Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and directly state your main idea first. Avoid hesitations and repetitions. Give one clear supporting detail about working out (what type, how often) and use linking words to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: I don't really have many hobbies because I prefer not to spend money on activities. However, I have been doing regular workouts since I was three years old, mainly running and bodyweight exercises, about four times a week. Because exercise is free and helps me stay healthy, I focus on that instead of other hobbies.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and provide specific details about activities with linking words. Remove filler words and unclear phrases. Mention a concrete example of a childhood activity and why you enjoyed it.

예시: I didn't have a formal hobby as a child, but I spent a lot of time playing at the playground with my friends and younger brother. For example, we often played tag and climbed on the jungle gym, which I enjoyed because it was active and social.

제안: Give a direct answer and then briefly explain with a specific example of what you tried and why it didn't stick. Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to make the explanation coherent and avoid hesitations.

예시: Not really. I tried several activities, however none became a lasting hobby; for example, I joined painting and football classes for a few months but stopped because I lost interest and preferred spending time with friends instead.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear reason with a short specific example comparing your interests to a family member's. Use linking phrases like 'because' and 'for example' to improve coherence and accuracy.

예시: No, I don't share the same hobbies as my family because our personalities and interests differ. For example, my father enjoys gardening while I prefer exercising at the gym, so we rarely take up the same activities.

× To be honest, I don't have any hobbies because I'm not interested in the activities or spending money for hobbies.

✓ To be honest, I don't have any hobbies because I'm not interested in activities or spending money on hobbies.

Use of articles and prepositions with nouns: 'the activities' is unnecessary when speaking generally so use 'activities'. Also the correct preposition is 'spend money on' something, not 'spend money for'. Keep present simple to match current state.

× But I I'm working out Yeah, for from since I was in yeah, three years old, so.

✓ But I work out, yes, since I was three years old.

Subject-verb form: use simple present 'I work out' for habitual action. Remove redundant words ('I'm', 'for from') and use 'since' with a point in time ('since I was three years old'). Keep sentence concise and fluent.

× I don't think I had a hobby when I was child because I usually hung out with my friends or my younger brother at the playground.

✓ I don't think I had a hobby when I was a child because I usually hung out with my friends or my younger brother at the playground.

Missing article before 'child': use 'a child'. Past tense 'had' is correct because referring to childhood; 'usually hung out' is fine. Adding 'a' fixes article error (Grammar Problem Type ID 22) but primary issue relates to article, categorized here as Past tense issue because tense is appropriate; explanation notes article correction.

× Yeah, and I, I liked, umm, you're playing.

✓ Yeah, and I liked playing.

Confusion between 'you're' (you are) and the gerund 'playing'. Use 'liked playing' to express past preference. Remove fillers and repeated words for clarity.

× Not really. Umm actually I tried to to do many things to have a hobby, but I finally I couldn't find.

✓ Not really. Actually, I tried many things to find a hobby, but I couldn't finally find one.

Use correct verb patterns: 'try to do many things' is wordy; 'tried many things to find a hobby' is clearer. 'Couldn't finally find' is awkward; place 'finally' before the verb or use 'couldn't find one' to indicate failure. Add 'one' to refer to 'a hobby'.

× No, I don't because, uh, we are we all of them different are different.

✓ No, I don't because we are all different.

Remove redundant and incorrect pronouns and word order: 'we are all different' correctly expresses that family members differ. The original repeats words and misuses 'them' which is unnecessary.

× Yeah, personality. So it's difficult to have a same hobby.

✓ We have different personalities, so it's difficult to have the same hobby.

Use correct noun phrase 'different personalities' rather than isolated 'personality'. Also use the article 'the' with 'same hobby' to refer to a specific shared hobby: 'have the same hobby'. This corrects adjective/noun agreement and article usage.