Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but needs to be more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'we every student must wear a uniform', say 'every student must wear a uniform'. Also, combine sentences to avoid short, choppy statements.

예시: Yes, there are several rules at my school. Firstly, every student must wear a uniform, which helps maintain discipline and unity. Secondly, mobile phones are not allowed during class to avoid distractions and help students focus on their lessons.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain your opinion logically. For example, instead of repeating 'discipline', explain how rules help in daily life.

예시: Yes, I believe students benefit from having more rules because rules teach discipline, which is important not only at school but also in daily life. This helps students develop good habits and stay organized.

제안: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating words. Also, complete your sentences fully to make your answer clear.

예시: Yes, I have a teacher who does her job very well. Her name is Aqua, and she was my math teacher. She explains difficult questions in a simple way and uses examples, which helps me understand the lessons better.

× First of all, we every student must wear a uniform.

✓ First of all, every student must wear a uniform.

The phrase 'we every student' is incorrect because 'we' is a pronoun referring to a group including the speaker, while 'every student' refers to each individual. The correct form is to use 'every student' alone to indicate all students individually.

× we don't use mobile phone during class.

✓ we don't use mobile phones during class.

The noun 'mobile phone' should be plural 'mobile phones' because it refers to the general use by multiple students. Also, 'use' is correct here as a verb, but the noun needs to be plural to match the context.

× Avoid distraction and focus on your lessons during class time.

✓ We avoid distractions and focus on our lessons during class time.

The original sentence is a fragment without a subject. Adding 'We' as the subject and adjusting the verbs to present tense makes it a complete sentence that fits the context.

× Yes, I think a student gets a lot of benefits when they learn more and more rules, because when they learn rules, they get discipline in school, in daily routine and they. Discipline.

✓ Yes, I think students get a lot of benefits when they learn more and more rules, because when they learn rules, they get discipline in school and in their daily routine.

The sentence incorrectly mixes singular 'a student' with plural pronoun 'they'. It is better to use plural 'students' to match 'they'. Also, the last fragment 'and they. Discipline.' is incomplete and should be removed or corrected for clarity.

× Yes, I have a teacher she does her job very well.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher who does her job very well.

The original sentence is a run-on with two independent clauses joined incorrectly. Using 'who' to connect the clauses properly refers to the teacher.

× Her name is Aqua and she she was my math teacher and she explained a very hard question in a very simple way.

✓ Her name is Aqua. She was my math teacher and explained a very hard question in a very simple way.

The sentence has a repeated word 'she' and is a run-on. Splitting into two sentences and removing the repeated word improves clarity and correctness.

× So I can understand very well and she explains a question she with examples so in.

✓ So I could understand very well because she explained questions with examples.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rephrasing it to a complete sentence with proper verb tense and structure improves understanding.