Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Отвечая, старайтесь говорить более кратко и грамотно: используйте правильные времена, артикли и согласование («my time is filled with work and study», «one of my hobbies is tennis»). Уберите заикания и бессодержательные слова («uh», «or interest things»), замените повторения. Добавьте связку и короткое объяснение, почему вам нравится хобби.

예시: Although my time is filled with work and study, I try to find time for hobbies. One of my favourite hobbies is tennis because it helps me relax and stay fit.

제안: Используйте правильные слова и последовательность: не называйте ребёнка «baby» если говорите о детстве вообще; говорите «I was very active as a child». Дайте конкретные примеры и свяжите их логически, замените «memorizable» на «most memorable». Уберите паузы и говорите уверенно.

예시: I was very active as a child, so my mother enrolled me in activities like dance classes, swimming and gymnastics. The most memorable for me was dance, and I still enjoy it today.

제안: Сформулируйте ответ точнее и грамотно: скажите возраст или класс («since third grade»), избегайте словосочетаний как «day long» — лучше «for hours» или «every day». Уточните продолжительность и добавьте связующее слово: «since then» или «ever since».

예시: Yes. I started tennis after third grade when my mother enrolled me in lessons. I practised for hours, and ever since then I have continued playing tennis regularly as a hobby.

제안: Говорите простыми, корректными предложениями: используйте отрицание «No, not really»; избегайте некорректных фраз («one and only person», «too attractive»). Объясните коротко причину и приведите контраст. Уберите лишние слова и паузы.

예시: No, not really. My parents and brother are less active, so I'm the only one in my family who is keen on sports and regular physical activities.

× Even though my time is fill up with a work and study, I'm trying to find free time for my hobbies or interest things.

✓ Even though my time is filled up with work and study, I'm trying to find free time for my hobbies or interesting things.

The original sentence has passive participle and article errors: 'fill up' should be 'filled up' (past participle) to form the passive description, and 'a work' is incorrect (use uncountable 'work' without article). 'Interest things' is incorrect adjective form; use 'interesting things' or 'interests'. Use 'filled' to agree with 'time' being filled. Suggestion: 'Even though my time is filled with work and study, I try to find free time for my hobbies or interests.'

× So one of the most interesting, enjoyable and relaxing hobby is uh, big tennis and I really love to do.

✓ So one of the most interesting, enjoyable, and relaxing hobbies is tennis, and I really love to play it.

Errors: 'one of the... hobby' should be 'one of the... hobbies' (singular/plural). 'big tennis' is incorrect collocation; use 'tennis'. 'love to do' is unnatural; use 'love to play it'. Also missing commas for lists. Suggest using 'one of the most interesting... hobbies is tennis, and I really love to play it.'

× As a child, I was a really active baby, so my mom took me to everywhere where I like, uh, for example, dances, swim, uh, or a gym.

✓ As a child I was very active, so my mom took me everywhere I liked, for example to dance classes, swimming, or the gym.

Problems: 'a really active baby' is odd for 'child' — use 'very active'. 'took me to everywhere' incorrect preposition/order — use 'took me everywhere' or 'took me to places'. 'where I like' should be 'I liked'. Activities list needs correct nouns: 'dances' -> 'dance classes', 'swim' -> 'swimming', 'a gym' -> 'the gym'. Suggest: 'As a child I was very active, so my mom took me everywhere I liked, for example to dance classes, swimming, or the gym.'

× But the most memorizable was dances, and I still love it.

✓ But the most memorable was dancing, and I still love it.

'Memorizable' is wrong word; use 'memorable'. 'dances' should be the gerund 'dancing' to refer to the activity. Verb 'love it' is fine. Suggest: 'But the most memorable was dancing, and I still love it.'

× Yes, of course it was not from really childhood, but after third grade my mom took me to uh tennis classes and I was practicing it for day long and I really like it.

✓ Yes, of course it was not from early childhood, but after third grade my mom took me to tennis classes and I practiced a lot, and I really liked it.

Tense and word choice errors: 'not from really childhood' -> 'not from early childhood'. 'was practicing it for day long' is incorrect; use simple past 'I practiced a lot' or 'I practiced all day'. Maintain past tense consistency: 'I really like it' should be 'I really liked it' when referring to past. Suggest: '...my mom took me to tennis classes and I practiced a lot, and I really liked it.'

× So nowadays I'm also playing big tennis as a hobby.

✓ So nowadays I also play tennis as a hobby.

Present continuous 'I'm also playing' implies ongoing action but 'play tennis as a hobby' is habitual, so simple present is better. 'big tennis' incorrect; use 'tennis'. Suggest: 'So nowadays I also play tennis as a hobby.'

× Oh especially no because my uh mom, dad are not so active and my brother also.

✓ Oh, especially not, because my mom and dad are not very active, and my brother isn't either.

Pronoun and negation issues: 'Oh especially no' should be 'Oh, especially not'. 'my uh mom, dad are' needs 'my mom and dad are'. 'my brother also' should be 'my brother isn't either' or 'neither'. Suggest: 'Oh, especially not, because my mom and dad are not very active, and my brother isn't either.'

× So I'm the one and only person in my family that are too attractive and keen on sports or some kind of activities or hobbies.

✓ So I'm the one and only person in my family who is very active and keen on sports or other activities and hobbies.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'person ... that are' incorrect; use 'who is'. 'too attractive' is wrong meaning; probably 'very active' or 'most active'. 'some kind of activities or hobbies' is redundant; use 'other activities and hobbies'. Suggest: 'So I'm the one and only person in my family who is very active and keen on sports and other hobbies.'