Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更自然、简洁，并且在结构上更直接：先用一句主题句回答问题，然后用一两句具体细节支持。避免语法错误（如时态和搭配），并减少冗长或不相关的信息。可以加入连接词如 "because" 或 "because of" 来使句子更连贯。

예시: I enjoy playing computer games, especially League of Legends, and I’m at a master level. I started playing more seriously as a teenager because I find the strategy and teamwork very engaging, and I’ve also been inspired by game developers whose work I admire.

제안: 回答需要更清楚地表达原因与结果，注意用词和句子流畅性，例如“reach the table”可改为“reach the net”或“reach the table easily”。避免冗长说明，先直接回答，再用一两句细节说明（如参加比赛、获奖经历）。

예시: Yes, I loved playing table tennis as a child. I enjoyed the competition and practiced a lot, which helped me win several local prizes and improve my skills.

제안: 句子语法和表达需要校正；保持答案简短且结构清晰：先给出肯定句，再提供具体时间长度和一两点具体感受。避免语法错误（如“have stick to”应为“have stuck with”或“have been playing”）和不完整的句子。

예시: Yes, I have been playing table tennis since the end of primary school, about twelve years. It has given me many unforgettable memories, especially moments of teamwork and shared success with my teammates.

제안: 意思表达不够清楚，要先直接回答（Yes/No），然后说明细节。修正词汇和句子结构（例如“cannot begin again”不明确，可能想说“can’t gather enough players”）。注意避免重复词和多余信息，使用连接词提高连贯性。

예시: Yes, several members of my family enjoy playing card games. If we don’t have enough players at home, we usually invite neighbors or friends to join us and we often play late into the night.

× I am really fond of playing computer games and I have achieved a master level in the League of Legends.

✓ I am really fond of playing computer games and I have achieved a master level in League of Legends.

句中“the League of Legends”不需要定冠词“the”。此外动名词短语“playing computer games”用法正确。建议：专有游戏名一般不加冠词，保持原句时删除“the”。

× When I was young, I never dreamed of one day I would be dedicated to computer games, but I really get a lot of fun when playing the games and inspired by my favorite programmers, it is really interesting.

✓ When I was young, I never dreamed that one day I would be devoted to computer games, but I really get a lot of fun from playing games and, inspired by my favorite programmers, I find it really interesting.

句中时态和结构混用：先用过去时“was young/neverd dreamed”，接从句要用‘that + would’而不是夹带现在时；“dedicated to”用于人时可改为“devoted to”；“get a lot of fun when playing the games”中应为“get a lot of fun from playing games”；“inspired by..., it is really interesting”为结构不清，改为“inspired by..., I find it really interesting”。建议：保持时态一致，使用合适的介词短语（from），以及清晰的主语。

× I was really fond of playing table tennis when I was a kid because at the time I wasn't very high, so it was difficult for me to reach the table and replace the ball back to the other side of people.

✓ I was really fond of playing table tennis when I was a kid because at the time I wasn't very tall, so it was difficult for me to reach the table and return the ball to the other side of the people.

原句中“very high”用来描述身高不当，应为“tall”。“replace the ball back to the other side of people”结构错误，应为“return the ball to the other side”或“return the ball to my opponent”。建议：使用合适的形容词描述身高（tall），以及常用的网球/乒乓球动词“return/put back”。保持过去时一致。

× But I really got a lot of enjoyment during the process of competition and won many prizes.

✓ But I really got a lot of enjoyment from competing and won many prizes.

“during the process of competition”冗长且不地道，常用动名词短语“from competing”或“from the competitions”。建议：用简洁常见的表达，保持过去时。

× I have stick to play table tennis for about 12 years since the end of my primary school, and I really get a lot of enjoyment and unforgettable memory from the play process.

✓ I have stuck to playing table tennis for about 12 years since the end of primary school, and I have gotten a lot of enjoyment and unforgettable memories from playing.

“have stick”时态和形式错误，应为现在完成时的过去分词“have stuck to”或更常用“have stuck with/been playing”；“stick to play”搭配不当，应为“stick to playing”；“unforgettable memory”需复数“memories”；“from the play process”不地道，改为“from playing”。建议：使用正确的现在完成时结构和动名词搭配，注意可数名词复数形式。

× In the sound special moment shared by my teammates, I hope I can play the as long as.

✓ In those special moments shared with my teammates, I hope I can keep playing as long as possible.

原句词序与词汇错误：“sound special moment”无意义，改为“those special moments”；“shared by my teammates”更自然为“shared with my teammates”；“I hope I can play the as long as”语法错误且缺少词，改为“keep playing as long as possible”。建议：注意形容词顺序和代词/冠词使用，保持语句完整并使用习惯搭配。

× Of course, three of my family members are really like playing cards.

✓ Of course, three of my family members really like playing cards.

原句中“are really like playing cards”中多余be动词导致语法错误，应直接用“like”作为谓语：“three ... really like”。建议：主语+谓语结构中不要插入多余的be动词。

× However, as we can, all three people can not begin again, so we will always invite our neighbors or friends to join our team and play for for the whole night.

✓ However, since we can't always get together, the three of us often invite our neighbours or friends to join us and play through the whole night.

原句“as we can, all three people can not begin again”结构混乱且含义不清；“can not begin again”不是想表达的意思，应为“can't always get together”或“can't meet often”；“join our team and play for for the whole night”有重复“for for”并且搭配不自然，改为“join us and play through the whole night”。建议：用清晰的因果或原因连接词（since/because），避免重复词汇，使用自然短语如“get together/join us/play through the night”。