Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và phát âm; tránh lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ: “a big fan of sports”), sửa cấu trúc câu để tự nhiên hơn; rút gọn câu dài không cần thiết; dùng liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc. Cụ thể: sửa lỗi số nhiều/số ít, thì, và chọn từ phù hợp thay vì ‘track’ hay ‘reduction my battery’.

예시: Yes, I do. I'm a big fan of sports, especially football. I usually play with my friends about three times a week, which helps me relax after a long day and recharge my energy.

제안: Sửa ngữ pháp, thì và lựa chọn từ; câu đáp nên bắt đầu trực tiếp trả lời (Yes/No hoặc statement), dùng thì quá khứ cho ký ức (I loved/I used to) và tránh lỗi nhân xưng/đại từ. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn để minh họa.

예시: Yes. When I was about eight years old, I used to love playing basketball. I played with my friends in the garden near my house, which kept me active and helped me stay fit.

제안: Sửa thì và cấu trúc câu (Since I was a child; I have dreamed/have wanted), dùng từ vựng chính xác (follow matches, train regularly). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ và làm rõ ý với một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ được liên kết bằng liên từ phù hợp.

예시: Yes. Since I was a child I have dreamed of becoming a professional football player, and that passion remains. I still follow matches closely and train regularly at my local club because I enjoy the teamwork and tactical aspects of the game.

제안: Sửa ngữ pháp, cấu trúc và làm rõ ý; trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích ngắn gọn. Tránh từ không rõ nghĩa như “junk work” và lặp từ; sử dụng cấu trúc đơn giản để diễn đạt ai thích gì và vì sao họ không có cùng sở thích.

예시: Not really. There are only three people in my family—my parents and me—and my parents are very busy with work, so they don't have much time for hobbies. I enjoy sports on my own, so my hobbies are different from theirs.

× I am big fan of sport, especially football.

✓ I am a big fan of sport, especially football.

You need the indefinite article 'a' before singular countable noun phrase 'big fan'. Use 'a big fan of sport' or more commonly 'a big fan of sports'. Suggestion: 'I am a big fan of sports, especially football.'

× I often play football with my friend about three times for a week.

✓ I often play football with my friend about three times a week.

Use the prepositional phrase 'a week' to indicate frequency. 'For a week' implies duration, not frequency. Also 'about three times a week' is the natural collocation.

× When I play football, I can feel more relaxed after a long day.

✓ When I play football, I feel more relaxed after a long day.

Using 'can feel' is grammatically possible but unnecessary here; the simple present 'feel' is more natural to describe a habitual result. Use 'I feel more relaxed' to indicate a regular effect.

× It helps me reduce track and reduction my battery too.

✓ It helps me relieve stress and recharge my energy.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and uses wrong words: 'reduce track' and 'reduction my battery' are incorrect collocations. Use 'relieve stress' and 'recharge my energy' to convey relaxation and renewed energy.

× Where was 8 years old?

✓ When I was 8 years old?

The question word 'Where' is wrong; use 'When' to ask about age/time. Also correct word order: 'I was' not 'was I' depending on context; as an answer start 'When I was 8 years old.' Suggestion: 'When I was 8 years old, I loved playing basketball.'

× I love playing basketball.

✓ I loved playing basketball.

The examiner asked about childhood hobbies (past), so use past tense 'loved' to match time frame. Use past tense to describe past habits.

× I have friends play with my friend in the garden near my house because it helps me do more activity outside and help me stay fit too.

✓ I used to play with my friends in the garden near my house because it helped me be more active and stay fit.

Original sentence has pronoun/subject errors ('I have friends play with my friend') and tense inconsistency. Use past habitual 'used to play' or simple past 'played'. 'Do more activity' is incorrect collocation; use 'be more active'. Ensure verbs agree and maintain past tense 'helped'.

× Since I were a child, I dream of becoming a professional football player and that passion has stayed with me.

✓ Since I was a child, I dreamed of becoming a professional football player and that passion has stayed with me.

Use 'was' not 'were' for singular first person past ('I was a child'). For a past habitual dream use past 'dreamed'. Alternatively 'Since I was a child, I have dreamed' could combine present perfect. Maintain tense consistency.

× I still follow match and train regularly at the local club.

✓ I still follow matches and train regularly at the local club.

Use plural 'matches' (countable) after 'follow'. 'Follow match' is incorrect. 'Train regularly' is fine. Ensure noun form is plural when referring to games in general.

× I love the teamwork and assessment of the game.

✓ I love the teamwork and excitement of the game.

'Assessment of the game' is incorrect meaning; likely intended 'excitement' or 'tactics'. Use an appropriate noun. 'Assessment' means evaluation which doesn't fit context.

× I don't think so because if my family just have three people, my my mom, my dad and me and my parents are very busy about junk work so I don't think they can spend more time for them hobby but I think my girl.

✓ I don't think so because my family only has three people: my mom, my dad and me. My parents are very busy with work so they can't spend much time on hobbies, but I think my younger sister does.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement 'family has' not 'have'; duplication 'my my'; incorrect phrase 'junk work' should be 'work' or 'busy with work'; 'spend more time for them hobby' should be 'spend much time on hobbies' and pronoun 'them' wrong; unclear 'my girl' likely 'my younger sister'. Correct articles, pronouns, verb agreement and prepositions.