Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and avoid repetition. Use linking words (e.g., since, because, and) to improve coherence and vary vocabulary (e.g., enjoy, played since childhood, relaxing, social). Keep answers to 2–4 sentences.

예시: I enjoy playing badminton. I’ve been playing since I was nine because it keeps me fit and makes me happy. I usually play twice a week with friends, which helps me relax and socialise.

제안: Correct grammar and be specific: use past tense consistently and give concrete examples (types of books, frequency). Use linking words like because or so to connect reasons. Avoid colloquial fillers such as “yeah” in formal test answers.

예시: Yes, I also loved reading when I was a child. I used to read adventure and fantasy books every evening because they helped me relax and escape into different worlds.

제안: Do not respond with a question. Answer directly with a topic sentence and a brief explanation. Acknowledge repetition politely if needed, then give the information asked. Keep it natural and informative.

예시: Yes, I have. I have been playing badminton since I was nine, so it’s a hobby I’ve had since childhood because my parents encouraged me to join a local club.

제안: Provide a clear comparative sentence and correct grammar. State your preference and then contrast with family members using linking phrases (however, whereas). Give specific examples of your siblings’ hobbies and maybe mention why they differ.

예시: Not really — I prefer sports like badminton, whereas my siblings enjoy quieter hobbies such as reading, drawing and creative writing. We chose different activities because I like physical activity and they prefer quieter, artistic pastimes.

× I have a hobby.

✓ I have a hobby.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct and matches the present tense context.

× I started playing badminton when I was 9 and so I was very interested in this sport because this sport gave me a lot of happiness to me.

✓ I started playing badminton when I was nine, and I became very interested in the sport because it gave me me a lot of happiness.

The sentence has repetition and awkward phrasing rather than a strict past participle error. Correction simplifies: 'became' is a clearer past-tense verb for change of state; remove duplicate 'this sport' and the redundant 'to me'. Use 'nine' spelled out for formality. Suggestion: use concise phrasing and avoid repetition.

× Apart from playing badminton, another hobby when I were a child is reading.

✓ Apart from playing badminton, another hobby I had as a child was reading.

Error: 'were' is incorrect for singular first-person subject in past tense. Use past tense 'had' and 'was' to match time frame. Also restructure 'when I were a child' to 'as a child' for natural phrasing.

× This is because reading can reduce my stress, can give me some relax.

✓ This is because reading can reduce my stress and help me relax.

'Relax' is a verb, so 'some relax' is incorrect. Use 'help me relax' or 'give me some relaxation'. Also join coordinated verbs with 'and' for fluency.

× I can just chill at my home, yeah.

✓ I can just chill at home.

Phrase 'at my home' is grammatical but 'at home' is more natural. Remove filler 'yeah' in formal responses. Keep sentence concise.

× Why are you asking the same question?

✓ Why are you asking the same question?

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct and appropriate for present continuous context.

× Not really, I prefer sports but my siblings prefer hobby that are not to.

✓ Not really. I prefer sports, but my siblings prefer hobbies that are not the same.

Multiple errors: 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' to match 'siblings'; 'that are not to' is ungrammatical. Use 'that are not the same' to express contrast. Also split into two sentences or use a comma for clarity.

× MMM, there are children are like reading, drawing, writing.

✓ They like activities such as reading, drawing, and writing.

Original sentence has duplication 'there are children are' and unclear subject. Use 'They like activities such as...' to clarify who 'they' refers to (siblings or children) and list items with parallel gerund forms. Use commas and 'and' before final item for correct list structure.