Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答需要更自然與精簡，避免冗詞和語法錯誤。先直接回答問題，再用一到兩句具體細節支持。注意時態和詞彙搭配（例如 read books 而不是 reading books in my Daily Times，watch films 而不是 watching the films in my Daily Times）。可用連接詞使表達更流暢。

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy watching TV and reading books in my free time. For example, I often watch documentaries and romantic novels adapted into films, and I usually read novels on weekends.

제안: 回答中存在大量語音填充詞與語法錯誤，需簡化句子並使用正確時態（過去式）。描述要具體且連貫，例如說明為何收集包裝紙有趣或特別的回憶。減少重複和不必要的詞語。

예시: Yes. When I was a child, I collected snack wrappers. I kept them in a small box because I liked the colorful designs, and sometimes I traded them with my classmates.

제안: 回答混亂且語言不流暢，時態和語序不正確。應直接說明從小騎自行車，並提供具體例子（例如與朋友一起騎、比賽）。使用正確詞彙（ride a bike, competition）並避免填充語。

예시: Yes. I have enjoyed riding bikes since I was a child. For example, my friends and I used to ride together and organize small races, and the winners sometimes received a small prize from their parents.

제안: 回答需更清晰且語法正確。先給出直接回答，再說明具體情況（何時一起看電視、看什麼節目、為何喜歡）。避免不必要的重複和口頭禪，使用連接詞使句子更通順。

예시: Yes. We all enjoy watching TV together. For example, during the Spring Festival and on weekends we gather to watch variety shows and movies, and then discuss the plots afterwards.

× I like watching TV, reading books and watching the films in my Daily Times.

✓ I like watching TV, reading books and watching films in my free time.

句中用詞不當：用 “the films” 和 “in my Daily Times” 不自然。English 中表示“在空閒時間看電影”應用複數名詞 films（無需定冠詞 the），且習慣說 “in my free time” 或 “in my spare time”。建議用更地道的表達替換不恰當的詞語。

× So I read different kinds of books such as the documentaries, romantic books or some novels.

✓ So I read different kinds of books such as documentaries, romance books or novels.

形容詞與名詞搭配不當：應為複數名詞 documentaries, novels，且 “romantic books” 更自然的表達是 “romance books” 或 “romance novels”。不要在可數複數前加不必要的定冠詞 the。

× When I was a child, I truly like collect the snacks paper for myself.

✓ When I was a child, I truly liked collecting snack wrappers for myself.

時態錯誤與動名詞形式：因為是過去的習慣或狀態，應使用過去時 liked；動詞 “collect” 作為習慣行為的名詞化應用動名詞 collecting。名詞 “snacks paper” 不正確，正確應為 “snack wrappers”（零食包裝紙/袋）。

× For example, when I like umm, ate some snacks or some candies, I will like collect their papers in a little box.

✓ For example, when I ate some snacks or candies, I would collect their wrappers in a little box.

動詞形式與時態混用：從屬時間子句描述過去情況應用過去時 ate，而主句描述習慣用 would 或 used to，加上動名詞/名詞 wrappers。原句中 “will like collect” 組合不正確，應用過去習慣用 would collect。

× So collecting, umm, I was, I would say collecting was the uh, my hobby in my Daily Times.

✓ So collecting, I would say, was my hobby when I was young.

句子結構混亂且詞語選用不當：原句冗長且插入語過多，應簡潔表達 “收集是我年輕時的愛好”。“in my Daily Times” 用法錯誤，應改為 when I was young 或 in my childhood。

× Yes I do, I like all riding the bike with my friends in my childhood since my childhood.

✓ Yes I do. I liked riding bikes with my friends when I was a child.

時態和重複短語錯誤：描述過去應用過去時 liked；“in my childhood since my childhood” 重複且冗餘，應簡化為 when I was a child；“riding the bike” 可改為 riding bikes（泛指）。

× For example we will like UMM carry them together and Rd. UMM and having a BIC bicycle competition together so that when we get to the UMM like get to the so the winner could get the money from our parents.

✓ For example, we used to ride together and have bicycle competitions so that the winner could get money from our parents.

句子結構混亂且有眾多無意義填充詞（umm, Rd., BIC 等）。應去掉口頭語並重組為清晰句子：used to/ would 表示過去習慣；have bicycle competitions 表示舉辦比賽；so that 用於表達目的，could get 表示過去可能性。

× Yes, we all like you watching the TV together.

✓ Yes, we all like watching TV together.

代詞使用錯誤：“you” 在此多餘且造成語意錯誤。正確表達全家一起看電視應使用主語 we 與動名詞 watching TV together。

× So during the Spring festival or some weekends, we will like gathering together and like, uh, having a talk with the TV and, and like, umm, scanning different kinds of TV and novel.

✓ So during the Spring Festival or on some weekends, we would gather together, talk while watching TV, and browse different TV programs and novels.

多處用詞不當與語序問題：應使用 habitual past 表達過去習慣 would gather；“having a talk with the TV” 不自然，應為 talk while watching TV（邊看電視邊聊天）；“scanning different kinds of TV and novel” 用詞錯誤，應為 browse different TV programs and novels（瀏覽電視節目和小說）。另外介詞用法 “during the Spring festival or on some weekends” 更自然。