Chatting— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve fluency by removing hesitations and repetitions, and make the response more concise with one clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "because" or "so"). Avoid filler words like "umm" and repeated phrases.

예시: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends because it helps my mental health and keeps me socially active. For example, as I grew older I realized conversations reduce stress and help me stay connected with people I care about.

제안: Make the answer direct and specific: start with a topic sentence then give one or two concrete examples. Remove filler words and vague endings. Use linking words like "mainly" or "for example" to organize details.

예시: Because I'm a student, we mainly talk about our grades and classes. For example, we discuss assignments, upcoming exams, and which lectures were most useful for understanding the subject.

제안: Give a clear preference in the first sentence, then provide one reason and a brief contrast using linking words (e.g., "however", "because"). Avoid vague phrasing and hesitations.

예시: I prefer chatting with one friend because I can focus better on the conversation and share personal opinions. In contrast, group chats are fun for socialising but can be noisy and less personal.

제안: Be concise and avoid repeating the same point. State your preference, give one or two clear reasons and an example. Use linking words like "because", "for example", or "therefore" to show cause and effect.

예시: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can see facial expressions and hear tone of voice, which helps me understand emotions better. For example, when discussing sensitive topics, seeing someone's expression makes the conversation clearer.

제안: Start with a clear statement about whether you argue, then explain why and add a brief detail about how you handle disagreements. Avoid repetition and use linking words like "because", "however", or "usually".

예시: Yes, we sometimes argue because we have different perspectives, but it's usually constructive. We try to respect each other's opinions and resolve disagreements by listening and finding common ground.

× Yes, I do love chatting with friends.

✓ Yes, I love chatting with friends.

Using 'do' for emphasis with 'love' is unnecessary in a simple present affirmative sentence. Remove 'do' for naturalness: 'I love chatting with friends.'

× I think as I grew older, umm, I realized that connecting with other people helps you with your mental health as well.

✓ I think as I grew older, I realized that connecting with other people helps me with my mental health as well.

The sentence mixes perspectives: 'you' is generic while the speaker refers to themselves. Change 'you' to 'me' to match the first-person subject. Also remove filler 'umm'.

× And so and I and I am a social butterfly.

✓ Also, I am a social butterfly.

Repeated conjunctions and duplicated words create an ungrammatical structure. Simplify to a single clause: 'Also, I am a social butterfly.'

× That's why I love talking to people.

✓ That's why I love talking to people.

Sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed.

× I know a lot of people and I love uh, interacting with.

✓ I know a lot of people and I love interacting with them.

The verb 'interacting with' requires an object. Add 'them' to complete the phrasal verb and remove filler 'uh'.

× Well, because that I am a student, umm, we usually chat about our grades, our academic lives, or even like the subjects that we go through in school and because yeah.

✓ Well, because I am a student, we usually chat about our grades, our academic lives, or the subjects we study in school.

'Because that I am a student' is incorrect; use 'because I am a student.' Remove redundant conjunction 'and because' and filler 'umm/like/yeah.' Use 'subjects we study' for natural phrasing.

× I do love to chat with like a group of people and a friend because I think uh, with both of them the comparison is not that huge but I do prefer talking with only one friend so that you know I can focus with what I am listening at and what I am about to say.

✓ I love chatting with either a group of people or a single friend, but I prefer talking with one friend so that I can focus on what I am listening to and what I am about to say.

Simplify 'do love to chat' to 'love chatting' and replace 'like' fillers. Use parallel structure 'either ... or.' 'Focus with' is incorrect; use 'focus on.' 'Listening at' should be 'listening to.'

× I definitely prefer to communicate face to face and the reason behind that is that I just love seeing who I am communicating with and I'd love to hear the the tone of how he or she says everything.

✓ I definitely prefer to communicate face to face because I like seeing who I am communicating with and hearing the tone in which they speak.

Replace 'the reason behind that is that' with 'because' for concision. Use 'like' instead of 'just love' for variety. 'I'd love to hear the the tone of how he or she says everything' is awkward; use 'hearing the tone in which they speak.' Avoid gendered 'he or she' by using 'they.' Remove duplicated 'the.'

× So that's why I prefer to communicate face to face.

✓ So that's why I prefer to communicate face to face.

Sentence is correct and consistent; no change needed.

× I think arguing with friends is a pretty normal thing, not because we argue a lot, but because there are times that people do argue.

✓ I think arguing with friends is pretty normal, not because we argue a lot, but because sometimes people do argue.

Use 'pretty normal' rather than 'a pretty normal thing' for conciseness. 'There are times that' is wordy; use 'sometimes.'

× And with my friends we do argue because we have different perspective and the the most important part with arguing is that we respect both sides of the stories and both opinions.

✓ With my friends we do argue because we have different perspectives, and the most important part of arguing is that we respect both sides of the story and each other's opinions.

'Perspective' should be plural 'perspectives.' Remove duplicate 'the the.' Use 'part of arguing' not 'with arguing.' 'Both sides of the stories' is unclear; use 'both sides of the story.' 'Both opinions' is better as 'each other's opinions' for clarity.