Chatting— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise: give a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words and repetition, and provide one brief supporting detail. Use linking words for coherence and correct grammar (e.g., 'I enjoy talking about politics, history and art because...').

예시: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy talking about politics, history and art because these subjects help me understand different perspectives and cultures. For example, discussing historical events often leads to interesting debates about their modern impact.

제안: Provide a clear, grammatically correct statement and one specific detail or example. Avoid repetition and hesitations; use linking words like 'for example' or 'for instance' correctly.

예시: We usually discuss social issues. For example, yesterday we talked about healthcare and compared which countries need to improve their medical assistance and why, focusing on access and funding.

제안: Give a clear preference sentence and explain briefly with a relevant reason. Avoid unclear or incorrect words (e.g., 'brimstone') and replace them with accurate vocabulary like 'others' or 'different perspectives'.

예시: I prefer chatting in a group because you get many different ideas and perspectives, which helps me learn new things and sparks more interesting conversations.

제안: State your preference clearly and give a concise, logical reason. Reduce fillers and improve grammar: explain how social media helps (e.g., gives time to think, edit messages).

예시: I prefer communicating via social media because it gives me time to think and edit my messages, which helps me express my ideas more clearly than in spontaneous face-to-face conversations.

제안: Make a direct, simple statement and clarify the reason. Avoid long hesitations and incorrect phrases; use precise vocabulary like 'different worldviews' and give one short example or result of the arguments.

예시: Yes, I sometimes argue with friends who have different worldviews. For instance, debates about politics often occur because we disagree on priorities, but these discussions usually help me understand other viewpoints better.

× Yes I do. I like like the some topics like uh, umm, politics, history, uh, and uh, art. If we if talk about these topics, those topics I will very enjoy.

✓ Yes, I do. I like some topics such as politics, history, and art. If we talk about these topics, I will enjoy them very much.

Original contains extra words ('like like the some'), wrong quantifier use ('the some'), repetition and awkward structure. Use 'some topics' or 'topics such as' to list examples. 'If we talk about these topics' is the correct conditional clause and 'I will enjoy them very much' places the object pronoun and adverb correctly.

× We usually talk about social issues, for instance, yesterday I we talk about medical assistance, medical assistance, we think which over uh countries need to improve uh medical assistance.

✓ We usually talk about social issues. For instance, yesterday we talked about medical assistance and discussed which countries need to improve their medical services.

Mixes present habitual 'we usually talk' with a incorrect present reference to a past event ('yesterday I we talk'). Use past tense 'talked' for the event yesterday. Also 'which over countries' is incorrect; use 'which countries' and 'their medical services' instead of repeating 'medical assistance' and to show possession.

× I prefer to chat with a group of people rather than with only one friend because I can get so many different ideas like brimstone can give me a lot knowledge.

✓ I prefer to chat with a group of people rather than with only one friend because I can get many different ideas and learn a lot.

Original includes 'like brimstone' which is meaningless and 'give me a lot knowledge' is incorrect word order and article use. Replace with 'learn a lot' or 'gain a lot of knowledge'. Use 'many different ideas' (no 'so' needed) for clarity.

× I prefer via social media, uh, rather than face to face communication because umm, I can correct my umm, speech, uh, when I uh, via social media.

✓ I prefer communicating via social media rather than face-to-face because I can edit my messages when I use social media.

Use 'communicating via' or 'prefer to communicate via'. 'Face-to-face' should be hyphenated as an adjective. 'When I use social media' is the correct clause; 'when I via social media' is incorrect preposition usage.

× Yes, I do. I always argue, uh, with the friends, uh, which they have diff, which have different uh, world view and uh, life, uh, physical of life, physicalology of life.

✓ Yes, I do. I often argue with friends who have different worldviews and life perspectives.

Use 'friends who' not 'the friends which they'. 'Which' is incorrect for people and 'they' is redundant. 'Worldview' is one word or 'worldviews'; 'life perspectives' is clearer than the unclear 'physicalology of life'. Use 'often' instead of 'always' if frequency ambiguous.