Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu cấu trúc rõ ràng và nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp làm ý không mạch lạc. Cần bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, dùng thì đúng, rút gọn ý thừa và nêu cụ thể 1-2 sở thích hiện tại. Thêm liên từ đơn giản (for example, because, and) để làm rõ lý do và hiệu quả. Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu tự nhiên.

예시: Yes, I have a few hobbies. I enjoy reading online articles and listening to music because they help me relax after work. For example, I usually read short posts about technology and listen to pop music while commuting.

제안: Ý tưởng rõ nhưng phát biểu lẫn lộn về thì và cấu trúc. Cần dùng quá khứ khi nói về thời thơ ấu và hiện tại khi so sánh. Tránh lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp (enjoy + -ing). Thêm một câu nối để so sánh rõ ràng (but now / however). Giữ 2-3 câu ngắn gọn.

예시: Yes, I used to play football with my friends every afternoon after school. I enjoyed it a lot because it was fun and kept me active. However, I am too busy now to play as often as I did then.

제안: Câu trả lời có ý tốt nhưng có nhiều lỗi cấu trúc và từ vựng không chính xác. Nên nói rõ: hobby, how started, what you do, give specific examples. Dùng thì hiện hoàn thành nếu vẫn còn làm, và dùng danh từ/động từ đúng (bake cookies, try recipes). Tránh câu dài lủng củng.

예시: Yes, I have enjoyed cooking since I was a child. I learned to cook with my mother and still like trying new recipes. For example, I often bake apple pies and chocolate chip cookies on weekends.

제안: Câu trả lời lặp lỗi ngữ pháp (possessive, plural, verb forms) và cách diễn đạt không tự nhiên. Nên nêu trực tiếp có/không, mô tả sở thích chung, giải thích lý do cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ (because, so) và sửa cấu trúc (watch TV, spend time together). Giữ 2-3 câu rõ ràng.

예시: Yes, my family and I enjoy some of the same hobbies, especially watching TV together. We often watch the news or family dramas because they start interesting conversations. Watching shows together helps us spend more quality time as a family.

× Oh yes, I think have a hobbies is very good for a person because it help me more happy and have us think we can purchase and seems to me I have all hobbies in the nearest time is reading posts or listening to music. I think it's very.

✓ Oh yes, I think having a hobby is very good for a person because it helps me feel happier. At the moment my hobbies are reading posts and listening to music. I think that's very enjoyable.

Several errors: incorrect article and countable noun ('a hobbies' -> 'a hobby' or 'hobbies'), missing gerund after think ('think have' -> 'think having'), verb agreement ('help me' -> 'helps me'), awkward comparative 'more happy' -> 'feel happier', incorrect phrase 'have us think we can purchase' is unclear so removed, tense/word choice for recent time -> 'at the moment' and plural agreement for 'hobbies are'. Suggestion: use singular/plural correctly, use gerund after verbs that take noun phrases, ensure subject-verb agreement, and simplify unclear phrases.

× Oh yes, I think I enjoy, I very enjoy play football with my friends every afternoon or when I finish the studies in the school. But in nowadays I very busy to play football, so I think I very love it when I was young.

✓ Oh yes, I really enjoyed playing football with my friends every afternoon after school. But nowadays I am very busy and cannot play football, although I loved it when I was young.

Errors: incorrect present tense and adverb placement ('I enjoy, I very enjoy play' -> mixed tenses; use past for childhood activities: 'enjoyed playing'), verb + -ing required after enjoy ('enjoy play' -> 'enjoyed playing'), 'in the nowadays' incorrect -> 'nowadays', missing auxiliary and adjective order ('I very busy to play' -> 'I am very busy and cannot play'), inconsistent tense 'I very love it when I was young' -> 'I loved it when I was young'. Suggestion: match tense to time references, use 'enjoy' + -ing, use 'am' for state, and place adverbs correctly.

× Oh yes I think I have a hobby but I have ever had to choose is cooking with my mother because I can to try some new recipes or try some edit cookies such as apple pies or chocolate chips cookie.

✓ Oh yes, I think the hobby I have always enjoyed is cooking with my mother because I can try new recipes or bake cookies such as apple pie or chocolate chip cookies.

Errors: awkward phrasing and wrong verb forms ('have ever had to choose' -> 'have always enjoyed' or 'have had since childhood'), 'can to try' -> 'can try' (no 'to' after can), 'try some edit cookies' incorrect -> 'bake cookies', plural agreement 'chocolate chips cookie' -> 'chocolate chip cookies', 'apple pies' usually 'apple pie' or 'apple pies'. Suggestion: use correct modal structure (can + base verb), use -ing or past participle appropriately, and ensure correct noun forms/pluralization.

× Oh yes of course probably, and my family's very loves watching TV's such as news or some films about the family love. I very love to watching this with my family's members because it's help me to collect with them more.

✓ Oh yes, of course. My family really loves watching TV programs such as the news or films about family relationships. I really love watching these with my family because it helps me connect with them more.

Errors: possessive and plural forms ('my family's very loves' -> 'my family really loves'), incorrect plural of TV ('TV's' -> 'TV programs' or 'TV shows'), awkward phrase 'films about the family love' -> 'films about family relationships', wrong verb form after 'love' ('love to watching' -> 'love watching'), pronoun/phrase 'my family's members' -> 'my family', subject-verb agreement 'it's help me' -> 'it helps me', and word choice 'collect with them' -> 'connect with them'. Suggestion: use correct possessive/plural forms, correct verb forms after verbs of preference, use proper collocations like 'connect with'.