Chatting— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Use simpler phrasing and reduce long compound sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends because I’m extroverted and like meeting new people. For example, talking about their life stories often gives me useful ideas I can apply to my studies or work.

제안: Make the response grammatically correct and more specific. Give a clear topic sentence, then mention two or three main topics with brief examples or reasons, using linking words.

예시: It varies, but we mainly discuss relationships, education and future plans. For instance, we often compare university choices and help each other solve family or study-related problems.

제안: Keep the answer focused and shorten long phrases. Give one clear reason and one brief example. Use a linking word to connect reason and example.

예시: I prefer group conversations because they expose me to different opinions. For example, in a group I learn new perspectives on career choices that I wouldn’t get from a one-on-one chat.

제안: Correct phrasing and be concise. Start with a direct statement of preference, then give one or two clear reasons. Avoid awkward or unclear expressions like "according to the move."

예시: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can read facial expressions and tone. This helps me understand emotions and respond appropriately in sensitive conversations.

제안: Finish your sentence and be specific about when arguments happen and how you handle them. Give a brief example and a linking word to show contrast.

예시: No, I usually avoid arguments because I value our friendship. However, sometimes we argue about sensitive topics like politics; in those cases, I try to stay calm and suggest taking a break to prevent the fight from escalating.

× Yes, I absolutely love chatting with friends and since I am an extroverted person, I usually go out of my way to talk to friends.

✓ Yes, I absolutely love chatting with friends, and since I am an extroverted person, I usually go out of my way to talk to them.

Pronoun use: The original repeats 'friends' unnecessarily. Replacing the second occurrence with the pronoun 'them' improves cohesion and avoids redundancy. This is considered a present tense and pronoun reference clarity issue; ensure pronouns clearly refer to a previously mentioned plural noun.

× I also love making connections and networking with people so that I get to know more about their life stories and learn something from their experiences, which helps me become more efficient.

✓ I also love making connections and networking with people so that I can get to know more about their life stories and learn from their experiences, which helps me become more effective.

Modality and verb form: Use 'can get to know' to express ability/purpose in present context. 'Learn something from' is awkward; use 'learn from'. Word choice: 'more efficient' usually refers to performing tasks; 'more effective' better matches learning from experiences. These changes correct present-tense modality and collocation.

× What I usually chat about with my friends it honestly varies since we talk about a variety of stuff such as relationships, education, universities, life decisions and our family problems so that we could share our problems and find a solution to it.

✓ What I usually chat about with my friends honestly varies; we talk about a variety of things such as relationships, education, universities, life decisions and family problems so that we can share issues and find solutions.

Sentence structure and agreement: Remove the extra subject 'it' after the clause 'What I usually chat about with my friends'. Use 'things' instead of informal 'stuff'. Change 'so that we could' to 'so that we can' to match present tense and intention. Replace singular 'a solution to it' with plural 'solutions' and 'share issues' for agreement and clarity.

× I prefer to chat with a group of people rather than chatting with one single friend since it gives me exposure to many different opinions and life experiences from which I can learn and execute those lessons during my daily life and I could also find relatable ideas from.

✓ I prefer chatting with a group of people rather than with a single friend, since it gives me exposure to many different opinions and life experiences from which I can learn and apply lessons in my daily life, and I can also find relatable ideas.

Verb form and sentence ending: Make verb forms parallel: 'prefer chatting' and 'rather than with' improve fluency. Use 'apply lessons' instead of 'execute those lessons' for natural collocation. Replace 'could' with 'can' to express typical ability. Remove the dangling preposition 'from' at the end and complete the clause with 'find relatable ideas.' These corrections address present participle usage and sentence structure.

× I prefer you to communicate face to face with people because in that way I would be able to see their facial expressions and also assess the tone with which they're talking to me and that will help me understand the situation better and allow me to give a perfect response according to the move.

✓ I prefer communicating face to face with people because that way I can see their facial expressions and assess the tone they use, which helps me understand the situation better and allows me to give an appropriate response.

Pronoun and modality: 'I prefer you to communicate' incorrectly addresses the examiner; change to general preference 'I prefer communicating'. Use present tense 'can' instead of 'would be able to' for habitual preference. Replace 'perfect response according to the move' with 'an appropriate response' to correct unclear wording. Also adjust relative clauses for clarity.

× No, I usually avoid arguing with my friends since I really care about my relationship with them and I don't want to do anything that hampers it. But when it comes to very sensitive topics with both of us having different opinions, we might end up fighting or arguing and I.

✓ No, I usually avoid arguing with my friends since I really care about my relationships with them and I don't want to do anything that harms them. But when it comes to very sensitive topics and we have different opinions, we might end up fighting or arguing.

Sentence fragment and agreement: The original ends with an incomplete clause 'and I.' Remove the fragment to complete the sentence. Use plural 'relationships' or rephrase 'relationship with them' and 'harms them' for agreement and clarity. Simplify the second sentence to 'we have different opinions' for natural present-tense phrasing. These changes fix sentence structure errors and agreement.