Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện: Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và nói lặp, phát âm rõ ràng hơn và dùng cấu trúc câu hoàn chỉnh. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng: “Yes, I have several hobbies.” (2) Liệt kê ngắn gọn bằng các động từ đúng dạng: “reading books, watching movies, hanging out with friends, and playing sports such as football and basketball.” (3) Giữ độ dài tối đa 3–4 câu, tránh tiếng ừ, à; luyện phát âm từ khó như “books” và “movies”.

예시: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy reading books and watching movies in my free time. I also like hanging out with friends and playing sports like football and basketball.

제안: Cải thiện: Sử dụng thì quá khứ phù hợp và diễn đạt rõ ràng. Cụ thể: (1) Dùng chủ đề ngắn: “Yes, I did.” (2) Mô tả chi tiết hơn bằng thì quá khứ: “I enjoyed cycling to the park with my family.” (3) Tránh nói mơ hồ như “meaningless stories” — thay bằng “chatting” hoặc “telling stories”.

예시: Yes, I did. As a child, I enjoyed cycling to the park with my family and friends. We often spent time chatting and playing games together.

제안: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi bằng cấu trúc hoàn chỉnh và nêu một sở thích cụ thể bạn giữ từ nhỏ đến nay. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu: “Yes, I have had one hobby since childhood.” (2) Nêu rõ sở thích và kéo dài bằng chi tiết cụ thể: hoạt động, tần suất, lý do. (3) Giảm tiếng ngập ngừng và dùng linking words như “because” hoặc “so”.

예시: Yes, I have had one hobby since childhood: spending time with friends and joining school activities. I used to participate in clubs and events at school almost every week because I enjoyed meeting people and learning new things.

제안: Cải thiện: Trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc, tránh cấu trúc lung tung. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu: “No, not really.” hoặc “Some are similar, but mostly no.” (2) Giải thích ngắn gọn vì sao bạn giữ sở thích riêng: “I prefer having my own hobbies to understand myself better and have personal time.” (3) Sử dụng linking words như “because” và tránh lặp từ.

예시: No, not really. Although we sometimes enjoy similar activities, I prefer having my own hobbies because they help me understand myself better and give me personal time to relax.

× My heart be in my daily life is uh, reading book, watching movie, hang out with my friend, playing physical sport like football and basketball.

✓ My heart in my daily life is reading books, watching movies, hanging out with my friends, and playing physical sports like football and basketball.

Sentence uses incorrect verb 'be' and has several noun form and parallelism issues. Use 'My heart in my daily life is' or better 'What I enjoy in daily life is' and make nouns plural where appropriate (books, movies, friends, sports). Use gerunds for activities (reading, watching, hanging out, playing) to keep parallel structure. Suggestion: say 'What I enjoy in my daily life is reading books, watching movies, hanging out with my friends, and playing sports such as football and basketball.'

× Uh, when I was, when I was a child, I think I have a quite interesting mood, a hobby like cycling outside.

✓ When I was a child, I had an interesting hobby of cycling outdoors.

Speaker mixes present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Change to past tense 'had'. Also 'cycling outside' is better as 'cycling outdoors' or 'riding a bicycle outside'. Use 'hobby of' to link noun and activity. Suggestion: 'When I was a child, I had an interesting hobby of cycling outdoors.'

× I go to the park with my family and friends and, uh, simple as share meaningless stories with.

✓ I went to the park with my family and friends and simply shared meaningless stories with them.

Tense should match past ('went', 'shared'). 'Simple as share' is ungrammatical; use 'simply shared'. Include object pronoun 'them' after 'with'. Suggestion: use clear verbs and objects: 'I went to the park with my family and friends and simply shared small, meaningless stories with them.'

× To be honest, uh, when my childhood, uh, I have uh, a lot of hobbies that I can share, umm, hang out with my friend, uh, engage in interesting activity, uh, in my school.

✓ To be honest, during my childhood I had a lot of hobbies I can share, such as hanging out with my friends and engaging in interesting activities at school.

Use 'during my childhood' rather than 'when my childhood'. Match past tense 'had' for past time. Use gerunds for activities ('hanging out', 'engaging') and pluralize where needed ('friends', 'activities'). 'Such as' introduces examples. Suggestion: 'To be honest, during my childhood I had many hobbies, such as hanging out with my friends and participating in interesting activities at school.'

× I think I my hobby is not saying too much, ask my family because I think I want to own my own, my own hobby for uh, unders, uh, more understand about myself and spend a lot, a lot of time for me.

✓ I think I don't tell my family much about my hobbies because I want to have my own hobbies to better understand myself and to spend time for myself.

Original has missing auxiliary and repeated words ('I my hobby'), and awkward phrases. Use negative contraction 'don't tell' or 'don't say', include 'about my hobbies'. 'Own my own' repetition removed. Use 'to better understand myself' and 'spend time for myself' or better 'spend a lot of time on my hobbies'. Suggestion: 'I think I don't tell my family much about my hobbies because I want to have my own hobbies to better understand myself and to spend a lot of time on them.'