Chatting— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use correct verb forms (e.g., "chatting" after "prefer" is fine but use "chat" with "like"). Add one specific reason or brief example. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "so").

예시: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends because it helps me maintain close relationships. For example, we often share daily updates and support each other when we have problems, which strengthens our bond.

제안: Avoid repetition and be more specific. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples of topics. Use linking words (e.g., "for example", "and") and correct grammar (e.g., "what we do during the day").

예시: Usually we talk about our daily routines and work. For example, I might tell them about tasks at my job and they share theirs, and sometimes we discuss movies or plans for the weekend to relax.

제안: Good clear preference. Improve by making the reason more concise and natural: correct small grammar issues and use a linking word. Offer a brief example or contrast with group chats.

예시: I prefer chatting one-on-one because group chats can be confusing and messages get mixed up. For example, in group chats I often miss important comments, so one-on-one conversations feel clearer.

제안: Reduce hesitations and filler words. State your preference clearly, give a concise reason and one specific example of how social media suits you. Fix grammar (e.g., "I am an introvert", "social media provides").

예시: I prefer communicating via social media because, as an introvert, I find it less stressful. For example, messaging lets me think before I reply and set boundaries about when I respond.

제안: Clarify frequency and reason; avoid saying you 'argue a lot' which can sound negative. Use a topic sentence, then explain politely when disagreements happen and how you handle them. Provide a brief example and linking words (e.g., "however", "but").

예시: I sometimes disagree with friends, especially on topics where we have different opinions, but I try to discuss calmly. For example, when we debate films or politics, I explain my view and listen to theirs so we can understand each other better.

× I like to chatting with friends a lot because it is very important if we build a very strong connection with our friends.

✓ I like chatting with friends a lot because it is very important to build a strong connection with them.

After verbs of preference like 'like', use the gerund 'chatting' or the infinitive 'to chat', but not 'to chatting'. Also simplify 'if we build' to 'to build' for intended meaning and replace repeated 'our friends' with 'them' to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: Use 'I like chatting' or 'I like to chat' and avoid mixing 'to' with gerund forms.

× So it is very important that we connected with that person.

✓ So it is very important that we connect with that person.

The student used past tense 'connected' where present tense 'connect' is required because they are stating a general truth or ongoing importance. Use present simple for general statements. Suggestion: Use 'connect' for general facts.

× So by my point of view, chatting is a very easy way to connect with our friends.

✓ From my point of view, chatting is an easy way to connect with friends.

Idiomatic expression is 'from my point of view', not 'by my point of view'. Also 'a very easy' can be simplified to 'an easy' and 'our friends' can be 'friends' for concision. Suggestion: Use standard phrases like 'From my point of view'.

× So that's why I prefer to chatting with friends.

✓ So that's why I prefer chatting with friends.

After 'prefer' use the gerund 'chatting' or the infinitive 'to chat', but do not combine 'prefer to' with a gerund. Remove 'to' if using gerund. Suggestion: 'I prefer chatting' or 'I prefer to chat'.

× To be honest, I usually chat with friends about our daily daily workload, about our daily lifestyle, what we do in our daily day.

✓ To be honest, I usually chat with friends about our daily workload, lifestyle, and what we do each day.

Redundant words 'daily daily' and awkward 'our daily day' should be removed. Use 'about' once and list items in parallel form. 'Each day' or 'every day' is more natural than 'daily day'. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and use parallel structure in lists.

× As a result, it's not dependent what's we talk about, it's how we connected with each other.

✓ As a result, it doesn't depend on what we talk about; it's how we connect with each other.

Incorrect subject-verb form 'what's we talk about' should be 'what we talk about' and 'it's not dependent' is better as 'it doesn't depend on'. Also 'connected' should be present simple 'connect' for general truth. Suggestion: Use 'it doesn't depend on what...' and present simple for general statements.

× Personally, I usually prefer to chat with only one friend because if we chat with the group of people so I am usually confused about the messages.

✓ Personally, I usually prefer to chat with only one friend because when I chat with a group I usually get confused by the messages.

Remove extraneous 'so' and use 'when' instead of 'if' for habitual situations. Use 'confused by' or 'confused about' and 'a group' instead of 'the group of people'. Also 'prefer to chat' should use infinitive or gerund consistently. Suggestion: Use 'when I chat with a group' and 'get confused by the messages'.

× So that's why I usually like to talk about only one friend.

✓ So that's why I usually like to talk with only one friend.

Use 'talk with' or 'talk to' a person, not 'talk about' if meaning direct conversation. Also maintain consistency with earlier phrasing 'only one friend'. Suggestion: Use 'talk with only one friend' when referring to direct chat.

× Uh, well, I am an introvert person, so I prefer to communicate via social media because, uh, I do not like to communicate face to face umm.

✓ Well, I am an introvert, so I prefer to communicate via social media because I do not like to communicate face to face.

'Introvert person' is incorrect; use 'an introvert' or 'a shy person'. Remove filler words. 'Face to face' is correct as 'face to face' or 'face-to-face' in writing. Suggestion: Say 'I am an introvert' and avoid fillers.

× In addition, social media have a very good uh, platform to communicate with each other and and create very strong boundaries.

✓ In addition, social media provide a very good platform for communicating with each other and for creating strong boundaries.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'social media' is plural but 'provide' is better than 'have a'. Use 'platform for communicating' and parallel 'for creating'. Remove duplicate 'and'. Suggestion: Use 'provide a platform for communicating' and keep parallel structure.

× So as a result of social media is my uh.

✓ So as a result, social media is my preferred way to communicate.

The original is incomplete and ungrammatical. Recast to complete thought: 'social media is my preferred way to communicate' or 'I prefer social media as a result.' Suggestion: Complete the sentence with a clear subject and verb.

× Oh definitely, I argue a lot with my friends if we had any type of conversation.

✓ Oh definitely, I argue a lot with my friends if we have any kind of disagreement in a conversation.

Use present tense 'have' for habitual situations instead of past 'had'. Also 'type of conversation' is vague; 'kind of disagreement' clarifies reason for arguing. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and choose precise nouns.

× So I argue a lot with my friends if they have any type of their own personal opinion.

✓ So I argue a lot with my friends if they have their own personal opinions.

'Any type of their own personal opinion' is redundant. Use plural 'opinions' and remove 'type of'. Suggestion: Keep pronoun and noun forms concise and pluralize when appropriate.

× So that topic I argue with them a lot because I have my own perspective and own opinion.

✓ I often argue with them about such topics because I have my own perspective and opinion.

Reorder for natural English: subject-verb-object. 'That topic I argue with them' is awkward. Also 'own perspective and own opinion' is redundant; one 'own' or neither is sufficient. Suggestion: Use 'I often argue with them about that topic' or 'I often argue about such topics'.