Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, 'One of the rule' should be 'One of the rules', and 'keep a low cut hair' is unnatural; 'keep their hair short' is better. Also, avoid redundancy like 'we were meant to abide by this rule' which can be simplified. Try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: When I was a student, there were several rules at school. For instance, every student had to keep their hair short. These rules were important because they helped maintain discipline and a neat appearance among students.

제안: Your answer has some vocabulary mistakes and unclear phrases, such as 'more obligations' instead of 'more rules' and 'making more roles' which is confusing. Also, the last sentence is incomplete and unclear. Try to use precise vocabulary and complete your ideas with supporting details and linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I believe students would benefit from having more rules at school because these rules promote discipline and create a sense of order. For example, clear guidelines can help students focus better and reduce distractions in class.

제안: Your answer is good and provides specific supporting details. However, to improve, try to use linking words to connect your points smoothly and avoid listing without connectors. Also, consider varying your vocabulary to avoid repetition, for example, instead of repeating 'he', use 'also' or 'moreover'.

예시: Yes, my mathematics teacher does his job very well. He explains difficult concepts clearly so that every student can understand. Moreover, he is very patient and never misses a class, which shows his dedication to teaching.

× One of the rule was that every student must keep a low cut hair.

✓ One of the rules was that every student must keep low-cut hair.

The phrase 'One of the rule' is incorrect because 'one of' should be followed by a plural noun, so 'rule' should be 'rules'. Also, 'a low cut hair' is incorrect because 'hair' in this context is uncountable and does not need an article; 'low-cut' should be hyphenated as it is a compound adjective describing 'hair'.

× Yes, I think students would benefit more from more obligations.

✓ Yes, I think students would benefit more from more rules.

The word 'obligations' is not the best choice here; 'rules' fits better in the context of school regulations. 'Obligations' refers to duties or responsibilities but is less commonly used to describe school regulations. Using 'rules' is clearer and more appropriate.

× Making more roles in the school will help keep a student.

✓ Making more rules in the school will help keep students in line.

The word 'roles' is incorrect here; it should be 'rules' to refer to regulations. Also, 'help keep a student' is vague and ungrammatical; it should be 'help keep students in line' or 'help maintain discipline among students' to convey the intended meaning clearly.