Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えは明確で内容も具体的ですが、文法ミス（冠詞、省略、動詞の形）と冗長な表現が見られます。トピック文の後に1〜2文で具体例を述べ、接続詞を入れて論理性を高めてください。例えば冠詞（a concert）、時制（when I have free time）や語順（I usually go to concerts or handshake events）を修正すると自然になります。

예시: Yes, I do. My main hobby is oshikatsu, which means supporting my favorite idols. When I have free time, I usually go to concerts or handshake events, and I really enjoy meeting other fans there.

제안: 内容が分かりますが、文法（時制の一致、不要な繰り返し）と語順の誤りがあり、話がやや散漫です。まず簡潔なトピック文を述べ、その後に具体的な状況（いつ、誰と、どんなゲーム）を追加してください。接続表現（for example, after）を正確に使い、過去形を統一しましょう。

예시: Yes, I did. I was really into playing video games as a child. For example, after I finished my classes I often played games with my friends, especially action and puzzle games.

제안: 答えは明確ですが、文法（現在完了の使用、主語と動詞の一致）と語彙の選択に改善が必要です。短く直接的なトピック文（No, I haven't）ではじめ、その後で変化の理由や現在の趣味を具体的に説明すると良いです。曖昧な表現（or something）は避け、具体的な活動名を挙げましょう。

예시: No, I haven't. My hobbies have changed over time; when I was a child I loved video games, but now I prefer social hobbies such as playing card games and talking with friends.

제안: 理由は示されていますが、表現がカジュアルで少し不自然です。論理的につなげるために接続詞（because, so）を正しく使い、具体的な例（どの点で違うか）を加えてください。また 'my family is just me and parents' は 'it's just my parents and me' のように自然な語順に直しましょう。

예시: No, I don't. Because there's a large age gap, my parents and I have different interests. It's just my parents and me at home, so they don't really understand or share my idol-related hobbies.

× Yes I have, my hobby is oshikatsu which means supporting favorite idols.

✓ Yes, I do. My hobby is oshikatsu, which means supporting my favorite idols.

The student used 'Yes I have' incorrectly to answer possession; use 'Yes, I do' or 'Yes, I have one.' Also 'favorite idols' needs a possessive 'my' to specify whose favorites they are. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: reply 'Yes, I do.' or 'Yes, I have one.' and use 'my favorite idols.'

× For example if I have a free time I usually go to concert or shake hands event.

✓ For example, if I have free time I usually go to concerts or handshake events.

'a free time' is incorrect; 'free time' is uncountable so no article. 'go to concert' needs plural or an article: use 'go to concerts' for general habit. 'shake hands event' is unnatural; 'handshake event' or 'handshake events' is correct. Also add commas after introductory phrase. Suggestion: use 'free time' and pluralize countable nouns for general habits.

× It is really fun.

✓ They are really fun.

The pronoun 'It' is unclear because the student referred to multiple activities (concerts and handshake events). Use plural 'They' to match the plural noun and verb 'are'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun agrees in number with the referenced activities.

× Yes, I had. I was really into playing games.

✓ Yes, I did. I was really into playing games.

Answering 'Did you have any hobbies...' requires 'Yes, I did' rather than 'Yes, I had.' 'Had' is past simple of 'have' but in short answers use auxiliary 'did'. Suggestion: use 'Yes, I did.' for short affirmative past answers.

× For example, after I finish my I finished my class.

✓ For example, after I finished my class,

The sentence mixes present 'finish' and past 'finished' and contains a duplication 'my I finished'. It should be fully past tense to match 'I was really into' and use correct word order: 'after I finished my class.' Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and remove duplication.

× I usually play the games with my friend.

✓ I usually played games with my friends.

When describing past habitual action, use past tense 'played'. 'the games' is unnatural; use 'games' without 'the'. If playing with more than one friend, use plural 'friends', or 'my friend' if singular. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and omit unnecessary articles.

× No, I don't have because my hobby have changed gradually.

✓ No, I don't have one because my hobbies have changed gradually.

'I don't have' needs an object ('one' or 'any'). 'my hobby have' has subject-verb agreement error: plural 'hobbies have' or singular 'my hobby has'. Context implies multiple hobbies changed over time, so use 'hobbies have changed'. Suggestion: include the object after 'have' and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× For example when I was a child I was really into games, but now I prefer to communicate with people like card game or something.

✓ For example, when I was a child I was really into games, but now I prefer communicating with people through card games or similar activities.

Use comma after introductory phrase. 'prefer to communicate with people like card game' is incorrect: 'prefer communicating with people through card games' or 'prefer to play card games with people' is natural. 'card game' should be plural or described as 'a card game'. Suggestion: use gerund after 'prefer' when appropriate and choose correct preposition 'through' or 'with' and pluralize nouns for general activities.

× No I don't because our age gap is very big.

✓ No, I don't because there is a big age gap between us.

'our age gap is very big' is understandable but more natural is 'there is a big age gap between us.' This fixes style and 'very big' can be replaced by 'big'. Also add comma after 'No.' Suggestion: use 'there is' + 'between us' for clarity.

× My family is just me and parents so I guess my parents cannot understand my hobby.

✓ My family is just my parents and me, so I guess my parents cannot understand my hobby.

Word order: 'my parents and me' is more natural than 'me and parents'. Include possessive 'my' before 'parents'. Add comma before 'so'. Suggestion: use correct word order and include possessive determiners.