Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu và từ vựng để rõ ràng hơn; sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ sai; tránh nói lẫn lộn hai hoạt động (meeting vs knitting). Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó giải thích ngắn gọn với liên từ thích hợp và ví dụ cụ thể. Ví dụ: nêu rõ bạn thích những hoạt động nào, lý do cụ thể chúng giúp bạn thư giãn, và một ví dụ ngắn về điều bạn học trực tuyến.

예시: I have a couple of hobbies. I enjoy knitting because it helps me relax and lets me be creative, and I also like browsing the Internet to learn new things, such as following tutorials on knitting or reading articles about design.

제안: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp thì và từ vựng không phù hợp; loại bỏ cụm từ không rõ nghĩa (Ghost St.); dùng liên từ để nối ý; cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về trải nghiệm và kỹ năng bạn học được. Viết lại rõ ràng: hoạt động, tần suất, cảm xúc và kỹ năng học được.

예시: When I was a child, I used to go fishing with my grandpa every weekend. It was very relaxing and I enjoyed spending time outdoors. From those trips I learned patience and basic fishing skills, such as tying knots and baiting hooks.

제안: Câu trả lời ngắn gọn và trực tiếp nhưng cần thêm chi tiết cụ thể và liên từ để làm rõ. Nêu tên trò chơi, mô tả ngắn về cách chơi hoặc vì sao nó giúp bạn và một ví dụ về kỷ niệm liên quan. Giữ tối đa 5 câu.

예시: Yes, I have. Since childhood I loved playing board games with my cousin, especially chess. Playing together helped me relax and improved my concentration, and it also brought us closer because we spent hours discussing strategies.

제안: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp, dùng từ chính xác (ví dụ 'playing with legal' không rõ nghĩa); cung cấp so sánh cụ thể và thêm liên từ để mạch lạc. Nói rõ sở thích của từng người và liệu có hoạt động chung hay không, kèm ví dụ cụ thể.

예시: No, we usually have different hobbies. For example, my brother enjoys drawing and playing video games, while I prefer playing football and browsing the Internet. Although our interests differ, we sometimes watch football matches together on weekends.

× I enjoy meeting and surfing the Internet when I have free time.

✓ I enjoy meeting people and surfing the Internet when I have free time.

The original sentence is missing an object after 'meeting'. Use 'meeting people' to clarify the activity. 'Enjoy' requires a gerund (meeting, surfing) which is correct; only add the object to make the sentence natural.

× They help me relax because knitting is creative and browsing Internet like me learning new things.

✓ They help me relax because knitting is creative and browsing the Internet lets me learn new things.

The conjunction 'and' connected two clauses but the second clause was ungrammatical: 'browsing Internet like me learning new things' is incorrect. Use 'lets me learn new things' to show causation and correct verb structure. Also add the article 'the' before 'Internet'.

× When I was a child, I used to go to fishing with my grandpa every weekend.

✓ When I was a child, I used to go fishing with my grandpa every weekend.

The verb phrase is 'go fishing' not 'go to fishing'. Remove 'to' when using the verb 'go' followed by an activity expressed with -ing.

× I enjoy Ghost St. because they are very relaxing and it was a great point in time.

✓ I enjoyed Ghost St. because it was very relaxing and it was a great time.

Tense consistency: question asked about childhood, so use past tense 'enjoyed'. 'Ghost St.' (singular place or thing) requires singular pronoun 'it', not 'they'. 'A great point in time' is unnatural; use 'a great time'.

× I also learn patient and basic fishing skill skill.

✓ I also learned patience and basic fishing skills.

Use the noun 'patience' rather than adjective 'patient' after 'learned'. 'Skill skill' is duplicated; use the plural 'skills' for general abilities. Use past tense 'learned' to match 'When I was a child' context.

× Yes, I've had a hobby since childhood.

✓ Yes, I've had a hobby since childhood.

This sentence is already correct: present perfect 'I've had' properly indicates an action continuing from the past to the present. No change needed.

× I used to play a game with my cousin which helped me relax a lot and brought us closer.

✓ I used to play a game with my cousin that helped me relax a lot and brought us closer.

In restrictive relative clauses referring to things or people, 'that' is commonly used in informal English. The original is acceptable but using 'that' is slightly more natural here. No tense change needed.

× No, I don't share the same hobby with my family.

✓ No, I don't share the same hobbies with my family.

If referring to multiple family members each having different activities, use the plural 'hobbies' to match meaning. Alternatively 'the same hobby' could be correct if meaning one hobby; here context implies plural.

× For example, my brother enjoy drawing and playing with legal, while I prefer playing football and surfing the Internet.

✓ For example, my brother enjoys drawing and playing video games, while I prefer playing football and surfing the Internet.

Subject-verb agreement: 'my brother' is third person singular and requires 'enjoys'. 'Playing with legal' is unclear; likely 'playing video games' fits context. Keep 'the Internet' with article.

× But we usually spend our free time separately.

✓ But we usually spend our free time separately.

This sentence is grammatically correct and appropriate; no change needed.