Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, use present tense consistently for current habits, vary vocabulary, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail to support your statement. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I have a few hobbies. I usually play volleyball with friends twice a week, and I also enjoy reading novels when I have free time, especially in the library. For example, last month I finished a historical novel that I found very interesting.

제안: Answer directly and use past tense correctly to describe childhood hobbies. Be specific about activities and link ideas with simple connectors. Avoid vague phrases and correct pronoun and word choice errors.

예시: When I was a child I enjoyed playing games in the street with my friends, especially football and tag. I also liked reading storybooks at home, which helped me learn new words and imagine different places.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and use correct tense and sentence structure to show continuity from childhood to now. Be specific about frequency or who you play with, and avoid awkward phrasing.

예시: Yes, I have played volleyball since I was a child. I used to play with older friends in my neighborhood, and we still meet at the local ground to play every weekend.

제안: Answer directly about similarities and differences, use correct pronouns, and give one clear comparison. Mention one or two family members and their hobbies, and contrast with your interests using linking words like "however" or "while".

예시: No, our hobbies are different. For example, my mother enjoys cooking and spends a lot of time preparing meals, while I prefer playing volleyball and reading books in my free time.

× Yes, I have different kind of hobbies.

✓ Yes, I have different kinds of hobbies.

The noun 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' when modified by 'different' because it refers to multiple types; use plural noun agreement ('kinds'). Also 'different kinds of hobbies' is the natural collocation.

× I usually play volleyball and I usually read book when I was free at time and in library.

✓ I usually play volleyball and I usually read books when I am free or in the library.

Tense inconsistency: 'was free' should be present 'am free' to match 'usually'. 'book' should be plural 'books' after 'read'. Use preposition 'in the library' and choose 'or' between times for clarity.

× While I was studying in school I usually read the story books.

✓ While I was studying at school I usually read story books.

Use preposition 'at school' instead of 'in school' (both acceptable but 'at school' is standard here). 'story books' does not need 'the'; keep plural 'story books'. The tense 'was studying' with 'usually' is acceptable for habitual past, so keep structure but adjust preposition/article.

× Not exactly, but I remember some that I used to play in street when I was small.

✓ Not exactly, but I remember that I used to play in the street when I was small.

Include 'that' to connect clauses. Use definite article 'the street' for a general place where children play. 'Some' is unnecessary and was removed to make sentence clear.

× I want to spend a lot of time with my friends, usually I like that and my hobbies are also to read book at alone while I wish at home.

✓ I like to spend a lot of time with my friends; I also enjoy reading books alone at home.

Verb tense 'want' changed to present habitual 'like' to match context. 'Read book' -> 'reading books'. 'at alone' incorrect, use 'alone'. 'while I wish at home' is ungrammatical; replace with 'at home'. Sentence restructured for natural word order.

× Yes, there is a one hobby of playing volleyball.

✓ Yes, there is one hobby: playing volleyball.

Use 'one hobby' without 'a' before 'one', or rephrase with a colon. 'There is one hobby of playing' is awkward; 'playing volleyball' as a noun phrase is clearer.

× Since I have childhood while I was grow up, my older friends also grow up.

✓ Since my childhood, as I grew up, my older friends grew up too.

Tense consistency: 'have childhood' incorrect; use 'my childhood'. Use past tense 'grew up' to describe past development. 'Also' placement adjusted to 'too' for natural flow.

× Right now also we are playing volleyball in the ground.

✓ Right now we are also playing volleyball on the ground.

Word order: 'also' commonly placed after the subject or before main verb. Use preposition 'on the ground' rather than 'in the ground' for surface location.

× As my understanding all the members have their different hobbies.

✓ As I understand, all the members have different hobbies.

Use first-person 'I understand' to express the speaker's view. 'their different hobbies' is acceptable but 'different hobbies' is sufficient. Add comma after introductory clause.

× For example, my mother is a housewife, he used to cook food.

✓ For example, my mother is a housewife; she used to cook food.

Pronoun 'he' is incorrect for 'my mother'; use 'she'. Use semicolon or separate sentences for clarity.

× His hobbies cooking food as I am.

✓ Her hobby is cooking food, like mine.

Use correct possessive pronoun 'her' for 'my mother'. Form sentence with 'hobby is cooking' and express similarity with 'like mine'.

× I used to like play volleyball in more time and reading books.

✓ I used to like playing volleyball more often and reading books.

After 'used to like', use gerund 'playing' not base verb 'play'. 'in more time' is incorrect; use 'more often' to mean 'more frequently'. Keep 'reading books' parallel.