；the nature 中 the 不需要；重复 "totally and totally" 应删除，改为 "fully"；句尾多余的 it can 删除。建议：保持代词与先行词数一致，避免重复词，使用地道词汇和固定搭配。

× This is a fantastic way for me to release my daily pressure.

✓ This is a fantastic way for me to relieve my daily stress.

release my daily pressure 用法不自然且词义错误，应为 relieve my daily stress；原句时态可以保留为现在时，因为此为习惯性描述。建议：使用固定搭配 relieve stress，注意名词选择。