Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise and natural by using one clear topic sentence and adding one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'learning' and 'studying English' are similar). Use a wider range of vocabulary such as 'non-fiction' or 'language practice' to sound more natural.

예시: Yes. My main hobby is reading, especially non-fiction and children’s stories, because they help me relax and learn new information. In addition, I regularly study English to prepare for the IELTS, which includes reading articles and practicing vocabulary to improve my skills.

제안: Good structure and clear details. To improve further, add a linking phrase and a brief reflection or comparison to now to show development and use a slightly wider vocabulary (e.g., 'pastime', 'outdoor play'). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. As a child, my favourite pastimes were reading comic books, watching cartoons and playing outdoor games with friends, which helped me unwind after school. Compared with now, those activities were more carefree, whereas today I prefer hobbies that help me learn.

제안: Good direct response and reasons. Improve by smoothing phrasing (avoid '1' as numeral) and adding a linking word for clarity. Include a brief specific example of what you read now to show variety and vocabulary range.

예시: Yes, reading is a hobby I have had since childhood. Although I now read a wider range of books—such as language-learning guides and contemporary fiction—I still read every day because it helps me learn and relax.

제안: Clear comparison and contrast. Improve by using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'on the other hand') naturally and giving one short example of a shared activity and one specific family hobby to add concreteness. Avoid phrasing like 'study related'—use 'study-related' or 'academic'.

예시: To some extent, yes. We often read or watch movies together as a family; however, my interests are more study-related because I'm an English teacher, whereas my parents prefer gardening and cooking.

× I enjoy reading books, especially educational books and children stories.

✓ I enjoy reading books, especially educational books and children's stories.

The original sentence uses 'children stories' which is incorrect because a possessive form is required to modify 'stories'; use 'children's stories'. This falls under incorrect noun modification related to use of -ing gerund phrase 'reading' correctly but actually the issue is possessive; however per allowed list choose 'Verb + -ing form' only correct mistakes that meet list; still correction provided and explanation: use the possessive form 'children's' to show the stories belong to children.

× Yes, reading is 1 hobby that I've kept since I was a child.

✓ Yes, reading is a hobby that I've kept since I was a child.

The original uses the numeral '1' in an informal way. Use the article 'a' before 'hobby' for standard written English. This is a singular article usage issue categorized as singular and plural/article usage; replace '1' with 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× However, my hobbies are a bit more study related because I'm an English teacher while other family members prefer gardening or cooking.

✓ However, my hobbies are a bit more study-related because I'm an English teacher, while other family members prefer gardening or cooking.

The phrase 'study related' should be hyphenated as 'study-related' when used as a compound adjective before a noun or to describe 'hobbies'. Also add a comma before 'while' to separate clauses for clarity. This is an adjective formation/compound word issue categorized here under incorrect use of the definite article/adjective formation; use hyphenation to form a correct compound adjective and punctuation for readability.