Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Organize your response into 2–3 clear sentences: start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Remove filler phrases and correct ambiguous wording (for example, say "the number one rule at my school" and "carry your ID with you at all times"). Use linking words like "also" or "for example" to make the answer coherent.

예시: Yes — there are several rules at my school. For example, students must wear a uniform and follow hair regulations, and we are required to carry our student ID at all times. Overall the rules are fairly strict, although teachers sometimes allow exceptions.

제안: Give a clear position in one sentence (yes, no, or it depends), then support it with a specific reason and example. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Use linking words such as "however" or "for example" to connect ideas. Correct grammar: say "it depends on the rule" and "my school has two different uniforms".

예시: I think it depends on the rule. For example, uniform requirements can be beneficial because they make students look more presentable and reduce distractions, but overly strict rules about personal expression could be harmful.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence then give two specific details (what the teacher taught and how they showed dedication). Use concise phrasing and linking words like "for example" or "also." Correct small grammar and tense issues: say "when I was in college" and "he taught a training course."

예시: Yes. When I was in college I had a very dedicated teacher who taught a training course and continued teaching into his sixties. For example, he always replied to students' messages late at night and patiently addressed our concerns without getting angry.

제안: Give a clear concise stance (e.g., "I prefer a moderate number of rules") followed by one specific reason and an example. Avoid repeating similar phrases and improve grammar: say "standard for the school's organization" and "important for student and staff welfare." Use a linking phrase like "because" to show cause.

예시: I prefer a moderate number of rules because clear, reasonable regulations help maintain order and protect student welfare. For example, rules about attendance and safety are useful, while rules limiting self-expression can be relaxed.

제안: Answer directly and avoid long confusing background. Provide one brief specific example and reflect briefly (e.g., how it affected you). Avoid condoning corporal punishment and correct tense and phrasing: say "when I was in elementary school" and "he would hit my hand with a stick when I forgot homework."

예시: Yes. When I was in elementary school I had a strict math teacher who would hit my hand with a stick if I forgot my homework. That experience made me feel anxious about class and less motivated to speak up.

제안: Provide a clear concise answer and one or two reasons. Avoid repetition and strong negative language like "ruinely rude"; be more neutral and specific (e.g., classroom management would be difficult). Use linking words such as "because" and correct phrasing: "I would not want to teach in a rule-free school because effective classroom management requires clear rules."

예시: No, I would not want to teach in a rule-free school because clear rules are necessary for classroom management and students' learning. For instance, a set of basic rules about respect and punctuality helps lessons run smoothly.

× There's a part of me saying yes and no, but it depends on the rule that is implementing on your school.

✓ Part of me says yes and part of me says no, but it depends on the rule that is implemented at your school.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect verb form and preposition: 'There's a part of me saying' is unnatural (sentence structure error) and 'is implementing on your school' uses the progressive and wrong preposition. Use simple present 'says' for general opinion, passive or simple past/present participle 'implemented', and the preposition 'at' for location. Suggestion: divide the idea into clearer clauses and use correct verb forms ('says', 'implemented') and 'at' for location.

× But on my school, uh, we are implementing, you have two various school uniforms and I believe that we are benefiting on that rule because it makes us look very presentable student.

✓ At my school, we have two different school uniforms and I believe we benefit from that rule because it makes us look like very presentable students.

Errors: 'on my school' should be 'at my school' (preposition), 'we are implementing' is unnecessary and awkward, 'two various' is incorrect collocation ('two different'), 'benefiting on' should be 'benefit from' (preposition usage), and 'presentable student' needs plural agreement. Suggestion: use 'at' for location, 'different' instead of 'various' for paired items, 'benefit from' and match noun number ('students').

× You are one of five of the school you are studying.

✓ You are one of five students at the school where you study.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and has unclear reference: 'of the school you are studying' is incorrect — you 'study at' a school, and 'one of five of the school' should specify 'one of five students'. Suggestion: use 'students' and 'at the school where you study' for clarity and correct preposition.

× Yes, when I was still in college I had this teacher where his subject is about training and he is already 60 years old but he's still teaching.

✓ Yes, when I was in college I had a teacher whose subject was training; he was already 60 years old but he was still teaching.

Tense inconsistency: the speaker refers to past time ('when I was in college') so describing the teacher should be in past tense ('was', not 'is'). Use 'whose subject was' instead of 'where his subject is about'. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past tense when talking about past events and use 'whose' to show possession.

× He is very accommodating about your concerns even though you already message him on late at night.

✓ He was very accommodating about my concerns even though I messaged him late at night.

Pronoun mismatch and tense: the speaker should use first person 'my' and past tense 'was' and 'messaged' to match the past context. Also 'on late at night' is incorrect preposition/word order. Suggestion: use 'late at night' and past tense verbs for past events.

× He would reply to your concerns without getting angry.

✓ He would reply to my concerns without getting angry.

Pronoun should match speaker's perspective: 'your' is incorrect in this autobiographical past account; use 'my'. 'Would' is acceptable to describe habitual past behavior. Suggestion: use consistent first-person references when recounting personal experiences.

× I'm in the middle line, but I'm OK with a few rules, but these rules should be very standard to the schools organization, are very important to the schools organization and Wellness of the students and faculty.

✓ I'm in the middle, but I'm OK with a few rules; these rules should be standard for the school's organization and important for the welfare of students and faculty.

Problems: 'in the middle line' is incorrect idiom ('in the middle' is fine), repeated 'but' is redundant, 'standard to the schools organization' should be 'standard for the school's organization' (preposition and possessive), and 'Wellness' should be 'welfare' or 'well-being'. Suggestion: use concise phrasing, correct prepositions ('for'), possessive form ('school's'), and choose the appropriate noun ('welfare' or 'well-being').

× Yes, when I was still in elementary and he is teaching math, whenever I forgot to do my homework he would hit my hand with a stick because I forgot it.

✓ Yes, when I was in elementary school he taught math; whenever I forgot to do my homework he would hit my hand with a stick because I had forgotten it.

Tense consistency: use past tense 'taught' for his teaching, and past perfect 'had forgotten' can clarify that forgetting happened before the punishment (optional). Also include 'elementary school' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: keep verbs in past when describing past events and use past perfect when indicating an earlier past action.

× Well that was where you can hit a child before the A law passed that you can hit a child because there are certain cases that the teacher hit.

✓ That was from a time when teachers were allowed to hit children before a law was passed banning corporal punishment; there were cases when teachers did hit students.

Original is garbled and ungrammatical (sentence structure errors) with wrong modal use and word order. Rephrase to clear chronological sequence: 'before a law was passed banning corporal punishment' and 'there were cases when teachers did hit students.' Suggestion: break into two clearer clauses and use passive or past forms to describe the law and past behavior.

× Absolutely not. Absolutely not. I will never want it to be a teacher and if ever I have no choice, I would rather have my teaching in so many rules so that I could control the students and everything.

✓ Absolutely not. I would never want to be a teacher in a rule-free school, and if I had no choice I would prefer to teach with many rules so that I could control the students and everything.

Modal and verb form issues: 'I will never want it to be a teacher' is incorrect — use 'I would never want to be a teacher' or 'I would never want to teach' (conditional). 'If ever I have no choice' should be 'if I had no choice' (subjunctive/conditional). 'Have my teaching in so many rules' is ungrammatical; use 'teach with many rules'. Suggestion: use conditional forms ('would') for hypotheticals and correct verb phrases ('to be a teacher', 'teach with rules').

× Because today's kids are very rudely unruly. Rather, they are very unruly.

✓ Because today's kids are very rude and unruly; they are quite unruly.

'Rudely unruly' uses adverb 'rudely' incorrectly to modify adjective 'unruly' (awkward). Use adjectives in parallel: 'rude and unruly' or 'very unruly'. Also 'Rather,' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use appropriate adjectives rather than adverbs to describe people and avoid redundancy.