Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words and redundant phrases, use one or two specific supporting details, and correct small grammar errors (e.g., “near park” → “the park near my home”). Keep your answer within 2–4 sentences.

예시: I have a few hobbies, but my main hobby is playing cricket. I usually play with my friends at the park near my home when I have free time, which helps me stay fit and improve my skills.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, correct tense and grammar (use past tense when referring to childhood), and add a specific example or short reason. Avoid vague phrases like “one hobby” repeated and unnecessary words like “eventually.” Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. As a child I loved playing cricket and it has always been my dream to play professionally. For example, I used to practise for hours with my friends and watch international matches to learn new techniques.

제안: Make your answer more natural and concise. Open with a direct topic sentence, use present perfect or present simple for current habits, and avoid overlong phrases like “so much dedication and hard work.” Add one concrete detail about frequency or recent progress.

예시: Yes — I still have the same hobby. I attend a cricket academy three times a week and practise regularly to improve my batting and bowling because I hope to play for Pakistan one day.

제안: Be accurate and concise, correct grammar and vocabulary, and avoid irrelevant or unclear details (e.g., AR Rahman and Jio are not Pakistani channels). State clearly whether family share the hobby and give a brief reason or example. Use 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, my family members do not share this hobby. They work in media-related jobs, so I am the only one who plays cricket and focuses on sports training.

× Yes, of course I do have relevant number of hobbies.

✓ Yes, of course I have several hobbies.

The original uses 'relevant number of' which is unnatural and incorrect quantifier usage. Replace with 'several' or 'a number of' to indicate multiple hobbies. Use present simple 'I have' without auxiliary 'do' when not emphasizing.

× My first one is that I love to play cricket even with my own friends.

✓ My main hobby is that I love to play cricket with my friends.

The phrase 'even with my own friends' is awkward; 'with my friends' is correct. Also 'My first one' is unnatural; use 'My main hobby' or 'Firstly' to introduce the hobby.

× Whenever I get sort of free time, I usually play cricket with my friends, uh, in the near park from my home.

✓ Whenever I have some free time, I usually play cricket with my friends in the nearby park near my home.

Use present simple 'have' for habitual actions rather than 'get'. 'Sort of' is informal and vague; 'some' is better. Preposition 'in the near park from my home' is incorrect; use 'in the nearby park' or 'near my home'.

× I am very much interested in playing cricket.

✓ I am very interested in playing cricket.

'Very much interested' is acceptable but 'very interested' is more natural in this context; adverb placement 'very' before adjective is standard.

× Yes, since my childhood I only have one hobby which is to play cricket.

✓ Yes, since my childhood I have had only one hobby, which is playing cricket.

When referring to a situation continuing from the past to now, use present perfect 'have had' rather than present simple 'have'. Also better to use 'playing cricket' after 'is'.

× Eventually it is my dream as well.

✓ It is also my dream.

'Eventually' is incorrect here; 'also' or 'as well' is appropriate. Shorter phrasing 'It is also my dream' is more natural.

× I wanted to play this sports at the international level or the highest level of this field.

✓ I want to play this sport at the international level, the highest level in this field.

Use present tense 'want' to express a continuing desire. 'Sports' should be singular 'sport' here. 'At the international level' is fine; rephrase for clarity.

× And from my childhood I love playing cricket with my friends or with my family members.

✓ Since my childhood I have loved playing cricket with my friends and family members.

Use present perfect 'have loved' to show continuous feeling from the past to present. Use 'and' rather than 'or' if both groups were involved.

× Well, that's totally interesting talking about as I still have the hobby I chose when I was in my childhood.

✓ Well, it's interesting to talk about because I still have the hobby I chose in childhood.

Original word order and phrases are awkward. Use 'it's interesting to talk about' and 'I chose in childhood' for clarity. Avoid 'when I was in my childhood'.

× I'm still into cricket very much.

✓ I'm still very into cricket.

Move the adverb 'very' before 'into' for natural adverb placement.

× I go to my cricket Academy regularly, practice there with so much dedication and hard work.

✓ I go to my cricket academy regularly and practice there with great dedication and hard work.

'Academy' should be lowercase unless it's the formal name. 'So much dedication' is informal; 'great dedication' is more appropriate. Add 'and' to connect clauses smoothly.

× Cricket is not just my hobby, it is my dream and I want to fulfill it.

✓ Cricket is not just my hobby; it is my dream and I want to fulfil it.

Sentence is mostly correct. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join clauses. 'Fulfil' (or 'fulfill') is correct; ensure spelling variant consistent. No major grammar error beyond punctuation.

× I want to play cricket for Pakistan.

✓ I want to play cricket for Pakistan.

This sentence is correct and matches the present desire; no change needed.

× To be very honest, none of my family member is into cricket or into any sports relating activity.

✓ To be very honest, none of my family members is into cricket or any sports-related activities.

'None of my family member' is incorrect; use plural 'family members'. 'None' can take singular or plural verb; 'are' or 'is' both used but 'are' is common: 'none of my family members are'. 'Relating activity' is incorrect; use 'sports-related activities'.

× They work for well known Pakistani channels such as AR Rahman, Jio.

✓ They work for well-known Pakistani channels such as ARY, Rahman and Jio.

Original names seem incorrect or mixed. Use correct channel names (for example ARY). 'Well known' should be hyphenated 'well-known'. If specific names are accurate, keep them; ensure correct spelling. If 'Rahman' is a person not a channel, clarify. This is more about word choice and factual naming rather than grammar.

× I am the only one in my family who has chosen this post and grinding so much hard to achieve this relevant goal.

✓ I am the only one in my family who has chosen this path and is working very hard to achieve this goal.

'Chosen this post' is incorrect; use 'chosen this path' or 'career'. Combine verbs consistently: 'has chosen' and 'is working' or 'have chosen and am working'. 'Grinding so much hard' is ungrammatical; use 'working very hard'. 'Relevant' is unnecessary.

× I am the only one in my family who play cricket.

✓ I am the only one in my family who plays cricket.

Relative clause 'who plays' should agree with 'one' (singular), so use third person singular verb 'plays'.