Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat clear but lacks natural flow and contains grammatical errors. Try to use simpler, correct sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, explain the rules more clearly and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, my school has strict rules. For example, we must wear a uniform, and the shoes are specially chosen, so we can only wear those shoes. Also, girls are not allowed to leave their hair open. These rules help maintain discipline and uniformity.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and has grammatical mistakes. Try to avoid repeating words and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, give specific reasons why strict rules are beneficial.

예시: Yes, I believe students benefit from strict rules because they learn discipline, which is important for their future. Moreover, strict rules create a better learning environment and help students focus on their studies.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use correct pronouns and avoid repetition. Also, provide more specific details about how the teacher helps you.

예시: Yes, we have a sports teacher named Malvika who does her job very well. She teaches us various sports that improve our fitness and help us stay healthy. Her guidance motivates us to participate actively in physical activities.

× My school has many strict rules as we need to wear a uniform, very particularly the shoes are selected.

✓ My school has many strict rules, such as we need to wear a uniform; particularly, the shoes are selected.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'as' to mean 'such as' and lacks proper punctuation, which affects clarity. Using 'such as' and proper punctuation improves the sentence structure and meaning.

× We need to wear that shoes only.

✓ We need to wear those shoes only.

The demonstrative pronoun 'that' is singular, but 'shoes' is plural. The correct plural form is 'those' to agree with the plural noun.

× Girls are not allowed to open their heads.

✓ Girls are not allowed to uncover their heads.

The phrase 'open their heads' is incorrect in this context. The correct expression is 'uncover their heads' meaning to remove head coverings.

× Students would have many benefits if the rules are strict in the school as they they'll they will know the discipline very well and it will be helpful in their life.

✓ Students would have many benefits if the rules are strict in the school because they will know discipline very well and it will be helpful in their lives.

The original sentence has redundant and incorrect conjunctions ('as they they'll they will'). Replacing 'as' with 'because' clarifies the cause-effect relationship. Also, 'discipline' does not need 'the', and 'life' should be plural 'lives' to match 'students'.

× Yes, definitely we have. We have a sports teacher named Malvika who does his job very well.

✓ Yes, definitely we have. We have a sports teacher named Malvika who does her job very well.

The pronoun 'his' is incorrect because Malvika is a female name; the correct pronoun is 'her'.

× She teaches us every sports which which are which, which will be helpful for our fitness journey and we can even do more.

✓ She teaches us every sport which will be helpful for our fitness journey and we can even do more.

The phrase 'every sports' is incorrect because 'every' is used with singular nouns; it should be 'every sport'. Also, the repeated 'which' is redundant and confusing; simplifying the sentence improves clarity.