Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevabınızda bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve kelime kullanımı hataları var. "roles" yerine "rules" kullanılmalı. Ayrıca, "there is not allowed to wear makeup" ifadesi yanlış, "wearing makeup is not allowed" daha doğru olur. Cümlenizi daha doğal ve akıcı yapmak için bağlaçlar kullanabilirsiniz.

예시: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must wear a uniform every day to maintain discipline. Moreover, wearing makeup is not allowed, and everyone is required to wear specific school shoes to keep a neat appearance.

제안: Cevabınızda anlam belirsizliği ve dilbilgisi hataları mevcut. "uniform rule benefits for poor children" ifadesi daha açık olmalı. Ayrıca, "A1 cloth" ifadesi anlaşılır değil. Cümlenizi daha net ve doğal yapmak için bağlaçlar ve daha uygun kelimeler kullanmalısınız.

예시: I think the uniform rule benefits poor children because it prevents them from feeling different. For example, they don't need to buy expensive clothes for school and must wear the same uniform every day, which promotes equality.

제안: Cevabınız genel olarak iyi, ancak "whose name was Palin" yerine "named Palin" daha doğal olur. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizde daha fazla bağlaç kullanarak akıcılığı artırabilirsiniz.

예시: Yes, I had a teacher named Palin who was my 10th grade teacher. She was very kind and helpful. For instance, she was flexible about the uniform rules and always supported us during exams, which made learning easier and less stressful.

× Yes, there are several roles at my school.

✓ Yes, there are several rules at my school.

The word 'roles' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'rules' which refers to regulations or guidelines. 'Roles' means parts or functions, which does not fit the question about school regulations.

× Also, there is not allowed to wear makeup and everyone is required to wear specific school shoes to keep a neat appearance.

✓ Also, it is not allowed to wear makeup and everyone is required to wear specific school shoes to keep a neat appearance.

The phrase 'there is not allowed' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'it is not allowed' to indicate prohibition. 'There is' is used to indicate existence, not permission or prohibition.

× I think uniform rule benefits for poor children because when we think about this, it is very useful for them because you need to buy A1 cloth for school and you need to wear every day.

✓ I think the uniform rule benefits poor children because when we think about this, it is very useful for them because you need to buy A1 cloth for school and you need to wear it every day.

The phrase 'benefits for poor children' is incorrect; the correct form is 'benefits poor children' without 'for'. Also, 'wear every day' is missing the object 'it' referring to the uniform, which is necessary for clarity.

× You cannot change it, you cannot do anything to it.

✓ You cannot change it or do anything to it.

The original sentence is a comma splice, joining two independent clauses with a comma. Using 'or' correctly connects the two ideas without creating a run-on sentence.