Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, avoid fillers (uh), correct grammar (singular/plural, verb forms), and use a clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 specific details. Use linking words if adding details.

예시: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing the guitar and reading books; I also go running and do regular exercise to stay fit.

제안: Start with a direct answer about childhood, avoid irrelevant items (buying a motorcycle is less a childhood hobby), reduce hesitation, and give specific examples with brief reasons or ages. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, when I was a child I enjoyed learning music and playing the guitar. I also liked simple outdoor activities like cycling and building small models because they helped me be creative.

제안: Answer directly naming the hobby and give a clear time reference (age or years). Remove fillers, correct tense and word order, and provide one or two specific details about why you kept the hobby.

예시: Yes. I have played the guitar since I was eight years old, and I have also loved riding bikes. I still practice guitar regularly because it relaxes me and helps me improve.

제안: Respond directly (Yes/No) and explain briefly with a clear reason. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases (e.g., "different office"). Use linking words (because, but, however) and give a specific example showing difference.

예시: No, my hobbies are different from my family's because they prefer quieter activities like reading or gardening. I prefer playing the guitar and riding motorcycles because they make me feel excited and free.

× As I have hobbies like uh, playing a guitars and uh reading books and uh doing running and uh exercise doing.

✓ I have hobbies such as playing the guitar, reading books, running, and doing exercise.

The sentence uses incorrect plural forms and awkward phrasing: 'a guitars' mixes singular article with plural noun; 'doing running' and 'exercise doing' are incorrect. Use 'the guitar' or simply 'playing guitar'; use gerunds correctly: 'running' and 'doing exercise' or better 'exercising'. Also start with 'I have hobbies such as' for natural phrasing.

× As I have several hobbies like, uh, buying a motorcycle that I had, uh, done that and I really, and, and learning different kinds of, uh, musical activities like, uh, learning guitar and different activities that I have done.

✓ I had several hobbies such as buying a motorcycle, which I did, and learning various musical activities like playing the guitar and other activities I did.

Tense and verb form are confused. 'As I have' should be 'I had' to match 'when you were a child'; 'buying a motorcycle that I had, uh, done that' is redundant and ungrammatical — use 'buying a motorcycle, which I did'. 'Learning different kinds of musical activities' is awkward; use 'learning various musical activities like playing the guitar'. Ensure past tense consistently when referring to childhood hobbies.

× Yes, I have UH-2 hobbies like playing guitar and buying motorcycle.

✓ Yes, I have two hobbies: playing the guitar and riding a motorcycle.

'UH-2' should be the word 'two'; 'buying motorcycle' is unnatural when describing an ongoing hobby — 'riding a motorcycle' or 'motorcycling' is correct. Use 'the guitar' or 'playing guitar' and include an article 'a' before 'motorcycle' when appropriate.

× It was my uh, it was my favorite hobbies among all all of them.

✓ They were my favorite hobbies among all of them.

Subject-verb number mismatch and article use: 'It was' (singular) conflicts with 'favorite hobbies' (plural). Use 'They were my favorite hobbies' to match plural. Also remove duplicate 'all'.

× Uh, I have playing guitar since UH-8 and my hobby was to bike.

✓ I have been playing the guitar since I was eight, and my hobby was biking.

'I have playing' is ungrammatical; use present perfect continuous 'I have been playing' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues. Replace 'since UH-8' with 'since I was eight' to indicate age. For the second clause, keep past reference consistent: 'my hobby was biking' or 'I used to enjoy biking'.

× Bike I had buy I had bought.

✓ I had bought a bike.

The sentence has wrong word order and redundant verb forms. Use correct past perfect or simple past as needed: 'I bought a bike' (simple past) or 'I had bought a bike' (past perfect) depending on context. Here simple past 'I bought a bike' is clearer.

× No, I have different howies as my family MO members because, uh, my family members are mostly in different field, but I like to choose my own always.

✓ No, my hobbies are different from my family members' because they mostly work in different fields, and I always like to choose my own hobbies.

Multiple issues: 'howies' is misspelling of 'hobbies'; 'different ... as my family members' should be 'different from my family members'' (use 'from' for comparison and possessive apostrophe). 'MO' unclear and removed. 'Different field' should be plural 'different fields'. Reorder for natural English: 'I always like to choose my own hobbies.' Use correct possessive for 'family members'.

× Like uh, playing guitar and riding motorcycle.

✓ For example, playing the guitar and riding a motorcycle.

'Riding motorcycle' is missing an article: use 'riding a motorcycle' or 'motorcycling'. 'Playing guitar' is acceptable but 'playing the guitar' is more natural in many contexts. Begin with a linking phrase like 'for example' for clarity.

× Uh, it makes me feel happy whenever I ride bike, so I choose different office.

✓ It makes me feel happy whenever I ride my bike, so I choose different hobbies.

Missing possessive 'my' before 'bike'. 'Ride bike' should be 'ride my bike' or 'ride a bike'. 'I choose different office' is incorrect and likely meant 'different hobbies'; 'office' is wrong word choice. Use present tense consistently: 'It makes me feel happy... so I choose different hobbies.'