Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize information with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words and correct minor grammar and punctuation. Also avoid fragment sentences and unnecessary repetition.

예시: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, we must follow a dress code: white shirts and black pants, and students are expected to bring a handbag or backpack. In addition, everyone must arrive before 7:00 AM and classes finish at 12:00 PM.

제안: Correct subject-verb agreement and reduce repetition. State a clear reason and give a concise example or result using linking words like 'because' and 'so'. Avoid vague phrases like 'these days' and split long sentences for clarity.

예시: Yes, I think more rules can help because they teach discipline. For example, if students learn to follow school rules now, they will more easily adapt to workplace regulations later, so they will face fewer problems on the job.

제안: Avoid long negative statements and repetition. Begin with a direct answer, then give specific details and a brief example. Fix repetition and tense consistency.

예시: No, I haven't. I studied in a poor region where schools were overcrowded — sometimes more than 200 students per class — so there were very few dedicated teachers available to give individual attention.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and use linking words (however, if, therefore). Remove filler and repetition. Provide a concise final comment to conclude.

예시: It depends. If most students behave responsibly, fewer rules are better to encourage autonomy; however, if many students break rules, stricter rules are necessary to restore order and fairness.

제안: Combine short fragments into smoother sentences, correct tense and grammar, and give a specific example of strict behaviour rather than repeating negatives. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'also'.

예시: Yes, in high school I had a very strict science teacher. For example, he never allowed students to leave the classroom for the toilet, and he also refused to tolerate arguing or interruptions when we tried to ask questions.

제안: Be direct and concise. State the main reason, correct grammar, and give a clear, specific example. Avoid sentence fragments and unclear phrases like 'a new. Teachers'.

예시: No, I would not. I struggle with communication skills, so in a rule-free school I would find it hard to manage classes and explain lessons. For instance, in my current job I sometimes have difficulty presenting project ideas clearly to colleagues.

× Yes there are.

✓ Yes, there are.

Missing comma after 'Yes' for natural spoken phrasing; also ensure sentence ends with punctuation. This is a minor punctuation issue that improves clarity.

× One of them is the dress code where you need to wear white shirts with black pants and also you need to bring with you.

✓ One of them is the dress code: you need to wear white shirts and black pants, and you also need to bring a bag.

Original sentence has awkward structure and missing object for 'bring with you'. Rewrite to provide the missing noun (bag) and use clearer coordination. Use a colon or comma to introduce the explanation and maintain parallel structure ('wear' follows 'and').

× Handbag and backpack.

✓ You must bring either a handbag or a backpack.

Fragment 'Handbag and backpack.' lacks a verb and is unclear. Make it a complete sentence by adding a verb and clarifying whether one or both items are required.

× In addition to that, students need to come early to school before 7:00 AM and they can leave the school at 12.

✓ In addition, students need to arrive at school before 7:00 AM, and they can leave school at 12:00 PM.

Use 'arrive' rather than 'come' for formality and precision; remove redundant article before 'school' in second clause; specify '12:00 PM' for clarity. Also replace 'In addition to that' with 'In addition' for conciseness.

× I think yes, because these rules is going to teach students to be disciplined.

✓ I think so, because these rules are going to teach students to be disciplined.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'rules' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is'. Use 'so' instead of 'yes' after 'I think' for natural English.

× When they are disciplined right now, in these days, then when they go out to the workplace, then they would immediately and fluently follow the rules without any hesitation or any issues that. Comes their way.

✓ If they become disciplined now, then when they enter the workplace they will follow the rules immediately and confidently without hesitation or any problems that come their way.

Incorrect tense and sentence fragmentation. Use conditional 'If they become disciplined now' and future 'will follow' for likely outcome. Replace 'right now, in these days' with 'now' for clarity, 'fluently' is wrong collocation for following rules so use 'confidently', and remove sentence fragment 'that. Comes their way' by integrating as 'problems that come their way'.

× No, I haven't because I was studying in a poor country where you barely have a teacher to teach you and you barely have a seat to sit on in this classroom because the the the old days.

✓ No, I haven't, because I studied in a poor country where there were barely any teachers to teach and barely any seats in the classroom in the old days.

Tense inconsistency: use simple past 'studied' for past situation. Use 'there were' (there be issue) for existence in past, and 'teachers' plural. Remove repeated 'the' and fix word order for clarity.

× I used to be in a classroom with more than 200 students.

✓ I used to be in a classroom with more than 200 students.

Sentence is acceptable grammatically; keep as is. (No change needed.)

× Usually depends.

✓ It usually depends.

Fragment missing subject. Add 'It' to make a complete sentence.

× If the majority of students are following the rules then it would be better to have fewer rules.

✓ If the majority of students follow the rules, then it would be better to have fewer rules.

Use present simple 'follow' after 'if' for a real conditional referring to general situations; original 'are following' is acceptable but changing to 'follow' is more natural for general statements.

× While if the majority of students are not disciplined or not following the rules, then it would be better to have more rules.

✓ If the majority of students are not disciplined or do not follow the rules, then it would be better to have more rules.

Avoid starting with 'While if'; choose 'If'. Use parallel negative forms and 'do not follow' for present simple negative. This makes the conditional clear.

× So the the the school can restore balance.

✓ So the school can restore balance.

Remove repeated words 'the the the' which are filler hesitations; retain single 'the' for correct grammar.

× He was strict that he would not allow you to go out with class even if you want to go for a toilet.

✓ He was so strict that he would not allow you to leave the class even if you wanted to go to the toilet.

Use 'so strict that' to express degree. Use 'leave the class' rather than 'go out with class'. Match past tense 'wanted' with past 'would not allow'. Use 'go to the toilet' for idiomatic English.

× In addition to that, he will not tolerate anyone talks argue with him.

✓ In addition, he would not tolerate anyone talking or arguing with him.

Verb forms: after 'tolerate' use the -ing form 'talking' or 'arguing'. Use 'would not' to match past habitual strictness. Original mixes modal 'will' with past context.

× Or even if you want to ask about something you didn't you didn't understand.

✓ Or even if you wanted to ask about something you didn't understand.

Remove redundant repetition and use past 'wanted' to match past context and 'didn't understand' for the negative past.

× No, I don't like it because I have issues with communication skills that prevent me from delivering the ideas that I want to express to the other person.

✓ No, I wouldn't like that because I have communication issues that prevent me from conveying the ideas I want to express to others.

Use conditional 'wouldn't like' to answer hypothetical question; simplify 'communication skills' to 'communication issues' for naturalness and use 'convey' for clarity. Also use 'others' instead of 'the other person' for general statements.

× For example, in my work right now, when I present an idea or a new. Teachers then I would struggle to deliver what I have already done in my project.

✓ For example, in my current job, when I present an idea or a new teaching method, I struggle to explain what I have already done in my project.

Original has sentence fragments and unclear nouns ('new. Teachers'). Combine into one clear sentence, replace 'work right now' with 'current job', and use 'struggle to explain' for natural phrasing.